Pushing your Luck – Friday Fictioneers, September 2014

Copyright Dawn Q Landau

“Damn’ woman needs locking up” says Matt, watching his mother-in-law through the kitchen window.

“Leave her, she’s doing no harm.”

“Pacing around, all day… is that the behaviour of a sane person?

“She thinks she’s warding off bad luck. It keeps her happy.”

Matt opens the window.

“Stupid cow,” he bellows.

The old lady looks up, puzzled, her step faltering so that her rubber boot comes down firmly on the crack in the flagged yard.

“Matt!!”

The old lady is still standing there, rooted in horror, as the sirens herald the approach of assistance that will arrive too late for her son-in-law.

Not too much time to devote today, as we’re still busy on the river.  For other (probably better prepared 🙂 ) submissions, click on the Friday Fictioneers link.  Thanks once again to Rochelle for her ministrations.

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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87 Responses to Pushing your Luck – Friday Fictioneers, September 2014

  1. Sandra, That sealed Matt’s fate, and probably permantently cemented the belief about not stepping on cracks in his mother-in-law’s head. What a tragedy. He should have kept his mouth shut and not raised his blood pressure. Well written. —Susan

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    Matt definitely pushed his luck, didn’t he? Was it bad luck or did his wife push him out the window with a bullet?

    Glad you found the time to submit as story since your writing always floats my boat. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. That’s what you get for making nasty comments behind someone’s back. Karma is best served warm.

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  4. Oh this one was a bad move from Matt.. “Check Matt” could be an alternative title

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  5. Ha. Better than mine. More thoughtful. Darker. Evil.

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  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    Your imagination is unparalleled and unbridled and we are the beneficiaries. Thank you for the great story and laughter to end my long day.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  7. How rude!!! Well deserved end, if you ask me. We need to respect and love our elders more. Great story, but that is always expected from you.

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  8. Matt certainly got what he deserved. I hope mother-in-law doesn’t blame herself!
    Funny and wicked 🙂

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  9. Stupid cow! How rude. Well lesson learned.

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  10. I guess heeding the “Step on a crack” is something we should all do. Don’t know where this came from, but bring up some more from the same spot. I like the mix of humor and awfulness.

    janet

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  11. liz young says:

    Serves him right for not being more sympathetic.

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  12. Time or no time, this is a wonderful. Mother-in-law one, Matt zero!

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  13. Danny James says:

    Always enjoy your take on these challenges. Great one!

    DJ

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  14. paulmclem says:

    As always I like your stories. Not completely sure what happened at the end but I can hazard a guess. Good one.

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  15. Lucy says:

    So long, Matt. It’s been awful–finally got rid of you. Loved it. Lucy

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  16. Does it sound mean to say serves him right for being so rude.

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  17. In your groove, Sandra! I love it. This grabbed me, as I watched out the window at the woman… and then found myself jolted back by the twist at the end.

    Hope your trip is wonderful! I sometimes imagine what it must be like… cruising on such a boat is on my bucket list.

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  18. “Stupid cow!” Hah! This was awesome! I really liked the whole play on stepping on a crack theme.

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  19. plaridel says:

    i think he deserved what he got.

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  20. JKBradley says:

    That was rich. You never know for whom the protectors are protecting. It may even be that they are protecting and warding for you. So be ware, and be kind, or be dead. I liked it very much.
    Thanks, Sandra.

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  21. Such a wildly brilliant and creative and heartbreaking story! I really liked it!

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  22. draliman says:

    He got what he deserved. I reckon she used the evil eye on him.

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  23. Elizabeth says:

    Hi Sandra, this Matt should have kept his mouth shut and taken care of his life. Now it’s late for him.

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  24. Quite a jump you left for us there. Certainly made me re-read a couple of times to see if I missed the smoking gun. Personally, I would go with a coronary, or something similar I think!

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  25. K.Z. says:

    lol he deserved it for being so nasty towards a harmless old lady 🙂 very entertaining!

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  26. stupid cows know old tricks.

    Nicely told story with dialogue that moves us along to a smoothly and subtly written ending. Thanks. randy

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  27. Those are come pretty huge inverted cracks there!

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  28. What an end! so much meaning in this aside from the shock you managed to create with that ending. I enjoyed reading this very much.

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  29. Claudia says:

    This very clever…I did NOT see that end coming!

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  30. AnnIsikArts says:

    A nice mystery (as to the exact nature of Matt’s death). Did Matt slip on a mat? At any rate, the police will never prove murder.

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  31. JackieP says:

    Well now that was a surprise! Well done Sandra! Ha, kind of just rewards, but you didn’t hear that from me. 😉

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  32. margirene says:

    Oh no! What’s happened to Matt? Always respect your elders I’d say. You just never know. I enjoyed this. Marg

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  33. Perry Block says:

    You step on a crack like that, you can expect super bad luck! I’m not sure it might not be better to be rid of the son-in-law but not this way …. whatever it is! Thanks, Sandra.

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  34. Bwahaha. Serves the little bugger right. I love what comes out of your wild and wooly imagination, Sandra. Always a surprise, always a delight!

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  35. Nan Falkner says:

    I love this Sandra: “Stupid Cow” What a wonderful story and she lives to see another day!
    Just absolutely wonderful! Nan 🙂

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  36. Amy Reese says:

    Oh, no! What an unexpected twist, Sandra, and some tight writing. The son-in-law will never be right with himself now. I imagine he’ll regret this forever.

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  37. wmqcolby says:

    Well, I guess we should know better, huh? Matt? No chance. Terrific read, Sandra! 🙂

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  38. He was pretty rude, although I don’t know if he deserved that. I guess the rhyme, “Step on a crack, break your son-in-law’s back” was accurate.

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  39. Polly says:

    LOL 😀 what a great twist in the tail. They should never go against their betters, but never seem to learn. A smashing, most enjoyable write, Sandra.

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  40. Indira says:

    OMG! What a story. Written so well though I took my own time to understand.

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