A Friend in Need (Friday Fictioneers, December 2013)

Copyright Adam Ickes

Friday Fictioneers are preparing to launch their weekly foray into the world of the 100 word (or thereabouts) story. 

As ever, Rochelle is in the driving seat, whilst the rest of us climb into place on her bus.

Thanks again Rochelle for your efforts, and for the way you manage to get around all the participants’ stories, even though there are more and more every week. 

“I’m over him really, but thanks for listening.”

Ellen hugged me.  “That’s what friends are for, hon.”

As a divorcee herself, she understood the emotional roller-coaster.

“Thanks for the quiche,” she called, as I drove off.

Ellen was a true friend, always so tactful.  She hated quiche, almost as much as Guy loved it.  I’d prepared it carefully, using mushrooms I’d located in the woods…after extensive research.

Guy was a sadistic bastard, an emotional terrorist.  I’d felt for her, the moment I’d seen his boots on her porch.

So I was helping her out here; that’s what friends are for.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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89 Responses to A Friend in Need (Friday Fictioneers, December 2013)

  1. Dear Sandra,
    Quite the twist at the end of this one. Bon apetit, Guy, enjoy your quiche of death. I really enjoyed this one. Should I have? 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle.

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  2. atrm61 says:

    Ah,killing two birds with one stone;-)Guy got it coming and guess Ellen may have to pay a price too,lol!Loved this Sandra:-)

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  3. Jan Brown says:

    Oh, wow! Your story, unlike the quiche, is simply delicious!!!

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  4. Dee says:

    Brilliant story, loved the build up and the twist at the end. Well done, as always 🙂
    I enjoy quiche, but hate mushrooms, just in case you ever invite me for tea!!
    Dee

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    • Sandra says:

      One thing you’ll never be offered at my home Dee is home-made pastry. I never do it, and I can even beat the life out of frozen pastry so you’d be quite safe. My ‘death by chocolate’ however, is quite another matter. 🙂

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  5. Adam Ickes says:

    This is why I avoid mushrooms. Well that and the fact that I find them disgusting. Loved the twist at the end.

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  6. Yikes! In your always-somewhat-understated (what I tend to think of as English, but not always) was, you’ve hit another winner. I love ‘shrooms, but I think I’ll pass on this one.

    janet

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    • Sandra says:

      You’d be wise to do that, Janet. ‘Understated’ hey? I’ll take that as a compliment. 🙂

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      • Good. That’s the way I meant it. It’s one of the things I enjoy about many English writer; that and the fact that they can say someone had an affair or a couple went to bed without having to then give us the play-by-play of what went on. 🙂

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        • Sandra says:

          Is that an English trait? I never thought about it. I’ve often been asked why I don’t write for women’s magazines but I couldn’t do all that soppy stuff… it’s not in my genes.

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  7. misskzebra says:

    Is it bad that I want quiche right now? Not with mushrooms though, I hate mushrooms.

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  8. paulmclem says:

    I love mushrooms but hate quiche. Nice story!

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  9. Honie Briggs says:

    Sandra, that is quite a dark side you have there. Hats off to you. I really liked the casual pace of this one.

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  10. that’s exactly what friends are for 🙂 tasty tale. i love your dark side 🙂

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  11. Oops that was exactly what he deserved I guess.. and I think I know which kind of mushroom… indeed it goes quickly..

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  12. helenmidgley says:

    Such a brill twist, darkly satisfying, lol 🙂

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  13. JKBradley says:

    How many forkfuls will it take to swell guys tongue enough to bring an end to her misery?

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  14. A sweet twist at the end of it all. I liked it!

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  15. Glynis says:

    LOL!!! Lovely! What are friends for indeed, perhaps she’ll take a bite too!

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  16. elmowrites says:

    Mushrooms are evil, I’m not sure whether the same can be said of your character! Just one thing, if I may. My first interpretation was: MC has Ellen round, feeds her quiche in exchange for sympathy. Ellen, being polite, eats the quiche and thanks MC for it. Ellen will die later, saved from the mistake MC thinks she’s making with Guy. It’s only after re-reading it a couple of times that I think what you intended is: Ellen has MC round. MC brings and leaves a quiche, knowing that Ellen won’t eat it and Guy will. Guy will die and Ellen will be saved that way.
    I don’t know if you could clear up this confusion with a few amendments, if you meant it to be there.

