The one word prompt from Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence fiction this week is ‘Awkward’.
“So tell me Jenny, how is it going with my husband then?’ queried Sarah, as she carefully set her coffee cup back on its saucer and reached out for another chocolate éclair.
Her friend choked, spraying the pristine white tablecloth with half-masticated vanilla slice, causing the occupants of nearby tables to look up in initial consternation, quickly tempered with distaste.
“I’ve always found,” continued Sarah, picking at a well-manicured fingernail, “that men are so much more…er… creative, in the earlier stages of a relationship, but then familiarity sets in and everything becomes routine – until, of course, someone comes along to inject a little long-overdue spice into the situation.”
Riveted to her seat, Jenny glanced wildly around the tearoom, cheeks crimson, and eyes watering under the speculative gaze of the other customers.
“Are we nearly through here, do you think?” said Sarah, picking up her handbag, “because if we are, you must let me get the bill; I rather think I owe you, my dear.”
Oh, to have the balls…
Nice one, Sandra 🙂
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Yes, it would be a different response to an age old issue… 🙂 Thanks for dropping by.
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Dear Sandra, I couldn’t restrain myself and went ahead and passed on the Blog of the Year Award 2012 to you. Hope you don’t mind…
http://stepbackfromtheedge.wordpress.com/2012/12/18/an-unexpected-honour-blog-of-the-year-2012-award/
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Thank you so much Mikaela. I don’t normally do anything with these awards, but for you … I may make an exception. 😉
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This is excellent. I was riveted from start to finish.
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Thank you Andrew!
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Quite close to perfection. I loved it. If I had overheard this conversation I probably would have followed them to hear more, and continue following once they split. Trouble is, which woman would be more interesting to follow?
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Thanks Paul, glad you liked it. I think Sarah might have the edge over Jenny. 🙂
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One up to Sarah. Love it .
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Thanks Sue! 🙂
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Erm… so realistic! And yet, would you? 😀
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Not many would, or could I guess. 🙂 Thanks for dropping by.
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Sandra, you have done it again! Perfect pinpoint on the situation – you got right to the heart of the matter. So very well told! The dialogue…er…monologue is spot on. Loved it!
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Thanks Jo-Anne. Imagine being someone’s mistress, only to find that you’ve actually added spice to his relationship with his wife. Wow!
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Devious and delicious, Sandra. I really enjoy your ballsy ladies! 🙂
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Thanks Mayumi, I really must try to feature a shrinking violet sometime soon, if only for the exercise. 🙂
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Sarah remains so calm and unflustered… and Jenny didn’t see it coming! Brilliant!
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Yes, wouldn’t it be nice if one could. 😉 Thanks for dropping by.
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nice work -Ive been on the computer for over a week=sick-then the cable got messed up, I had 977 messages piled u, so obviously I wont be able to do a lot-still not well-rough week. Hope you are doing well–beebeesworld
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Sorry you’ve not been well; hope all is better soon.
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Wow! Yea, that’s the definition of awkward. I mean, I could see that happening. Nicely done.
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I’d love to be able to react in this way. Thanks for dropping by.
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Whoa! If I were Jenny, I would be thinking twice about continuing my relationship with Sarah’s husband. Not a woman you’d want to stay on the wrong side of, I’d say.
Really enjoyed this, Sandra!
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Sarah was pretty cool, I think. And I think this might have been the parting shot in the relationship. Thanks for dropping by.
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Wonderful take on the prompt. You had me at, “how is it going with my husband.” Start to finish, top to bottom, that was perfect. I’m glad I wasn’t munching on my morning “vanilla slice” or I’d be cleaning off my monitor. Thanks for kicking off my day.
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Wickedly good! I love how blase’ Sarah acts throughout, as she calmly puts her friend in her place 🙂
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You played that hand extremely well, Sandra. Awkward indeed!
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