A Different Kind of Hero – Friday Fictioneers, November 2015

Copyright J Hardy Caroll

Copyright J Hardy Caroll

“What if it doesn’t end?”

“How do you mean?”

“If it’s not all over… when you die… suppose it just changes into something else?”

Billie lights a cigarette, discards the match over his shoulder.

“Like what?”

“Something worse, perhaps.”

“What could be worse than this, then?” Billie spits.

“You know what they say, just because you can’t imagine it, doesn’t mean it can’t exist.”

“You know what your problem is, Joe… you think too much.”

“Don’t you wonder though?”

“Nah… life’s too short.”

Joe doesn’t think so.

Billie lunges too late, as his comrade scrambles out of the trench.

If you think you saw a different post earlier on, you did.  Trying to do a million things at once, I didn’t look at the prompt carefully enough, didn’t connect with the date, and posted something inappropriate for today.  I’ll save that irreverence for another day.  😦  Thanks to Rochelle at Friday Fictioneers for her leadership and support, not to mention her speed in taking down my earlier link when I asked her to.  🙂

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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55 Responses to A Different Kind of Hero – Friday Fictioneers, November 2015

  1. I thought I saw your link and then refreshed to check mine had gone up and you were gone. I thought I was going mad!


  2. Dear Sandra,

    For all the vets worldwide, this is a sad and realistic reality. Well done…twice. 😉




  3. Such a terrible time and I’m sure conversations like this were common. It wasn’t the match, was it?


  4. micklively says:

    Imminent danger often makes folk grope for an impossible alternative.
    Good piece.


  5. athling2001 says:

    Very nice. Crisp, clean and all the more poignant for it’s sparseness.


  6. Good story, Sandra. The WWI trench warfare had to be the worst. My dad signed up early for the U.S. Navy to avoid slogging through the mud of those trenches..He was on a battle ship made into a troop transport ship, and served for five years. Well done as always. —- Suzanne


  7. ansumani says:

    Didn’t expect that tragic end …I’m sure Billie didn’t expect it too. Beautiful written – I’m sure this is a real story of atleast one soldier fighting a war that makes no sense to him.

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  8. I hope my comment shows up because my internet is wonky. WWI was a terrible war. You gave a good description of soldiers in the trenches. I read a poem on Word Press that was written by a soldier who had died in the trenches. He was talking about the possibility of dying. Did you see the classic film, ” All’s Quiet on the Western Front?”


  9. A good tribute for today, and as always, an enjoyable read.


  10. “Don’t you wonder though?” Joe doesn’t think so though ~ the repetition of though threw me off a bit.

    I’ve watched more than my share of movies about trench warfare, even taken classes about WW I. A gluten for punishment? Perhaps. You’ve caught the scene perfectly.


  11. Dale says:

    Oh well done. I cannot imagine what those poor men went through in the trenches.
    Perfect post for today.


  12. Amy Reese says:

    Well done, Sandra. I missed your first story. It must have been horrible in those trenches to lose a comrades so suddenly. (I think the second to the last sentence needs a period. Or, it could be my eyes.)


  13. Missed all that confusion about your earlier post, this had an intense impact on me. Very powerful story, excellently structured and delivered.


  14. draliman says:

    Nice dialogue, a fairly common conversation in the trenches I imagine.


  15. gahlearner says:

    Very moving story.


  16. Jan Brown says:

    Those poor, brave soldiers! This is why men don’t talk enough about the real grit of the wars they fight; it’s too horrific.


  17. plaridel says:

    a gripping scene from world war i. it was so realistic i felt like watching a movie.


  18. rgayer55 says:

    I take it that Billie could not conceive a hell worse than the one they were living at that moment. I’ve heard several old soldiers speak of battlefield religion. If there’s ever a time to want to get right with the Lord, that would be the time and place.


  19. You captured the essence of war here Sandra. Horrific.


  20. I have always found it better to think in the long term. Life is not quite so short that way. Great capture of a fateful moment.


  21. Oh, I hate to think of something different being something worse. But I suppose when you’re in the trenches you don’t lean toward optimism…


  22. Beautifully done, and that match may have been a target for the enemy. So sad! But a great tribute for Veteran’s Day!


  23. My dad told my sister a story about this type of interaction in the trenches. I image being together and not knowing what’s ahead can create a dialog such as this. How sad we need to write about our men being alone and fearful about what’s to come and wishing they were somewhere else.
    A beautifully told moment, Sandra. Have a wonderful weekend.


  24. I have no doubt I would have enjoyed the other too, but this is a meaningful story for Veteran’s Day. So many young men and women have lunged too late… Such a very scary place to be; I imagine this is the very dialogue many would have. Very nice, Sandra.


  25. Oliana says:

    Ah gee!! I never expected that ending! a great story and perfect for remembrance day we’ve just passed.


  26. Sarah Ann says:

    So terribly sad – both very strong voices that give the end a real poignancy.


  27. Aweaome little piece


  28. Awesome little piece


  29. subroto says:

    Despite such sad stories it seems like we haven’t learnt much in the last hundred years or so. Nicely done as always.


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