Checkin’ out the Joint (Friday Fictioneers, May 2012)

Madison Woods’ Friday Fictioneers  Photo challenge.

And this really was a challenge!

“Can you pull me up, Dwight?   I can’t seem to get over this ledge.”

“Shhh, Ruby, they’ll hear ya.”

“I thought you said this place closed down.”

“Well there’s folks in there now, new owners maybe.”

“What do they look like?”

“Whadd’ya mean, look like?  Like humans, you know, arms, legs, faces, all that stuff.”

“I mean do they look …well.. er … “

“What?”

“Liberal-minded, I guess.”

“How’d I know?  What’s liberal-minded look like?  What’s eatin’ ya Ruby.”

“Well you know, not everyone approves of lunars and crecopias mixin’ an’ all that.”

“Shoot Ruby,  just get yo’ furry ass up here and see for yo’self.”

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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82 Responses to Checkin’ out the Joint (Friday Fictioneers, May 2012)

  1. jeanelaine says:

    this has to be one of your best LMAO! I loved it!

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  2. JKBradley says:

    Even for Moth-kind folks can be so narrow. This was excellent, Sandra. Funny but also a slice of real mixed in.

    Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flash-fiction-friday-almost/

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  3. The angst of moths. So funny. I’m a huge admirer of your dialogue – you make it seem so easy, but I can’t get anyone or anything to sound real when I try it.

    http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/moths-from-mars/

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  4. Madison Woods says:

    Sandra, this one made me literally laugh out loud. Hahaha, now you’ve got me curious what liberal-mindeds might look like 😉 And like JK mentioned, great slice of real life in there.

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  5. TheOthers1 says:

    Lol! It took me a minute to get that the moths were talking. This really cracked me up!

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  6. The dialogue is beautifully spawned…i love it!

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  7. The whole thing was terrific, but especially this line ” Like humans, you know, arms, legs, faces, all that stuff.”

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  8. rainang says:

    hehe even moths judge by covers 🙂 here’s mine: http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-moth-tidings/

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  9. Linda says:

    OMG, to imagine that moths might have the same psychological fears that we humans think we ‘own’, just brilliant.

    Here’s mine: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/25/fairys-through-the-window/

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  10. Racial prejudice in the moth world – who woulda thought? Very cute and nicely done, as always, Sandra. My two stories, Invasion and Delusion, are at http://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/

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  11. unspywriter says:

    Like everyone else, I laughed out loud. Little do we know what goes on in moth minds.

    Here’s mine: http://unspywriter.wordpress.com/friday-fictioneers/moth-love/

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  12. NIce dialogue take on your local moths there. These moths have really incited a lot of charming tales, and yours was one of them.
    Mine is here:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  13. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    A hilarious tale of prejudice on the wing. Lovely stuff.

    Thanks for visiting mine. Leaving a link for those that follow.

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/mothley-crue-chicks-trouble/

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  14. This is so real, with great funny dialogue. Congratulations. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/fridayfictioneers-preying-mantis/

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  15. Haha… I loved it. I especially enjoyed the lead moth’s country accent. Good job!

    Here’s mine:

    http://jonathanmwright.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneers-flee/

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  16. tollykit says:

    Loved it. A wonderful story.
    For any of your readers interest in mine here’s the link
    http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/moths-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction/

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  17. erinleary says:

    Great dialogue. You did well with an obscure prompt! Loved the last line.

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  18. flyoverhere says:

    LOL, best one yet!

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  19. prosingon says:

    Sandra, you do not disappoint! Very entertaining with a little lesson in tolerance to boot! Great stuff.

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  20. Kwadwo says:

    [“What do they look like?”
    “Whadd’ya mean, look like? Like humans, you know, arms, legs, faces, all that stuff.”]

    Quite a side-splitter.
    By the way, What does liberal-minded look like?

    Here’s mine:

    http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/

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  21. Hi Sandra,
    Yes, most of the crowd about McD’s is liberal-minded. They’d have to be to eat the food! Great use of dialog to develop this, and I loved everything coming from the moths’ POV. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story. Happy waterwaying~

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    • Sandra says:

      I’ve never been inside a McD’s, though I did once visit a Wimpy Bar. 😦 Thanks for commenting. We haven’t been able to get out of the port yet, the river’s running too high and fast…

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  22. Delightful tale with a nice carefree flow to the dialogue. Interesting take on a blended relationship. LOL big time.

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  23. HEEHEEHEEEE. Okay, calming down, now. The dialogue was quick and engaging and the character’s dilemma a great shot at reality. These are voices I’d enjoy hearing again and again.

    Kathy
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/beauty-in-truth/

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  24. Carrie says:

    oh, tragic! prejudices and racism even for moth-kind! Great conversation

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  25. siobhanmuir says:

    LOL, Sandra! Loved the moth prejudice concerns. Great tale. Thanks for commenting on mine. 🙂

    Siobhan

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  26. teschoenborn says:

    Wow, great unexpected use of humor. I’m still chuckling.

    Thanks for the comments on mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-perspective/

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  27. Last line was funny. 🙂 Oh, Ruby, honestly…

    I don’t quite know what lunars and crecopias are, but based on what she’s worried about, makes me wanna find out.

    This was quite entertaining.

    http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/05/26/friday-fictioneers-moth-town/

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  28. Atiya says:

    Oh that’s cute. Politics, awesome. That made me giggle. My share is over here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-best-hubby-ever.html

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  29. oni1138 says:

    I do like your use of dialogue, always descriptive 🙂

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  30. I am embarrassed. I didn’t even consider doing it from the moth pov. Of all the ones I’ve seen doing that, I like yours the best so far. Here’s what I did: http://melodypearson.com/flash-fiction/may-25-2012-moths/

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  31. Nifti says:

    *Giggling. Good one Sandra, cute.

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  32. Lora Mitchell says:

    You had me chuckling, Sandra. When you read mine, you will find we were on the same wavelength this week. I gave my moths, sassy New Yawk accents at first but decided against it….thinking it may confuse the rest of the country/world. lol. Here’s mine:
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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    • Sandra says:

      Thanks for commenting Lora. As a Brit I wouldn’t be able to differentiate between American accents (well apart from deep south perhaps). I wasn’t sure where the accent came from in mine, I modelled it on a comedian we see a lot of over here, Reginald D Hunter. Love him!

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  33. sphrbn says:

    haha, I’ve read this twice and it’s still funny, your great at writing dialogue.

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  34. Such a great conversation. Great job!

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  35. dbfurches says:

    Thanks for a hilarious post. So, what do liberal-minded folks look like?
    Thanks for your comments on my post: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/24/a-scene-from-the-novel-the-alchemists-tower/

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  36. Cute Couple! I enjoyed the dialogue & I can hear their accents in my head! -Also, thanks for stopping by, much appreciated!

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  37. Sandra says:

    Thanks Monique, and welcome to Friday Fictioneers.

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  38. janmorrill says:

    Perfect for these times, Sandra. Very creative use of the prompt! My favorite so far!

    –Jan
    http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flashfriday-fictioneers-last-supper/

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  39. Stacey says:

    LOL. VERY cute!

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