I Met This Guy … (Friday Fictioneers – 30 March, 2012)

Posted on March 30, 2012 by Sandra

This week’s 100 word photo prompt from Madison’s Friday Fictioneers :

I Met This Guy …

The guy who sold this  to me said it would change my life.

I doubted it; ownership of a run-down pick-up truck can hardly be classed as cathartic, but a set of wheels for 100 bucks was pretty tempting.

He also told me he knew of an old barn where I could park it for free while I did it up.

What he didn’t tell me was that he’d killed a girl and stowed her in the barn.  Her DNA was all over my car, and soon my DNA was all over this barn.

The guy disappeared.

My life certainly changed.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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82 Responses to I Met This Guy … (Friday Fictioneers – 30 March, 2012)

  1. Quill Shiv says:
    March 30, 2012 at 10:19 am

    Ohhhhhhh! This has all the makings of the beginning of a longer tale, or being the synopsis for a longer tale. This is marvelous!

    My link is: https://quillshiv.wordpress.com/wp-admin/post.php?post=1010&action=edit

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  2. TheOthers1 says:
    March 30, 2012 at 10:30 am

    Oh. Gosh. I knew from the title it wasn’t going to end well! Note to self: if it seems too good to be true, be it man or car purchase, it really is too good to be true. My mind was lead to a natural conclusion and I feel really bad for the character. Great job.

    My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/28/state-pride/

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  3. Madison Woods says:
    March 30, 2012 at 10:34 am

    I’d say he was fairly honest…that’s definitely a life-changer!

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  4. Quill Shiv says:
    March 30, 2012 at 10:41 am

    Ignore the above link: it’s the wrong one: here is the right one! http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/for-a-moment-sam/

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  5. Brandon Scott says:
    March 30, 2012 at 11:17 am

    That settles it. I’m never buying an old car/truck to fix up, and I do mean never! Great little story there.

    My story: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/sins-of-a-father/

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  6. Carlos says:
    March 30, 2012 at 11:36 am

    Pretty funny, in a darkish way! Really a play on the meaning of the word “change,” which we are accustomed to think a positive. You took the prompt a long way – while I just stayed there, at http://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-100-word-story-memorial/

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  7. littlewonder2 says:
    March 30, 2012 at 11:48 am

    Oh, it was a setup! You’re a creative thinker yourself; I certainly don’t think of sellers who claim “it’ll change your life” as anything more than scam artists.

    For anyone that wants it, here’s mine: http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneers-abandoned/

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  8. dmmacilroy says:
    March 30, 2012 at 11:51 am

    Dear Sandra,

    We each pegged the value of the truck at $100. Pure Coincidence? I think not.

    Your story marched off the page at a brisk pace that covered ground and left us no time to lolly gag. I especially loved the way you wrapped it all up with your concluding sentence. Nicely done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  9. Wakefield Mahon says:
    March 30, 2012 at 1:04 pm

    Incarceration can certainly be cathartic. 🙂 Great story with an evil twist!

    My story: http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/03/last-stand-fridayfictioneers.html

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  10. Sarah Paige Berling says:
    March 30, 2012 at 1:17 pm

    Oh, crap! This was excellent. I loved the twist. Thank you for sharing.

    Here’s mine:

    http://sarahthestoryteller.wordpress.com

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  11. Joe Lerner says:
    March 30, 2012 at 1:37 pm

    Great novel take on the photo. The most original piece I’ve seen so far today. Great work! Mine’s here: http://furiousfictions.com.

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  12. EmmaMc says:
    March 30, 2012 at 1:46 pm

    Ooo brilliant! Very original and a great twist that you gently worked in.

    Friday Fictioneers #6 Kicking back, letting go

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  13. Janet says:
    March 30, 2012 at 1:55 pm

    If it sounds like it’s too good to be true – it usually is. Great story. Here’s mine: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/03/30/truth-and-beauty/

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    • Sandra says:
      March 30, 2012 at 1:58 pm

      Thanks for commenting Janet. I’ve tried to leave a comment but there’s something weird going on with my internet connection because I’m in France. Left a comment on the main page on Madison’s site.

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  14. Craig Towsley says:
    March 30, 2012 at 2:15 pm

    Really neat little twist.

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  15. Stacy Bennett-Hoyt says:
    March 30, 2012 at 2:34 pm

    Wow… shivers… Nice job. And you never know what people are really up to,do you? I loved it.

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  16. Kris Kennedy says:
    March 30, 2012 at 2:37 pm

    Quite the twist. I wasn’t expecting that. I also like, at the same time, how upfront you are with the details…Makes you want more.

    My link: http://wp.me/p1aAEA-ta

    Kris

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  17. V. L. Gregory-Pohlenz says:
    March 30, 2012 at 2:45 pm

    Life AND death changer! WOW! Hope you run with this prompt–great story potential here.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  20. Russell says:
    March 30, 2012 at 3:00 pm

    Very imaginative tale, Sandra. I loved the irony at the end. Great job!~

    mine’s at http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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  21. siobhanmuir says:
    March 30, 2012 at 3:00 pm

    Oh, fabulous. I’ve heard of life-changing moments, but never envisioned an old truck starting you off in THAT direction. Fun story, great twist. 🙂

    Thanks for commenting on mine. For others:
    http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/his-old-chevy-100words-for.html

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  22. parul says:
    March 30, 2012 at 3:45 pm

    This is a very good story!
    Love your style of writing – Crisp and small sentences that leave a lasting effect!
    Great work!

