This week’s Friday Fictioneers prompt photo is courtesy of Rich Voza. Thanks Rich, great photo.
(And it’s my birthday on the 15th, Rochelle. Yup, I was one of those lucky kids to whom people said “We’ll get you something big for Christmas to do for both.” ) 😦
Imelda said it gets easier; but it doesn’t.
Escort service perhaps, but it boils down to the same thing, doesn’t it?
Whorin’.
Which room did they say? Ah, that’s it, 740.
I breathe deeply, fluff up my hair.
We need the money, I can do this. The mortgage is overdue, and the school fees are coming up. It’s only till he finds another job. Just another punter, one more quick lay.
The client opens the door, and I find myself staring into the stricken face of my father.
Now, I reflect, might be a good time to ask about a loan.
Wow, what a terrible moment for everyone!! I can’t believe two of you already have a similar take on this prompt. Remind me never to run like the wind if I ever see a hallway like this!!
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Thanks for commenting.
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Ooh, that’s an awkward moment. Like her quick thinking at the end!
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That’s an opportunist if ever I saw one. Thanks for commenting.
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Yikes. What a predicament! I don’t know whether to gasp or laugh. So well done, Sandra!
My husband’s birthday is also Dec. 15. 🙂
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Thanks Rochelle. And Happy Birthday to your husband.
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Ha!
Sad ha, ironic ha, sardonic ha – ho ha!
Nice write.
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Thank you!
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Dear Sandra,
So it turns out it was just another punter. I really liked this story of your. It had a great feel to it. Snappy, fast and realistic, and then the twist at the end. Perfect.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks Doug!
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I wonder, did she ever tell her mother, or just kept on bribing her father!
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It could, as they say, turn out to be ‘a nice little earner’. Thanks for commenting Sue.
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Embarassing!
Well written.
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I also liked the twist at the end. I’m not sure she did 🙂
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Thanks Abraham! 🙂
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Brilliant story Sandra. A really great ending that I didn’t see coming, and the last line rounds it off perfectly.
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Thanks Claire, glad you liked it.
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Some great timing here Sandra, the ability to think on her feet like that should have her back on track in no time.
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Thanks Anne, I was going to call it ‘Thinking on Your Feet’. 🙂
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Hooker Humor.
Both serious and light, a good read. Thanks.
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Thank you!
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Sandra,
I love the twist and a big story in a few words, great work 🙂
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Thanks Maire, glad you liked it.
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Well done, Sandra. Yes indeed, a good time to negotiate for a loan–or a bribe. Let’s make sure Mother doesn’t hear of this.
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She could be set for life here Russell. Thanks for commenting.
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Sandra,
My favorite from you so far. Nice work.
Tom
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Thanks Tom!
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This story gave me what I have never had before … my own literary WTF moment!
(meaning: ya had me by the twig and berries).
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‘twig and berries’ – great phrase! 🙂 Thanks for commenting.
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Talk about Daddy issues…hee hee.
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Thanks Heidi. 🙂
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Good one. Depending on the situation between her and her husband (i.e. does he know?), she might be in a good bargaining position 8^)
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Too true! Thanks for dropping by.
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Hi Sandra,
Best whorin’ story, far from borin’, even if you’re foreign, it left me roarin’. Ron
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Good rhymin’, good timin’ Ron. 🙂 Thanks for commenting.
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holy crap, i’m cringing. well done.
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Thanks Rich. 😉
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My God! That’s terrible!
I had seen a french movie not so long ago where the girl runs into her neighbor, a close friend of her father’s.
Times when you just want to disappear in thin air!
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Thanks Parul!
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Now that was an interesting surprise! I loved the last line about the loan. 😉
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Thanks Judee, good to hear from you.
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D’oh… That’s when they shut the door and everyone tries to forget it ever happened.
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🙂 Thanks David.
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Second one I’ve read on this theme, must be all those anaonymous doors. Well done again, Sandra. Love to know how the conversation went after he opened the door!
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Thanks Pete!
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Holy crap! That was quite the quicker. Perfect building of tension and pow. Great last line, and a lot of nuance there.
