Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
The janitor leaned towards me, breath foetid with stale garlic.
“Goin’ all the way, sweetheart?”
“Seventh floor,” I whispered, jerking away.
“Seventh heaven it is,” he said, “satisfaction guaranteed, Miss.”
He fumbled with the gates, stretching out our time in this confined space, as always.
“Hurry please, I’m late.”
“Eager beaver, hey? I love a bitch in heat.”
I stepped out, muttering.
He leaned out to watch me walk away, and with a shriek of metal the lift dropped instantly.
If he didn’t break his neck when his chin hit floor level, he certainly bought the farm when the elevator shattered in the basement.
I was getting better at this.
A bit later this week as I’ve been out maxing out the credit card with my BFF. Deep joy! I wrote one before I left, but wanted to refine it before uploading it and found, on my return, that KZ had pretty much covered the same ground. So back to the drawing board it was. The lengths I’ll go to in order to present something different for Friday Fictioneers… 🙂
castelsarrasin 
Dear Sandra,
The complete non nonchalance of the MC at the end made me laugh out loud. I wouldn’t want to get on her bad side. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle! 🙂
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Good for her! 🙂
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But not for him… 🙂
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This definitely made me smile, though I would hope she doesn’t use these tricks on everyone who irritates her.
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I think she might be the long-suffering type.
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Two new things for me here…’foetid’ and ‘buying a farm’. Will need to work those into one of my own stories sometime. Thanks! ps. Good story, although perhaps a knee to the groin might have set him straight 🙂
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That’s the English spelling of ‘fetid’. I like to stick with my heritage. 🙂 And the other phrase I didn’t even know I knew until I wrote it… Thanks for dropping by.
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You had me at the title. The rest was delicious icing on the cake! 🙂 Don’t we all wish we had something of that power from time to time? The poor drivers around me during rush hour wouldn’t have a chance!! lol
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Thanks Judah!
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Good story. That was the height of vengence. He certainly picked on the wrong person. Maybe she should carry a warning sign with her. Well done.
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Maybe she should do that. 🙂
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Oh yeah! Loved this, wicked of me, I’m sure. 😉
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🙂 Clever!
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Nice! Sounds like some awesome powers to possess!
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I can think of a time or two they’d have come in useful. 🙂
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You’re definitely getting weirder, Sandra … but it’s TERRIFIC ! 😀
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I persevere M.R. I persevere. Thanks.
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I hated the janitor – good characterization in only 100 words!
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Thank you!
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You captured the essence of a leering, creepy old man perfectly and his comeuppance just as well. But the fact that you and kz were on the same track? Scary!
janet
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They were almost identical Janet! Truly weird.
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Great story Sandra, what a wicked character you have created. Loved it.
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Evil is as evil does… 😉 Thank you Michael.
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Don’t mess with the miss ! 🙂
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Mister Janitor shouldn’t have tried. 🙂
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HeeHee, loved it! 🙂
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Thank you Sarah!
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Wow I so loved the ending. Took me by surprise. 🙂
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And the janitor too. Thanks for dropping by.
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Dear Sandra,
You haven’t (and won’t, I’ll wager) lost your touch. Perfect title and story.
Aloha,
Doug
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Hi Doug! If I’d known you were coming I’d have baked you a better cake… 🙂 x
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Loved that description of the janitor in the beginning, you do tell such a great story Sandra.
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Thank you!
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That was a truly disgusting guy. He got what he deserved. And now I wonder at her power. A most compelling story!
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Yes he did come on a bit strong, didn’t he? 🙂
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lol! such an awesome take on the photo. i so envy her powers. and you did such a great job in turning that janitor into a character that the reader would want to hate
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I think I may have met him somewhere along the line… 😉
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Since women aren’t physically as strong as men, mostly anyway, a bit of the ol’ magic would have to do instead. Am going for martial art lessons myself. The next one will get it from me and only me.
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🙂 Thanks for dropping by.
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You never cease to surprise and amaze me, Sandra. This is wickedly excellent!
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Thanks Dawn!
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As ever, Sandra, a masterpiece. I love the character you give them both – he in particular is so vivid in our minds even after just a few words. I’m going to check out KZ’s story, but I have a feeling I’m glad she stole your thunder
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Thanks Jennifer, glad you liked it.
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Ohh, don’t want to mess with that one.
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For sure 🙂
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Rather an extreme reaction to a lecher who didn’t touch?
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Words can sometimes be just as bad…
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had he brushed his teeth, maybe, just maybe, things could’ve turned out differently.
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It may have taken a bit more than a toothbrush I think.
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Congratulations for creating such a revolting male character, Sandra. He is so scary and slimy I felt dirty reading about him.
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Yes I felt a bit contaminated myself. 🙂
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Perfect setup and delivery. So clever. Enjoyed!
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Thank you!
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Love it! You made me laugh out loud 🙂
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It worked then… 🙂
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Still trying, without success, to twitch my nose like Samantha in the “Bewitched” reruns. Dropping an elevator?–I’d say she has definitely progressed to Level Seven in her training. Fun story, Sandra.
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The sky’s the limit for this character I think… thanks for dropping by vb.
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Ha. yes never mess with a lady like that.. great take (and I had some tip it would be great) ..
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Thanks Bjorn. 🙂
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This guy was a creep. He had it coming. I love your originality, Sandra, and your dedication to it. It paid off. This is one of a kind, inventive story!
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Thanks Amy, glad you liked it.
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I laughed at this one. You are SO devilish with this story. Bravo, Sandra!
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🙂 Thanks Kent.
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As the story progressed I was hoping something nasty would happen to him! I can imagine her twitching her nose like in Bewitched as she walks away and suddenly down goes the lift 🙂
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🙂 Way to go.
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Oh Sandra, this is good – he got what was coming and she did it just perfectly! Nan 🙂
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Timing is everything… particularly with this trick.
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A female Harry Potter! Maybe you should write a whole series of stories. It’s time we had a heroine instead of a hero hogging the limelight 🙂
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Good idea!
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What a detestable character you created for your victim. Good little tale.
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Thanks Helena! 🙂
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Some great language in this. Love it. And justice is done.
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Thank you Patrick. Your character this week was just as engaging… NOT! 🙂
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Terrible, terrifying and well-written, dear Sandra. You serve up a big tale in just 100 words this week. Nicely done. The last line sings.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
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I am embarrassed to tell you that made me LOL.
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Muttering takes on a whole new meaning when you’re a sorcerer (‘s apprentice). That janitor had it coming. 🙂
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Everyone should know a little sorcery, these days. Intersting take.
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Your stories are very nice Sandra. Very apt title and story.
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Ha!ha!That Janitor-yuck-so glad he got his just desserts!Loved the characterization and that fantastic end-you rock Sandra 😀
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Thank you! 🙂
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🙂
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Love it. So pleasing to know the old letch suffered 😉
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Oh I love a good story with karma! Great job at creating such a despicable character, so his demise was a relief!
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