This week’s 100 word photo prompt from Madison’s Friday Fictioneers :
I Met This Guy …
The guy who sold this to me said it would change my life.
I doubted it; ownership of a run-down pick-up truck can hardly be classed as cathartic, but a set of wheels for 100 bucks was pretty tempting.
He also told me he knew of an old barn where I could park it for free while I did it up.
What he didn’t tell me was that he’d killed a girl and stowed her in the barn. Her DNA was all over my car, and soon my DNA was all over this barn.
The guy disappeared.
My life certainly changed.
Ohhhhhhh! This has all the makings of the beginning of a longer tale, or being the synopsis for a longer tale. This is marvelous!
My link is: https://quillshiv.wordpress.com/wp-admin/post.php?post=1010&action=edit
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Thanks for dropping by and commenting. I’ll try the revised link for yours.
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Oh. Gosh. I knew from the title it wasn’t going to end well! Note to self: if it seems too good to be true, be it man or car purchase, it really is too good to be true. My mind was lead to a natural conclusion and I feel really bad for the character. Great job.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/28/state-pride/
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Thanks for commenting 🙂
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I’d say he was fairly honest…that’s definitely a life-changer!
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It certainly is. Can’t say he wasn’t warned.
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Ignore the above link: it’s the wrong one: here is the right one! http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/for-a-moment-sam/
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That settles it. I’m never buying an old car/truck to fix up, and I do mean never! Great little story there.
My story: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/sins-of-a-father/
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Thanks Brandon. $100 – what did he expect? Not this certainly. 🙂
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Pretty funny, in a darkish way! Really a play on the meaning of the word “change,” which we are accustomed to think a positive. You took the prompt a long way – while I just stayed there, at http://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-100-word-story-memorial/
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I visited yours, it was great. Glad you enjoyed mine.
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Oh, it was a setup! You’re a creative thinker yourself; I certainly don’t think of sellers who claim “it’ll change your life” as anything more than scam artists.
For anyone that wants it, here’s mine: http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-abandoned/
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Thanks for commenting! 🙂 Been to yours, nice one.
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Thank you! 🙂
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Dear Sandra,
We each pegged the value of the truck at $100. Pure Coincidence? I think not.
Your story marched off the page at a brisk pace that covered ground and left us no time to lolly gag. I especially loved the way you wrapped it all up with your concluding sentence. Nicely done.
Aloha,
Doug
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Great minds hey Doug? Thanks for commenting – I had to look up ‘lolly gag’ by the way! 🙂
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Incarceration can certainly be cathartic. 🙂 Great story with an evil twist!
My story: http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/03/last-stand-fridayfictioneers.html
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He’ll certainly have time to think! Thanks for visiting and commenting.
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Oh, crap! This was excellent. I loved the twist. Thank you for sharing.
Here’s mine:
http://sarahthestoryteller.wordpress.com
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Thanks for commenting Sarah.
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Great novel take on the photo. The most original piece I’ve seen so far today. Great work! Mine’s here: http://furiousfictions.com.
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Thanks for commenting Joe, and for dropping by.
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Ooo brilliant! Very original and a great twist that you gently worked in.
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Thanks for commenting Emma.
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If it sounds like it’s too good to be true – it usually is. Great story. Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/03/30/truth-and-beauty/
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Thanks for commenting Janet. I’ve tried to leave a comment but there’s something weird going on with my internet connection because I’m in France. Left a comment on the main page on Madison’s site.
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Really neat little twist.
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Thanks Craig.
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Wow… shivers… Nice job. And you never know what people are really up to,do you? I loved it.
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Thanks for dropping by Stacy.
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Quite the twist. I wasn’t expecting that. I also like, at the same time, how upfront you are with the details…Makes you want more.
My link: http://wp.me/p1aAEA-ta
Kris
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Glad you liked it Kris. Thanks for commenting.
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Life AND death changer! WOW! Hope you run with this prompt–great story potential here.
Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html
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Thankyou!
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Ooh, nice little twist. Great job.
Here’s mine: http://unspywriter.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-yay/
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Thanks for commenting.
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OMG! That was awesome. What a neat twist.
Mine’s at http://shirleymccann.blogspot.com/2012/03/fitting-end.html
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Thanks for commenting Shirley.
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Very imaginative tale, Sandra. I loved the irony at the end. Great job!~
mine’s at http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/
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Thanks for commenting Russell.
