Just Chillin’ (Friday Fictioneers, June 2012)

This week’s photo prompt from Madison Woods’ Friday Fictioneers.

A man needs space, he said.  Time to reflect.  Away from his woman.

Other men, he said, might go drinkin’, chasin’ women, killin’ stuff in the woods and streams.  That wasn’t for him, he was different, he said.

Other men, I thought, wouldn’t spend our last dollar on a blimp.

He needed solitude, silence he said;  so every weekend he’s up there, chillin’ out in the sky.

What is it they say?  If you love something, set it free.  If it comes back to you, it’s yours…

I cut the tether rope.

A woman needs to know where she stands.

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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64 Responses to Just Chillin’ (Friday Fictioneers, June 2012)

  1. He should have gooten the hint when you painted ‘Good Riddance’ on the side of the blimp, Sandra. Great story to start us off with.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  2. Mayumi-H says:

    Great short story, Sandra! 😀 I really felt like this was going to be one of those longing for love stories, but that little twist at the end made me laugh out loud! It’s beautiful to see two people in love, of course, but it’s somehow just as beautiful to see them go free.

    (I also really liked the use of contracted verbs you used. It gave the piece a very colloquial feel…I could well understand how a man who’d speak that way would want his solitude.) Nice job creating two characters we can identify with. 🙂

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  3. TheOthers1 says:

    Ahahahahaha. This was fabulous. That last line just made it for me. Lol.

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  4. Nifti says:

    I love it. Teaching…

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  5. Brandon Scott says:

    Nicely done, Sandra. Interesting little twist at the end.

    http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/the-ogre/

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  6. I totally laughed out loud at this one! Terrific!!! Here’s my go: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneers-6812/

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  7. flyoverhere says:

    This one made me appreciate what I have, LOL! Very good take on this prompt. Here is mine http://wp.me/p1LMPs-jL

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  8. stevesw says:

    I liked your post. Definitely a different ending. My link:
    http://simplicitylane.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/the-blue-sky/

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  9. rochellewisoff says:

    Tee hee hee hee ha ha. Loved the ending. One cagey woman there.
    Mine’s at http://www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com/2012/06/wings.html

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  10. rainang says:

    I really liked this piece. A nice end too…and nothing like chilling in the sky 🙂

    http://writersclubkl.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneer-spread-your-wings-and-fly/

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  11. rich says:

    well done, miss. love the last line.

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  12. Toooooo funny–I’m still chuckling. Great job!

    mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

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  13. Kaitlin says:

    Hahaha, oh, I love it. It’s just silly enough not to get you down. http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/06/08/friday-fictioneers-6/

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  14. Oh you made me laugh! That was so adorable, gritty and telling and funny as hell.
    Really good tale, Sandra. I have got to get my imagination back…I am stalled somewhere and nothing is happening in my mind…
    Lindaura
    For those who have not seen mine it is here:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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    • Sandra says:

      It’ll come Linda, don’t push it. Think of it as your imagination regrouping ready for attack…. and thanks for commenting, glad you liked it.

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  15. This is good, Sandra, with a twist of double meaning. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/fridayfictioneers-emily/

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  16. I laughed out loud when I got to ” wouldn’t spend our last dollar on a blimp” then I laughed more uncertainly at the finish. You got me; excellent writing (as is usual),Sandra.
    Mine: http://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneer-100-word-story-airship/

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  17. cutting the tether was great. Nicely done, Sandra.

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  18. *Applause* The ‘voice’ is wonderful, and the punchline priceless. I so enjoy your entries.

    Kathy
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/on-the-bright-side/

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  19. Hi Sandra,
    This one had lots of ironic humor and a really strong voice. It’s complete as a v short story, but I sure would love to hear more from this character. Lovely line about the tether at the end.
    cheers,
    Laura
    http://www.westcoastwriters.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneers-above-clouds.html

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  20. elmowrites says:

    Ha ha, Sandra! I love what you did there, and how much power you gave the woman. One of my favourites today.
    I’m over here:
    http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fiction-blimps-and-balloons/

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  21. Madison Woods says:

    I laughed out loud at that one. I’m assuming he wasn’t prepared for a *real* ride?

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  22. Kwadwo says:

    I smiled as soon as I saw the title for this piece.
    Once again you give us food for thought spiced with a bit of comedy.

    Mine is here: http://logo-ligi.com/2012/06/08/radiant-flight/

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  23. erinleary says:

    Your women always get the last word and the last laugh. Love it.

    http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/flash-friday-fiction-4/

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  24. Brian Benoit says:

    Hell hath no fury? Yikes! I liked the development of the voice, the building sarcasm that colors the comments about the husband — and especially the sharp conclusion. Nice work!

    Brian (http://pinionpost.com/2012/06/08/11-2-seconds/)

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  25. Joyce says:

    That woman was pretty gutsy in the end. Guess she didn’t have to worry about him coming back as he drifted out to space and she did indeed stand alone. Sound a little like a lot of one sided relationships today. I like the story. It is convincing.

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  26. Joyce says:

    Oops. Sorry. Guess I forgot to leave my link again. Here it is, and my FF story for today.
    http://jemj47.wordpress.com

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  27. Linda says:

    Ooooh – nothing as bad as a woman scorned eh! As someone who has a ‘flyer’ in my life – I’m just glad that he has a plane he can steer 🙂

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  28. Sandra says:

    Thanks for dropping by Linda. You wouldn’t catch me in a glider, hot air balloon or anything without power. In fact, you’re lucky to catch me on a plane at all … 😦

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  29. Hey Sandra…i loved the piece, its ending especially…a question though…’Other men, i thought, wouldn’t spend our last dollar on a blimp’ is it a collective noun or possessive noun in the usage of ‘Our’ here?

    http://seewilliams.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/dana/

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    • Sandra says:

      I pondered this as I wrote it. If I’d said “wouldn’t spend their last dollar on a blimp” it would make it sound like it was his own money he was spending. And I didn’t want to go down the path of “his and his wife’s last dollar”, so in the end, though it didn’t sound quite right, I went with this. Thanks for commenting.

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  30. jake kale says:

    And now he’s chillin’ somewhere over the Pacific. I don’t know if this is the response you were hoping for, but now I want my own blimp! I’m single, so I should be safe!

    Here’s my entry.
    http://themasterofhisdomain.com/2012/06/09/no-more-shop-talk-100-word-flash-fiction-comic/

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