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    • Sandra says:

      I think you’ve overlooked the fourth paragraph Jen – where it says ‘I drove off’. So what happens is exactly as you’ve said you thought I intended. What I was expecting your eagle eye to detect 🙂 was the use of the word emotional twice which I didn’t see until I’d published it. I left it in, because I couldn’t think of an effective alternative to ’emotional roller coaster’ and ’emotional terrorist’. Thanks for reading and taking the trouble to read it again.

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      • elmowrites says:

        I think you’re right, Sandra, maybe I read it as “she drove”. I can’t remember. I suppose the point I was making is “thanks for the quiche” could mean she’s already eaten it, so I wondered if there was a way to make it clearer that she hadn’t. Anyway, I enjoyed your story, and I think you’re allowed emotional twice. Future scholars will read all sorts of things into the double use and the parallels you are drawing between past and present pain…

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  17. Oh how I look forward to your twisted stories each week, Sandra. Skillful turns and chilling directions; I love it! The quiche seems so benign; until it isn’t. Bravo!

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  18. emmylgant says:

    So well written! You gave it a great twist.

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  19. Now THAT’s a true friend!

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  20. J. Milburn says:

    Well, at least he probably enjoyed his last meal 😉 Friends just make everything better. Great story!

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  21. Loco mente says:

    Thats what friends are for indeed…
    Nice!

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  22. Love quiche but hate mushrooms. Evidently, he loved quiche with mushrooms…aha…he got what he deserved. Will he be buried in the mushroom patch?

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  23. Hell hath no fury…. when will Guy ever learn. Looks like school’s out.

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  24. draliman says:

    That’s quite the friend she has there. I hope she never gets on her bad side or it could be mushroom soup time!

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  25. Bastet says:

    Darn…didn’t pick up immediately on the twist…then it hit me, not as bad as it hit Guy though I bet 😉

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  26. Hi Sandra,
    So many elements at play here, revenge, lost love, friendship, nature study, and cuisine, all cooked into one deliciously devious tale. Ron

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  27. Oh no! But sure he deserved it? Brilliant as always Sandra! 🙂

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  28. plaridel says:

    oh, what a feast awaits a deserving guy!

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  29. Quiche me quick! I hope it’s quick. And I don’t eat quiche since I don’t like cheese, so go to it whenever its necessary. Somehow the murderous tales tend to be the most fun!

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  30. The quiche of death strikes! Great story, Sandra, such a neat twist.

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  31. Mike says:

    A great story Sandra. I loved the twist at the end. Where would we be without good friends!

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  32. sandraconner says:

    Excellent work here, Sandra. I was starting to suspect the ending whey you mentioned Guy loved quiche, but I wasn’t prepared for the HILARIOUS last line. It’s a gem!

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  33. JackieP says:

    Oh I love these kind of stories! Good going!

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  34. MissTiffany says:

    Oh ouch! What a twist at the end! Love it.

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  35. EagleAye says:

    Oh that’s just wicked, but deserving! I hope there are some interesting side-effects from those very special mushrooms. Convulsions anyone?

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  36. kerrieanns says:

    Wonderful! I love the way that you don’t tell us that the quiche is poisonous, because it leaves us to come to that conclusion ourselves. Show don’t tell rule was well represented here 🙂

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  37. Wild mushrooms, so hard to tell apart. “It was an accident, officer. I swear.” 🙂 The subtext of this story could fill another 1000 words, I’m sure. Great job.

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  38. I really like this. Hmmmm, given me an idea …

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  39. Terrific tale of love, betrayal and revenge all in 100 words.
    Superb.

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  40. Martin Cororan says:

    Reading this, having just read the one about an insect eating her mate…just saying

    I’m going to follow this blog, but it’s mostly out of fear…

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