Invasion (Friday Fictioneers, May 2013)

Photo Courtesy of Sarah Ann Hall

This week’s Friday Fictioneers was a photo of part of a structure quite familiar to me!   As I’m afloat in France (Canal de Bourgogne) at the moment, I might not get round this week’s submissions as quickly or comprehensively as I’d like.  My mobile connection is in the lap of the ‘internet gremlins’.  Please bear with me.

Annie was reluctant but I urged her into the canoe.

This old aqueduct was our only chance.  Our pursuers were clever, but helpless without the energy they drew from the earth’s crust.  Over water they perished.

The government, safely anchored off the coast was promising effective retaliation against the aliens.  Huge laboratories floated on lakes as scientists worked round the clock developing weapons, gases, viruses.  Those of us still on land sought shelter where we could.

I began to row.

And as Annie screamed and disintegrated into a heap of red crystals behind me, I realised these efforts were futile; the invaders were amongst us already.



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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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77 Responses to Invasion (Friday Fictioneers, May 2013)

  1. Dear Sandra,
    Doesn’t look like the government’s too effective in the fight against the aliens. Loved the visual of Annie disintegrating into a pile of red crystals. Nice sci-fi piece.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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  2. claireful says:

    Great and grand ideas in this story Sandra – you got so much across in such as short space. But, what I’m not sure about is whether Annie herself has disintegrated, or whether she is disintegrating crystals. If the former, I think you may be missing a small word.

    Claire

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  3. Very well written, darling. I pictured Wells-ian tri-pods and death rays!

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  4. Sandra says:

    I love an alien invasion story and this one is very good, Sandra!

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  6. pirate says:

    “safely anchored” off the coast indeed! And “as Annie screamed and disintegrated a heap of red crystals behind me, I realised these efforts were futile” best line in flash fiction ever – bar none!

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  7. elmowrites says:

    Oh dear, Sandra! I like what you did with Annie and the idea of creatures which can’t cross water – although I’m perplexed by how unemotional your narrator is by her disintegration.
    I hope my story is closser to reality than yours. This is not a happy view of the future.

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  8. Oh that sounds like some weapons.. and the government as usually ineffective.

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  9. too bad she cant be reconstituted
    great full story – you give the story so much more than the 100 words

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  10. I wonder does everyone disintegrate into RED crystals or does it depend or your DNA/personality/blood line/sex/…???

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  11. Catherine Louise Gurganus says:

    Great story!

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  12. Penny L Howe says:

    I’m a sci-fi nut so I enjoyed your take on the photo prompt Sandra. Quite realistic (from a futuristic, ufo perspective) I love it, thank you. Has the fine makings of a larger story here I think!

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  13. zookyworld says:

    Neat that we both thought of aliens/otherworldly creatures in this prompt. I’m afraid that the narrator isn’t going to make it much longer, with their realization that their efforts are futile.

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  14. Not what I expect from you but done as I expect from you.

    janet

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  15. nightlake says:

    red crystals.. shocking. an effective story

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  16. Lyn says:

    Oooh, very nice SF tale Sandra. I hope you’re going to continue this tale.

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  17. Shreyank says:

    loved this alien story 🙂 a great take on the prompt

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  18. vbholmes says:

    Not much hope here, Sandra. Like your use of bodies of water as alien deterants–don’t see that too often.,

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  19. What a shocking ending! I wonder if the narrator escaped, or if he collapses into crystals before he can begin the next paragraph.

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  20. Mystikel says:

    Very original take on the prompt, Sandra. Love the red crystals.

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  21. EagleAye says:

    Interesting! These are very original aliens/scenario described here. I like it a lot. Any chance for more in this vein?

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  22. Locomente says:

    A nice write-up…

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  23. I love the sci-fi concept here, really imaginative and great ending 🙂

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  24. Great story, as always. 🙂

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  25. unspywriter says:

    Oh, wow, that was heart-pounding! Great job, and the last line’s killer.

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/sex-drugs-and-rock-and-roll/

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  26. Another great syfy movie in the works here. Great job.

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  27. annisik51 says:

    Oh, dear, we’re doomed! Except, à la Triffids, suspect these aliens will perish by water. I am intrigued by these red crystals. Of what they consist. Ann

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  28. wmqcolby says:

    Yikes! Good descriptions, good plot, everything good. I think it would make a wonderful Quatermass episode!

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  29. Kwadwo says:

    Third story I’ve read that’s about aliens, each with a different spin.
    Well done, Sandra.

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  30. Man, you gave home and snatched it away in a deft manner! Nice.

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  31. elappleby says:

    They give you a picture of an aqueduct on a summer’s day and you see aliens! Loved this 🙂

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  32. 40again says:

    Red crystals, what a gory touch. You surprised me with this, but I read it twice. Well written as always, well done
    Dee

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  33. Debra Kristi says:

    I’m wondering if the red is based on our interior makeup- say the blood? I like it. But I have to mirror Paul’s thought (which still has me giggling) “row faster!” 😀

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  34. JackieP says:

    Typical government. Let the people fend for themselves. Really good sci-fi story. I could see it in my mind.

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  35. neenslewy says:

    Fantastic writing! You packed so much story into this flash. Great ideas.

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  36. Damn! And I was starting to get really attached to Annie too. I only hope the red crystals mix well with water to make a nice cool drink!

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  37. How wonderfully gruesome!
    Loved it.

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  38. Sarah Ann says:

    Oh no, does that mean there is no escape? I can just imagine the government off-shore, out of harm’s reach, but maybe they aren’t. Really enjoyed this and wonder how the invaders will be defeated.

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