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Oh, fabulous. I’ve heard of life-changing moments, but never envisioned an old truck starting you off in THAT direction. Fun story, great twist. 🙂
Thanks for commenting on mine. For others:
http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/his-old-chevy-100words-for.html
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Thanks for commenting; it wasn’t really a bargain at all I guess.
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This is a very good story!
Love your style of writing – Crisp and small sentences that leave a lasting effect!
Great work!
Parul
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I wonder whether I instinctively use shorter sentences in pieces with limited wordcount. Thanks for commenting.
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Whatever you do, it works superbly… So, don’t bother with the why’s… there’s enough to wonder anyway! 🙂
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His life certainly changed! I loved the way you gave us a full story arc with all the answers all within 100 words – impressive.
I’m over here: http://wp.me/p1PeVl-69
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Thank you!
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Thanks!
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Wow, Sandra! You outdid all of us. This was absolutely fantastic. A long and winding fable that somehow you were able to make work in 100 words! And it was great reading. Great. Almost like the devil made that deal…How deep can we go on this 100 word project?????
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Thanks Lindaura, there were some really great submissions this week – sign of a good prompt I think.
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I loved it! And your heroine and my hero can share a jail cell. Only yours doesn’t belong there and mind does.
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For everything there is an equal and opposite … Thanks for commenting Michael, enjoyed your submission too.
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Great story. I was surprised by the ending. Quite unexpected but it could happen to any of us. Moral of the story: If it sounds too good to be true, look for a dead body. 🙂
Here is my link:
Cheers!
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Made me laugh. 😀
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There’s usually a catch, but a dead body is pushing it too far I think … 🙂 Thanks for commenting.
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That right there is not a good day. Enjoyable story, Sandra. Even if it is a little dark : )
Here’s mine if you’re interested: http://the-drabbler.com/rusted-race/
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Dark is good. Like yours too. Thanks for commenting.
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Hey, that was pretty good, Sandra. He better get a good attorney.
http://tedstrutz.com/2012/03/30/flash-fridayfictioneers-lost-opportunity/
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Thanks for commenting Ted. I had a problem getting to yours, and that’s not the first time that’s happened, don’t know why. I got there though, after several attempts.
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That was pretty interesting. I liked it. I’d say its worth a little more time and a few more words. A gritty, hardboiled serial killer novel.
I’d read it.
Thanks for your comments on my site.
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I’m not strong on ‘plots’ – ‘observations’ is my bag, but if the situation changes I might return to this one. Thanks for commenting.
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For a crime-story lover like me…this is simply awesome! I love the plot, climax and the promising resolution I can’t wait to see…Thumbs up!!
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Thanks for commenting Charles. 🙂
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Very devilish little twists to this one. I like it. I like it a lot. well done indeed!
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Thanks Jeffrey!
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What a wonderfully dark story! A great twist to a tale that had drawn me in from the start.
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Thank you for commenting Gary.
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Wonderful mini-murder mystery in one hundreds words. I would have thought it impossible, but you pull it off beautifully.
Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneer-4/
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Thank you. Glad you liked it.
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Heeheehee – are you and Doug in cahoots? (http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/pure-coincidence/)
Or is that the going rate for a hunk of rusty scrap metal these days?
I liked it a lot – there was definitely a sense of more to come. I was a little confused about the “car” reference, though. If he drove his car to get the pick up, how did her DNA get all over the car if she was already dead? Or by car did you mean the pick up truck?
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Very observant of you! Yes I did mean pick up truck. Thanks for commenting. 🙂
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Nice story.
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Thanks Janet.
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Enjoyed your story.
Mine is here: http://gardenbyjan.blogspot.com
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Very good and complete in so few words! I really liked it.
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Thanks for commenting Erin.
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What a delightful and creepy story. I feel sorry for the poor sucker. He didn’t see it coming and neither did I. Nice twist. There’s a lesson here…never trust anyone who is eager to sell an old rusty, battered truck for $100. Thanks for visiting mine.
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Glad you dropped by. Thanks for commenting.
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That’s quite a sucker punch! I kind of feel sorry for him, but sometimes too good to be true is just that. Well done! (I didn’t participate this week, so no need to try to find it)
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Yowza. What a fantastic, hair-raising story. Great job! This has the potential to be a powerful short story if not a novel. Run with it!
You’ve read mine but for others it’s http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com
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whoa. fantastic story. Can’t say the guy lied to him though. LOL
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Ouch! Yes! I would say his life was about to change. Well done. One of my favorites from this prompt.
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