Now That You Mention It… (Trifextra Challenge, February 2013)

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I’ve been thinking.

Hmmm?

About us

What about us?

I don’t think it’s working

What?

You and me.  I need some space

Oh… right

What?

You got it

Huh?  Just like that?

Yep.

This week’s Trifextra Weekend Challenge was ‘dialogue’   33 word limit.   Sometimes that’s all it takes.  😦

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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35 Responses to Now That You Mention It… (Trifextra Challenge, February 2013)

  1. A mutual break up in 33 words – brilliant! 🙂

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  2. Sometimes we overcomplicate things. Your dialogue is proof that it can be simple! Loved it.

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  3. deanabo says:

    Ouch! That has to hurt!

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  4. writelindy says:

    I love how you created understanding between two people in so few words. It sounds as though that may be one of the few times for those two.

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  5. Draug419 says:

    I can see where this is heading…*gulp*

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  6. rangewriter says:

    Oh yeah. I think I’ve heard this one before! Very REAL!

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  7. atrm61 says:

    Hope that’s what the initiator was looking for or else as Deana said,it must have hurt like hell!Great piece-loved the crispiness here:-)

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  8. Oooooo…. I’ve been there, and it’s a delicious ending (as long as it’s a mutual feeling.)

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  9. Dawn Lamond says:

    “I’ve been thinking” is always a loaded phrase, fraught with peril – great take on the prompt! 🙂

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  10. Suzanne says:

    Nicely done! Love the way the power shifts over the course of the conversation.

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  11. jannatwrites says:

    I wish my breakups had gone that well…even when thinks were just awful either me or the other person didn’t want to let go!

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  12. Not only did you handle the breakup deftly, you showed why they’re breaking up. 🙂

    janet

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  13. muZer says:

    Sometimes that’s all it takes, indeed. Great dialogue, flowed so smoothly ..

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  14. mairzeebp says:

    Could see the conversation. Conveyed so much in 33 words. One of the best I’ve read!

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  15. What a lovely twist!

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  16. Love your conversation.

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