Unconvinced (Friday Fictioneers, March 2013)

Beth Carter

“Oh I don’t know honey, where would we put the kids?”

“They slot in those tyres in the back, see the grooves?”

“Right… not much space for the groceries then.”

 “They’ll go in the engine compartment.”

“Will there be room?”

 “Yeah sure, it’s a sewing-machine engine.”

 “Is that powerful enough?”

 “With the supplementary rocket fuel propellers, yeah.”

“They’ve thought of everything then.”

“It’s a masterpiece of design, Lois – see the underwear slot?”

“Hmm..I don’t like the jewellery box though.”


 “And the photos, they’ll have to go.”

(sighs)  “Lois, it’s a car, right?  Not a mobile home.”

“S’pose so hon…

This week’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt was courtesy of Beth Carter.  Plenty to see in this one, but  you might need to use the zoom facility to get the relevance of the ‘underwear slot’.  Nice one Beth.  🙂

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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90 Responses to Unconvinced (Friday Fictioneers, March 2013)

  1. Iris says:

    It make my brain smoke trying to fit all this stuff in there. Totally cool!


  2. deanabo says:

    This is great! I could see the horror on her face from the thought of having to live in the car.


  3. Hahahaha. I love it, Sandra.
    Loved the “supplemental rocket fuel propellers” line.
    and it does look like some mobile homes I’ve seen.
    Nice entry and a nice start to my day.



  4. Lois and underwear got me think about wether his name is Clark? I know that telephone booths are getting scarce..


  5. kz says:

    “It’s a masterpiece of design, Lois – see the underwear slot?” haaahaahaa ^^ loved your story. great take on the prompt ^^


  6. yepiratehere says:

    Oh majestic! The lines just got better and better, till the end, when the poor simple fellow thought he had to explain his clever knowledge…but what lines!!!


  7. yarnspinnerr says:

    I envy your imagination. Just fabulous. 🙂


  8. That’s awesome. The “supplementary rocket fuel propellers” made me laugh. 🙂


  9. Thought for a minute you were describing my ’75 Super Beetle which had much more space that one would imagine. 🙂 That was fun.


  10. Wow! Lois is a brave woman if she climbs in that machine. Rocket fuel.


  11. That was fun… Really pleased it’s fiction…! 😉


  12. vb holmes says:

    Somehow, jewelry and that car don’t exactly go together. Great word picture of the family squeezing in–fun take on the prompt.


  13. The husband is quite the optimist but Lois doesn’t seem to be convinced. Fun take on the prompt, Sandra. I can imagine the children squeezed into the tire slots.


  14. I feel like times are very very hard in this story. I do see one of them trying to make the most of things. Good story.


  15. rich says:

    after that conversation, it just might be a mobile home now. well done.

    jewellery . two L’s?


  16. Joe Owens says:

    An imaginative discussion about the “car’s perks.” I just wonder if you need a loan for such a all encompassing set of wheels. Lois may still need some convincing.


  17. denmother says:

    Such fun dialogue between the two. I wonder what decision was made.


  18. JKBradley says:

    Felt like they were about to embark upon a steampunk driven adventure, in Victorian garb and googles.


  19. elappleby says:

    Lovely dialogue here – and hilarious. I hope she said no, though!


  20. nightlake says:

    a very nice one:)


  21. ”With the supplementary rocket fuel propellers, yeah.”–favorite line. nice little piece of writing Sandra.


  22. i think those two are befuddled enough they deserve to live there! Well-done dialogue.


  23. Parul says:

    I really like the dialogues. Must say, the couple and the car – made for each other! lol


  24. Anne Orchard says:

    Great dialogue, and I think the kind of conversation they’ve had before – how many other hare-brained ideas has he had?


  25. Trudy says:

    I love the absurdity of it all! You had me at the mental image of slotting the kids in the tyre grooves!


  26. Sunshine says:

    i love your story, as you take us through all the fine features of this car…she forgot to ask about the roof…what happens when it rains. ha ha. thanks, your story starts my day with a smile. 🙂


  27. t says:

    Oh my God, it’s almost like you’ve met my parents and used them for this prompt – lovely job!


  28. Bee says:

    Thanks for the chuckle. The dialogue is superb — great work as always, Sandra!


  29. Lois is right to hesitate. Although, I do have to admit, the car is ingenious. Maybe he’s smarter than he appears.


  30. Beth Carter says:

    Great job, Sandra. Love your use of my photo! You thought of it all–where to put the kids, groceries, and how those photos have to go. lol.


  31. I’m afraid I am with the husband; I too am “unconvinced”.


  32. rgayer55 says:

    I like the photos. They go well with the Mardi Gras beads. This vehicle is fully loaded.


  33. unspywriter says:

    Great story, and nice dialogue between the characters.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/eye-of-the-beholder/


  34. So, inventive. Great, Sandra! You’ve thought of every nook and cranny.


  35. Very imaginative! I don’t think I’d be getting in that car


  36. petrujviljoen says:

    Made me laugh! Well done!


  37. Hi Sandra,
    Who could resist a car with an underwear slot? Great fun interplay in your dialog and lots of innovation. Well done as usual. Ron


  38. Pretty charming piece of dialogue and no dead bodies!


  39. billgncs says:

    Hi Sandra — do you have all of those things in your boat ? If so, it sounds like a rocket propelled fun time.


  40. Ann Isik says:

    Reminds me of the story of our first car. We used to say it was a lawn mower with a roof. We called it Chuckles as it sounded like it was laughing as it rolled along. And we used to put our two cats in those tyre grooves! (Not really). Thanks for the story. Very funny! Ann


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