Hen Party (Friday Fictioneers, May 2013)

Photo courtesy of Ted Strutz.

Great photo prompt from Friday Fictioneers

Thought I might not make it this week  as we were driving through France, but had a brief moment of inspiration over breakfast this morning.  Thanks to Rochelle as always for the hard work she puts into making this happen every week.

Every night Annie focussed on that bottle, second shelf, third from the right.

Usually it glowed deep purple, but would occasionally glitter silver.

Tonight it undulated deep emerald tones.

“Drink me,” it keened.

Casting a wary eye round the empty bar, the bartender reached to set the bottle down beside her with a glass, before disappearing out the back.

“Where’s Annie tonight?” asked a regular later, nodding at the empty stool.

“Meeting up with the other girls,” the bartender said, smiling.

On the shelf the bottle radiated an excitable ruby hue, before dimming to a contented purple once again as another girl entered the bar.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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66 Responses to Hen Party (Friday Fictioneers, May 2013)

  1. Sheila Cornelius says:

    A story that intrigued me right from the start, with the mysterious glowing bottle. But I didn’t get what happened -me being thick, I expect


  2. Ooh. wicked, and well written.
    Ladies Night In, I guess.



  3. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    Dark and delicious, darling! I’ve always been a fan of The Twilight Zone, particularly the original series, and this one would have fit nicely as one of those episodes.


  4. vb holmes says:

    Methinks the meeting of the girls is one to be avoided. Like the use of colors to reinforce the story. Good one, Sandra.


  5. Intriguing, Sandra. I don’t even want to know what about breakfast made this pop into your mind. 🙂 I’ve heard of losing yourself in the bottle before, but this goes beyond that. Good job!



  6. well, we see that bartender’s true colors!


  7. paulmclem says:

    Ah…not so much Genies in a lamp but women in a bottle. Weird but my cup of tea. Congrats!


  8. Yikes! Well done!


  9. Sheila says:

    I love the magic element to this and the idea of the bottles calling out to people as they change colors. Nice one!


  10. Catherine Louise Gurganus says:

    Spooky and interesting! Love to be a fly on the wall at that meeting…heehee.


  11. Jan Brown says:

    Very intriguing! I hope the girls come back from their mysterious gathering!


  12. Mystikel says:

    Creepy and unique. This story really stands out. Well done and I hope you’re enjoying France!


  13. I like a bottle that cries “drink me,” and then you get to meet up with a lot of women. Excellent concept for a story!


  14. Love it! Great story, and, as usual, well-chosen words to tell it. Nicely done, Sandra. 🙂


  15. No Alice! Don’t drink it! I’m curious to know where the girls are meeting. Curiouser and curiouser…and well written as always.


  16. erinleary says:

    I like it – just enough mystery to let me fill in the blanks.


  17. 40again says:

    Not girls’ night out, more like girls’ night in – permanently!
    Well done Sandra, you can get so creepy at times
    Hope France is still sunny, we had a great weekend


    • Sandra says:

      Well if you’ve got to stay in, it might as well be inside a bottle… 🙂 The weather here is disappointing, showers, cloudy and cool. Floods everywhere and the river too high to get out of port.


  18. unspywriter says:

    Oooh–“with the other girls” is very creepy. Nicely done tale of, well, creepiness.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/if-at-first-you-dont-succeed/


  19. Spooky. And really imaginative.


  20. Never bite into the apple, Snow White! Interesting story. I liked it.


  21. Linda Vernon says:

    I’m so glad the idea for this story caught up to you at the last minute! Sometimes those are always the best. This was a wonderful story. 😀


  22. I think glowing drinks should be avoided… isn’t that rule numer 1?


  23. Shreyank says:

    oh a great take on the prompt !


  24. zookyworld says:

    I like the weirdness of this story, with the bottle’s enticing colors and “drink me.” And I bet it’s getting crowded inside that bottle!


  25. wmqcolby says:

    Great story, Sandra, but I’m a little confused. I read it many times. Can you gimme a little bit of a hint? It IS a super story!


  26. elappleby says:

    Intriguing! At first I thought that Annie was being abducted in some way, and the next girl was another victim, but because it starts with ‘every night’ I’m wondering if she comes back again?


  27. dreaminofobx says:

    I will be on the lookout for that bottle next time I sidle up to the bar…and avoid it at all costs! Your story left me with the heebie jeebies, wondering what is happening to the girls in the bottle.


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  29. silent kim says:

    Intriguing for sure. The drink me line brought to mind Alice in Wonderland. Was the new girl who enter in fact the same girl? You certainly left your audience wanting more.

    Enjoy the rest of your trip.


  30. neenslewy says:

    Oooo – loved it, fantastic take on the prompt, a mysterious and appealing flash.


  31. Hi Sandra!
    This was really good! I thought so on first reading and doubly so on second. Only one thing I’d quibble about and that’s the title. “The Hen Party”, it just doesn’t seem to fit … but maybe I’m being obtuse.


    • Sandra says:

      This might be a demographic thing John. In the UK a hen party is the ‘girls night out’ prior to getting married, so in this case she’s joining all the others who succumbed to the bottle’s charms as she herself becomes another bride. Thanks for commenting, and for reading twice! 🙂


  32. A different way of worshiping the bottle. Intriguing.


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