Welcome to Friday Fictioneers again – the first one for August! How quickly the summer is passing by. I suspect many of us will be writing along the same theme this week. My first attempt pretty much mirrored Rochelle’s submission and I abandoned it. So although it’s the broadly same theme, I tried to put a different slant on it.
“You don’t think it’s a bit… er… big?”
“First it was the blue and yellow stripes,” he’d shouted, “then it was the clanging noise…are you never satisfied, woman?”
Mother Nature had held up her hands. “You asked my opinion… and another thing…”
God had sighed. “Now what?”
“I just wondered about chemical resistance, you know what mankind is like.”
God folded his arms glowering in silence.
“Oh forget it, just smaller then,” she’d sighed.
Aeons later, he rolled up his sleeves and began work on the prototype again.
“I hope you’re not going to say I told you so,” he muttered.
“Would I ever?….”
This week I’ve incorporated a new page on this site – Book Worm. If you’ve got the time or the inclination to check out the first post, it’s at Garden Tomes. Feel free to add your contribution.
Dear Sandra,
You didn’t have to abandon your first story because it was similar. Obviously great minds think alike. 😉 It’s a very real problem that looms large on our horizon and I couldn’t not write about it. “…you know what mankind is like.” A telling line and a good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. It is a real issue today.
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Classic “I told you so” all wrapped up in a funny, yet sad story. Sandra! This is perfect !
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Thank you!
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Mother Nature and God talking, very interesting concept.
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Thank you.
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I loved this one Sandra, I could just imagine the conversation, so typical 🙂
Dee
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Thanks Dee!
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Love it. Gave me a good chuckle to start the morning.
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No better way to start the day.
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Excellent as always, Sandra.
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Thank you Helena. 🙂
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“Big”…”blue and yellow stripes”…”clanging noise”: sounds like God had over-the-top plans for some members of the order hymenoptera which rankled Mother Nature’s sensibilities.
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The voice of reason… 🙂
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It is sad that the one who is considered to be the wisest is responsible for the degradation of the ecosystem. Interesting tale and quite ingenious because I wasn’t expecting anything(a conversation) like that. 🙂
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🙂 Thanks for commenting.
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I hope Mother Nature straightens him out. Not to be disrespectful but he’s blown it more than a few times! Creative and relevant piece, Sandra.
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Thanks Perry!
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Good job of wrapping insight in humor, Sandra.
janet
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Thank you Janet.
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We humans will mess anything up given enough discretion. It just is the way we are.
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We never learn …
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I like that Mother nature can hold her own against the Big Guy! HA! Cute story Sandra. 😀
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Thanks Linda!
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You and Rochelle have two sides of the same coin here – I love the character you put into this piece – you got me laughing and thinking at the same time, which is a great way to put out a message. Long live the bees!
If I might offer a concrit, the tense of the first part (he had sighed, she had laughed, etc) had me stumbling a bit. Might be cleaner as simple past (he sighed, she laughed, whatever), although I do see you want to distinguish then and now. Just an observation, it didn’t detract from my enjoyment.
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That’s a fairly standard problem with trying to do ‘then’ and ‘now’ so I’d edited to take a couple of ‘had’s’ out of it to try and mitigate the problem. Obviously not enough. 😉
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Hi Sandra,
God should have known, Mother is always right. Creative and heavenly take on the photo. Ron
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Thanks Ron! 🙂
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Each week I enjoy your stories, this one is no exception.
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Thank you Dawn 🙂
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Great conversation. 🙂
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Thanks Jackie!
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excellent conversation
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Thank you.
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lol very clever! 🙂 i loved the conversation between God and Mother Nature. I suppose behind every great man is a brilliant woman ^^
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Thanks kz!
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I love the interaction between God and Mother Nature!
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Thanks Jan. 🙂
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A match made in heaven. Great story.
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Thanks Randy
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Enjoyed it. I can just see the argument.
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/07/31/ff-friday-fictioneers-as-bees-and-cs-rated-pg-genre-humorous/
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So can I!
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Loving the adorable husband/wife feel of the relationship between God and Mother Nature. Delightful!
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Thanks!
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Love it. I imagine the creative team of God and Mother Nature had to have some fractious moments during the process. Great fun with this one.
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Something to ponder!
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God is a man?!?!
Who would have thunk it?
Cool story.
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I did debate whether to write a female God and Father Nature but in the end decided it would be far too complicated. Thanks.
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Sandra, This dialogue is terrific!
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Thanks Honie.
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I loved being a fly on the wall, so to speak, (vs. bee) to this little chat between the two – genius!
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Thanks Troy!
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If lost, He wouldn’t stop to ask for directions either.
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🙂 Thanks for reading.
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It’s not nice to fool Mother Nature! 😉 A light, but good, take on a serious problem.
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/everything-dies/
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Thanks Maggie.
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Interesting that the bee actually, according to modern-day engineers, can’t fly (or isn’t supposed to).
Love your writing, Sandra! Always a go-to story each week.
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Thank you Kent. That’s engineers for you… 😉
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Mother knows best! I loved this take. You went beyond the photo and created another world. Nice!
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Thank you!
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A conversation between God and Mother Nature. I like that. Best bit is the comment about humankind. Ann
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It’s probably the only realistic bit… 😉
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I was going to say that you were brave to write such a dialogue, but it seems the company we keep on this platform is enlightened enough to not be defended. I wish people could experience where I live at present. It would be blasphemy! Glad I found you guys. It’s a relief to be able to speak and be safe.
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This is the second time I’ve written a piece in this vein, and I must confess I do wonder whether some people might be offended. In my defence (and without getting heavy about it) I’d say that my God has a sense of humour. I’m sorry that you live in a culture where you’re not free to speak and write freely. (And equally sorry if I’ve offended anyone.)
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I’m sure you didn’t. Look forward to your contribution next week. It’s challenging to come up with ideas that are creative and if it pushes boundaries, so much the better.
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That’s great. Really enjoyable. But aren’t we meant to writing fiction?
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🙂 Thanks for reading Patrick.
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Dear Sandra,
You always are right on the money with your stories. I love your take on the design process. No wonder it took 4.5 billion years.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thanks for reading Doug, and your kind comments. 🙂
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Good one Sandra I like the idea that God and Mother Nature met to discuss such things.
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When you think about it, they’d need to work hand-in-hand… 😉
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Funny, yet poignant… I’d never thought of God and Mother Nature as ‘partners in crime’ – very interesting idea 🙂
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Co-operation goes a long way. 🙂
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Cute story! The clanging noise…love it!
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I loved this! Being right is the best!
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