This Way Please… (Five Sentence Fiction, October 2012)

This week’s one word prompt from Lillie McFerrin’s Five Sentence Fiction Challenge was:




Summoning every last ounce of her energy, she crawled painfully towards her car, half blinded by blood streaming from her forehead.

She had no idea where he’d gone, but sensed that if she didn’t take immediate advantage of his absence she would not survive this night.

Hauling herself into the driving seat with difficulty, she reached for the ignition keys, praying that wherever he was, he wouldn’t hear the engine springing into life.

A clawlike hand seized her wrist, gripping with such strength that her fingers opened, stiffened, paralyzed, whilst another hand of steel gripped her throat, squeezing… crushing… until welcome darkness claimed her.

Later that night, twenty miles further down the road, the same hands reached out of the shadows to position a black and orange road sign in the middle of the quiet country lane; the killing-fest was underway.


About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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17 Responses to This Way Please… (Five Sentence Fiction, October 2012)

  1. Jo-Anne Teal says:

    Yikes! …until welcome darkness claimed her… Sandra, this was frightening – in all good ways. :)))


  2. Sarah Mac says:

    Incredibly chilling, great writing!


  3. TheOthers1 says:

    OhEmGee! This is the scary movie that I wouldn’t watch because I’d have serious nightmares. Great job on this! Dropped me right into the scene and scared the crap out of me.


  4. Judee says:

    I love it when you write suspense. So vivid!


  5. Sisyphus47 says:

    Well… how unlucky, and now I’ll be checking and re-checking every time I see the sign: “Deviation”! Well done Sandra, sounds so realistic 🙂


  6. Sandra says:

    Thanks Honore (sorry, can’t see how to do accents on WP). I’m always nervous about detour signs myself. 😦


  7. Andrew says:

    How deliciously dark and dangerous – I loved this piece!

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  9. ahblack57 says:

    There are definitely dark corners in that writer’s mind of yours. I’m talkin’ wet your pants dark. A good one to tell the little kiddies on Halloween… Good stuff.


  10. Uh-oh! I’ll never complain about being stuck in traffic again. What a fun, scarey piece!


  11. Chilling…and creepy! The sort of horror you imagine when you’re out on a dark night and wish to be tucked up at home!


  12. Rossanda says:

    I like that we’re in her POV and then find out what happens once she’s done for.


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