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/the-purge/
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Thanks Maggie, glad you liked it.
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wow – at least she can think quickly on her feet. A sort adult “gift of the magi”
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Never saw it that way Bill, thanks for commenting.
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Yikes! (Thank god I didn’t have a daughter.)
That’s a twist worthy of Alfred Hitchcock with a touch of Quentin Tarantino. Cool title too; you could have called it “Whorin,” but this was much better.
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Thanks Perry. I see I’ve used this title before though. Nothing new under the sun I guess.
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haha, the humour’s coming thick and fast this week. A terrible moment, but I love the last line! Great story.
I’m 31st December, but my parents always put their foot down about combined presents, so I didn’t do too badly out of the proximity to Christmas … except the 11 month present-drought for the rest of the year!
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Somehow, 31st December seems further away from Christmas than birthdays occurring during the run up and I’m glad your parents saw it that way too. I remember one year my parents saying that they couldn’t afford to spend much on my birthday with all the other expenses that they had for Christmas. They only used that excuse once, though, given the temper tantrum I flew into. 🙂 Even at that age I could see the flaws in the rationale; it wasn’t like they didn’t know it was coming… Sheesh! This month we’re changing the car, and my husband keeps on telling me it’s my birthday and christmas present combined… he knows how to get me going!
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ooh, that’s fighting talk. Tell him he’s not getting any presents for Christmas because Santa doesn’t think he’s been good.
mind you, we’re seriously considering buying our son a tumble dryer for Christmas … it’s not like he’ll know!!
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Love it. Great twist at the end as is your usual. I enjoy the way your mind works. Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/12/07/flash-friday-fiction-16/
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Thanks Erin, glad you liked it. I enjoyed yours too.
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Wow, that twist is terrible, and funny at the same time.
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Thank you! 🙂
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Oh My! Now that I picked my jaw up off the floor, This is truly… I don’t know what to say. !!
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Thank you for dropping by Mari!
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I actually laughed, then frowned, then laughed again. Wow, I wonder who was more embarrassed?
🙂
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I don’t think anyone got off lightly in the embarrassment stakes! 🙂 Thanks Jackie.
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Oh my, oh my. There’s a relationship that will never be the same. You do a great job of introducing the character with her thoughts, but what really brought her to life for me was the last line. She’s going to cope no matter what happens!
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Thanks Sharon, glad you liked it.
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Wow. (If I have interpreted this right). Looks like his secret vice, and her secret life. What to do, where to run. Either a quick decision is needed, or confess each of them and bare their souls, only. A room can hide many a surprise and face.
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Confession is good for the soul, but I suspect both would claim it was a ‘one-off’.
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Brilliant story – and I’m a Christmas baby too so I feel your pain 🙂
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Ah! I hope you have a lovely birthday AND christmas. And thanks for dropping by.
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Damn. LOL. That’s just indicative of dysfunctional families today. Will she ask for that loan? And daddy will pretend like that’s the real reason she’s there and it’s not odd that she’s dressed like a whore or knew how to find him. D’oh! Oh my.
Happy Birthday!
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Yes, I think they could both wangle their way out of this with a bit of imagination. And a loan might ease the exercise. Thanks for commenting Debra.
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Oh, Wow! Sandra!! A good one, indeed. They both have some explaining to do. Great twist and unexpected. Enjoyed it!
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Oh, and Happy Birthday!!
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Thank you! I’ll do my best. 🙂
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Ha! Everything in this story even the tabu of incest. I’m sure they both wanted to crawl away somewhere and die. Well done.
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Thanks for dropping by and commenting.
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Now, that was my type of fun!!!
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2012/12/08/friday-fictioneers-9/
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Thanks Scott, glad you liked it.
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I can’t believe these back-to-back stories. I just finished commenting on “Sugar-Daddy” Santa (40again) and here is Sandra with her whore coming face-to-face with her real daddy. What are the odds of this happening? Loved both stories. Happy Birthday, Sandra.
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What a twist! Great story!
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Whoa! Talk about your worst nightmare if your on the Game. Top story, brill 🙂
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