Victory Roll (Five Sentence Fiction, August 2012)

Lillie McFerrin’s one word prompt this week was Victory.  (This is an idea I’ve tried before in a longer format for Long Story Short).

After I’d finally singled her out from all the others, it wasn’t too difficult to penetrate her consciousness;  she leaves plenty of space in there as she goes about her business – writing mental lists and losing them, promising to call people and forgetting them – oh yes, plenty of space there all right, as I’d known there would be.

Once in there, it was all down to furtling around, pushing things aside, knocking things down, and finding a suitable spot where I could firmly plant myself, destroying any other seeds that might germinate into distractions, and making sure I was up there, right at the forefront.

Then it was a question of getting her to co-operate, which was much harder than I’d thought; some people just don’t recognise the honour we bestow upon them and they’ll prevaricate, get side-tracked, hit the bottle or run up blind alleys until we can get them pinned down, ready to spring into action.

But this morning, after several weeks of persuasion and strong-arming tactics, I think she’s finally surrendered, turning off the television and her phone, putting on a pot of strong coffee and settling herself down before her laptop; it begins here.

Today, we will start our journey, and before too long I will see the light of day, soaring out into the ether on a victory roll to meet all those who used to mill around the universe like me, other tales without a teller, stories without words;  all of us searching for writers who could give us birth.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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18 Responses to Victory Roll (Five Sentence Fiction, August 2012)

  1. TheOthers1 says:

    Ah, very nice. Initially I thought “it” was a demon possessing her. Highlighting the process quite nicely I think. I love the last sentence.


  2. Oh yes.. I like that.. I to was thinking demon so very cleverly written..x


  3. Janelle says:

    At first I was imagining some kind of nasty habit or addiction perhaps, but I much prefer what it turned out to be! The woman, particularly as she’s described in the first sentence, reminds me of myself! Making mental lists and losing them, being forgetful – yup, that’s me alright! This is a beautiful idea, that last sentence is just magic. I’ll think about this piece now whenever a new writing idea strikes me!


  4. sinosheila says:

    I was intrigued and finally a bit baffled but I enjoyed this .


  5. ahblack57 says:

    I love the idea of a story in search of a writer; a genie inside a magic lamp in need of a little rub; a cat trapped in closet waiting for the next person to come looking for a shirt… Great stuff as usual.


    • Sandra says:

      I often feel as though I’ve been ‘chosen’ by a story, particularly on days when I’m lacking inspiration and I’ll just start writing and see where it takes me. 🙂


  6. You had me guessing right up until the point when you mentioned “laptop” – then I sort of knew you were referring to story ideas floating around in the universe, waiting to be captured…
    Wonderful writing!


  7. Wow Sandra, love your style and I was “her” in that last paragraph! Enjoy your writing and cruising the waterways, sounds idyllic!


  8. Excellent!!! You had my full attention from the first sentence. All the way through my mind was running with the possibilities, and then the last sentence left me with a huge smile. I love this 🙂


  9. vbholmes says:

    Good story–took a minute to catch on which makes for a fun read.


  10. Sandra says:

    Thank you! Glad you understood where I was going with this.


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