    Parul

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  23. elmowrites says:
    March 30, 2012 at 3:58 pm

    His life certainly changed! I loved the way you gave us a full story arc with all the answers all within 100 words – impressive.

    I’m over here: http://wp.me/p1PeVl-69

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  24. Lindaura says:
    March 30, 2012 at 5:06 pm

    Wow, Sandra! You outdid all of us. This was absolutely fantastic. A long and winding fable that somehow you were able to make work in 100 words! And it was great reading. Great. Almost like the devil made that deal…How deep can we go on this 100 word project?????

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  25. Michael Fishman says:
    March 30, 2012 at 5:24 pm

    I loved it! And your heroine and my hero can share a jail cell. Only yours doesn’t belong there and mind does.

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  26. irenelefort says:
    March 30, 2012 at 7:58 pm

    Great story. I was surprised by the ending. Quite unexpected but it could happen to any of us. Moral of the story: If it sounds too good to be true, look for a dead body. 🙂
    Here is my link:

    Forget him not


    Cheers!

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  27. Robert says:
    March 30, 2012 at 8:39 pm

    That right there is not a good day. Enjoyable story, Sandra. Even if it is a little dark : )

    Here’s mine if you’re interested: http://the-drabbler.com/rusted-race/

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  28. tedstrutz says:
    March 30, 2012 at 11:21 pm

    Hey, that was pretty good, Sandra. He better get a good attorney.

    http://tedstrutz.com/2012/03/30/flash-fridayfictioneers-lost-opportunity/

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    • Sandra says:
      March 31, 2012 at 8:20 am

      Thanks for commenting Ted. I had a problem getting to yours, and that’s not the first time that’s happened, don’t know why. I got there though, after several attempts.

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  29. R. N. Fontenot says:
    March 31, 2012 at 7:20 am

    That was pretty interesting. I liked it. I’d say its worth a little more time and a few more words. A gritty, hardboiled serial killer novel.

    I’d read it.

    Thanks for your comments on my site.

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  30. Charles Oyeleke Williams says:
    March 31, 2012 at 9:58 am

    For a crime-story lover like me…this is simply awesome! I love the plot, climax and the promising resolution I can’t wait to see…Thumbs up!!

    Iron Wall

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  31. Jeffrey Hollar says:
    March 31, 2012 at 1:50 pm

    Very devilish little twists to this one. I like it. I like it a lot. well done indeed!

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  32. Gary says:
    March 31, 2012 at 2:51 pm

    What a wonderfully dark story! A great twist to a tale that had drawn me in from the start.

    #FridayFictioneers: Out of Gas

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  33. teschoenborn says:
    March 31, 2012 at 4:19 pm

    Wonderful mini-murder mystery in one hundreds words. I would have thought it impossible, but you pull it off beautifully.

    Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/03/30/friday-fictioneer-4/

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  34. Stacey says:
    March 31, 2012 at 9:58 pm

    Heeheehee – are you and Doug in cahoots? (http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/pure-coincidence/)
    Or is that the going rate for a hunk of rusty scrap metal these days?
    I liked it a lot – there was definitely a sense of more to come. I was a little confused about the “car” reference, though. If he drove his car to get the pick up, how did her DNA get all over the car if she was already dead? Or by car did you mean the pick up truck?

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  37. erinleary says:
    April 1, 2012 at 4:40 am

    Very good and complete in so few words! I really liked it.

    Flash Fiction Friday

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  38. Lora Mitchell says:
    April 1, 2012 at 4:55 am

    What a delightful and creepy story. I feel sorry for the poor sucker. He didn’t see it coming and neither did I. Nice twist. There’s a lesson here…never trust anyone who is eager to sell an old rusty, battered truck for $100. Thanks for visiting mine.

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  39. Sandra says:
    April 1, 2012 at 6:32 am

    Glad you dropped by. Thanks for commenting.

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  40. Judee says:
    April 1, 2012 at 9:17 am

    That’s quite a sucker punch! I kind of feel sorry for him, but sometimes too good to be true is just that. Well done! (I didn’t participate this week, so no need to try to find it)

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  41. Beth Carter says:
    April 1, 2012 at 5:45 pm

    Yowza. What a fantastic, hair-raising story. Great job! This has the potential to be a powerful short story if not a novel. Run with it!

    You’ve read mine but for others it’s http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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  42. Sonia Lal says:
    April 1, 2012 at 9:30 pm

    whoa. fantastic story. Can’t say the guy lied to him though. LOL

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  43. Caerlynn Nash says:
    April 4, 2012 at 9:08 pm

    Ouch! Yes! I would say his life was about to change. Well done. One of my favorites from this prompt.

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