Checkin’ Out The Joint (Friday Fictioneers, August 2015)

Copyright Madison Woods


“Can you pull me up, Dwight?   I can’t seem to get over this ledge.”

“Shhh, Ruby, they’ll hear ya.”

“I thought you said this place closed down.”

“Well there’s folks in there now, new owners maybe.”

“What do they look like?”

“Whadd’ya mean, look like?  Like humans, you know, arms, legs, faces, all that stuff.”

“I mean do they look …well.. er … “


“Liberal-minded, I guess.”

“How’d I know?  What’s liberal-minded look like?  What’s eatin’ ya Ruby.”

“Well you know, not everyone approves of lunars and crecopias mixing and all that.”

“Shoot Ruby,  just get yo’ furry ass up here and see for yo’self.”

Rochelle has posted one of her favourite stories for this week’s Friday Fictioneers re-tread.  And coincidentally, although this was quite a difficult prompt, this re-tread was one of my favourites too.  (The accent was modelled on Reginald D Hunter – an American comedian very popular in the UK. The lady moth is English, through and through.)  Glad to see that Rochelle is feeling better, and recovering in the company of her family. 

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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79 Responses to Checkin’ Out The Joint (Friday Fictioneers, August 2015)

  1. ceayr says:

    Very funny.
    Or should that be furry?
    Really, Sandra!


  2. Loved the dialogue in this. Can only apologies that mine treads, or flutters above, such similar territory.

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  3. Garcon, there’s an antenna in my dressing..

    Shit we must have manhandled one of our other customers.

    Love the dialogue here.

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  4. micklively says:

    Most amusing Sandra: well done.


  5. SarCou says:

    Love this – flows really naturally. There’s already a lot of dialogue this week (me included!) – similar minds again!

    Liked by 1 person

  6. Dear Sandra,

    Sometimes it’s nice to kick back and go with a golden oldie, isn’t it? Yours is most certainly golden.



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  7. Hilarious, Sandra. Great dialogue. I never knew there was discrimination in the butterfly/moth world. We live and learn. 😀 — Suzanne


  8. This was such a funny read, excellent work!


  9. Kir Piccini says:

    It made me giggle…”Hurry up!”


  10. Graham Lawrence says:

    Funny! I laughed!

    Liked by 1 person

  11. I’m glad you recycled this cute story or I would have never read it and I like it.


  12. gahlearner says:

    Very funny, I love it.


  13. Oh wow…this was kinda lie mine..kinda sorta.

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  14. Fun dialogue and I’ve learnt something new. (Do they get admitted, I wonder.)


  15. Honie Briggs says:

    Dwight and Ruby. I’m lovin’ it. Thanks for the laugh (and the lesson) Sandra.


  16. paulmclem says:

    Lol. That’s 2 weeks without a murder, Sandra. I smell blood.


  17. Indira says:

    Hi Sandra.Very funny, loved it.


  18. liz young says:

    I almost wrote a moth story – my daughter has Death’s Head Moth caterpillars eating her plants every year. This story made me smile – lovely.


  19. Great dialogue! I thought of an inter-racial relationship, too. You handled it much better than I would have.


  20. JKBradley says:

    Careful, Ruby and Dwight. Those humans may just push some pins through your wings and keep you behind some glass!

    Can’t always trust humans, liberal or not.

    Good one!


  21. Miles Rost says:

    Love this! Quite a cute story!


  22. Love the description of us humans. Love the dialogue 🙂


  23. Great dialogue, well written as usual.


  24. gadis says:

    From the butterfly viewpoint 😀 love it!


  25. draliman says:

    Great dialogue and nicely subtle message about discrimination.


  26. Sally says:

    This is great – loved it.


  27. You’ve done it again! I couldn’t come up with a decent story given that photo as muse and not only did you, you made me smile too. Good job, Sandra.


  28. Mike says:

    Great dialogue Sandra.


  29. rgayer55 says:

    Ha! Hilarious. What does a Liberal look like? I think they have a little “L” emblazed in their forehead. The last line will stay with me for a looonnnggg time.


  30. Very funny, really cute. Loved it!


  31. gravadee says:

    Cute conversation


  32. Sadly I know many humans who would squash them both just for being moths period.


  33. Jan Brown says:

    Love this dialogue! Very well done, very funny!


  34. Amy Reese says:

    Great dialogue. I love the POV and the need for liberal-minded folk. Nice one!


  35. It took me awhile to realise it was the moths talking. Very funny. Great dialogue.


  36. adamjasonp says:

    Furry posteriors… Well, the insect world discriminates a lot… but they don’t have media or social structure of that kind… besides ants, of course; they may actually have a term for ‘liberal-minded.’ …Lousy retinal vision, still.

    A classic choice— leading the reader away with the crafty but anthropomorphized dialog, and then sending it home—‘yeah, it’s them moths.’


  37. I enjoyed the dialogue, and that subtle insertion of of species “mixing.” Well-done!


  38. wildbilbo says:

    A very literal take this week 🙂 – I liked your little nod to racial tensions. Clever.


  39. Ira PT says:

    A fun take on the prompt. The tête-à-tête compliments the photo.


  40. i b arora says:

    i also tried something with dialogues, nice post


  41. Hilarious! loved it. First thing I thought too, those two having a conversation 🙂


  42. I didn’t see these moths as climbing up before, but now that’s I’ve read your story, I can’t unsee it. 🙂 Funny stuff.


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