Shine on Harvest Moon – Friday Fictioneers, April 2016

Copyright Mary Shipman

Copyright Mary Shipman

Having locked us out of our shop, my wife stands in the delivery yard, lost in the ruins of her mind and the wonder of the silver harvest moon hanging low in the sky.

“I told you not to follow me out,” I grumble mildly, trying to force the door.

“Beautiful,” she whispers, oblivious.

I stand behind her, rest my chin on her head and embrace her.

She chuckles provocatively, rubbing her body against mine.  Still she can arouse me.

I nuzzle her neck, sliding my hands beneath her chemise.

“We’d better be quick,” she says, “my husband might catch us.”

Thank you so much to Rochelle at Friday Fictioneers for the heads-up, (literally) regarding Triangles and Rosemary’s Baby.  One of those rare red-letter days!  🙂

Here in France it’s finally stopped raining but the river is still high and fast, so we’re about to call it a day for our spring cruise.  We’ve been marooned on the boat, having to wade through knee deep waters to get to the car, which was pointless, as we later discovered, since the roads to the port were impassable too!  Good job we had plenty of wine to hand…

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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103 Responses to Shine on Harvest Moon – Friday Fictioneers, April 2016

  1. First of all, Congratulations, Sandra, on winning with not one, but two, stories in the contest! I haven’t read the stories yet but intend to. I’m so glad the judge’s comments were included as it’s always great to know what they look for. Next, your story for FF was both sad and funny. Good writing as always. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  2. ceayr says:

    Magnificent.
    I am once again lost in admiration.
    How you manage to say so much in so few words borders on the miraculous.
    The question you leave in our minds is devastating.
    Today’s treat will be to read your prize-winning stories.
    Chapeau, Sandra!
    Oh, and here in France the sun continues to beam from a clear blue sky.
    Even this almost translucent Scot has a tan.

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    • Sandra says:

      Yes, there are some questions hanging in the air, which I fear will not get coherently answered. 🙂 And thank you. The concept of a translucent Scot occupies my mind, I find. 🙂 What a difference a few hundred miles makes, and I suspect we might be a bit further east than you. Hope you make a speedy recovery.

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  3. Sorry, I forgot to mention your problems in France with the high water. I hope your car survived in good condition. At least it’s finally stopped raining and you had the wine. 🙂 — Suzanne

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    • Sandra says:

      The car was fine. I ruined a good pair of sandals wading through the water, but of course as soon as I made it to a shop that sold wellies, the water started to go down. 😦

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  4. Sue says:

    Such a powerful write, so much said in those few sentences….

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  5. neilmacdon says:

    That’s three finely drawn characters in 100 words. Beautiful!

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  6. Dear Sandra,

    Such a good one that has me wondering whether to laugh or cry. Sweet, funny and oh so sad.
    Shalom and bottoms up,

    Rochelle

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  7. Ah, infidelity. The cookie jar on the high shelf. Or maybe not so high. Well done.

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  8. That is a fine ending–it shakes my core. Lovely writing, Ms. Sandra! Thank you.

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  9. what a great painting filled with sadness joy love and history you paint in just a few words… simply amazing…. there is more than one layer of truth revealed in the piece. Congratulations on winning two prices… you are more than worth it..

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  10. oldentimes says:

    Congratulations Sandra!
    Good piece!

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  11. lillian says:

    Well, you had me with the title….nostalgia time as this was my folks favorite tune and they danced to it in the living room. And then to your story here — so much in 100 words. And the infidelity at the closing. Oh my.
    And double congratulations!

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  12. Graham Lawrence says:

    Naughty (but nice) I absolutely loved the Intro sentence.

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  13. Mike says:

    A beautiful piece of writing, it’s so sad when the mind fails, yet retains the ability to grasp beauty. The congratulations are well deserved.

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  14. Enjoyed this post tremendously!

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  15. IfeomaO says:

    Congrats once more Sandra! And this story of yours was well written, paced and an emotional journey.
    Cheers.

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  16. Oh, what a beautiful moon can do to us. Great story!

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  17. The Voice says:

    Is it infidelity if she assumes she’s not with her husband, even if she is? Hmm… Very cleverly written Sandra (as if you could do anything else) 🙂

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  18. subroto says:

    Wow! You just keep coming out with one stunning story after another. When can I expect to get your book from my local library?

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  19. Congrats on your wins!
    Naughtily poignant!

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  20. any1mark66 says:

    The stolen moment. Is there anything so amazing?

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  21. k rawson says:

    Arousing and unnerving for the man, I imagine. Marvelously crafted tale as always, Sandra.

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  22. paulmclem says:

    Congrats on your 1st and 2nd…heck of an achievement. Well done! As for today’s story, a sweet and sour tale of life, love and a heart breaking illness.

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  23. wmqcolby says:

    HAHAHAHAHA!! Ooohhhhhh, SNAP! Killed me with that last line. Great story, Sandra!
    Hey, congratulations on the awards, too. That is so awesome. I knew you could do it!
    Five out of five ripped bodices. 😉

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  24. helenmidgley says:

    The last line threw me, you can’t beat a good twist 🙂

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  25. Congrats on your stories winning. I am bookmarking them to read soon. I always enjoy a good twist at the end. And it made me rethink the entire story. Great job!

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  26. 100-word-stories always seem to require multiple reads. It only took me two to digest this powerful and emotional story. In other words, I loved it. 🙂

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  27. Brilliant, funny, and sad all at the same time.

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  28. draliman says:

    Quite a bitter sweet piece. It’s so sad when the mind goes. Beautifully written, and congratulations on your winning stories!

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  29. liz young says:

    So lovely and so sad – I hope he carried on anyway?

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  30. Lynn Love says:

    Ooh, lovely snapshot there, Sandra. You’ve cleverly drawn a whole world, a whole relationship with very few lines. I love that tingle in the air – the gorgeous moon, the suggestive snuggle, the fact she’s just in her chemise. Sensual stuff!

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  31. jellico84 says:

    Congratulations on your recent victories! Love this story! 🙂 ❤

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  32. Dale says:

    Congrats, Sandra! I shall be reading your winning stories (time is not on my side, lately!)
    I adored this story and saw something totally different. I didn’t see it as infidelity at all but that she is starting to suffer from Alzheimer’s! I still found it sweet…

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  33. That caught me out and well done on winning prizes.

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  34. mickwynn2013 says:

    Great last line. Sad tale at the end from a pleasant, cosy beginning

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  35. storydivamg says:

    Sandra,

    Good story telling. I had to do a reread and careful thinking to sort out the woman’s final comment, but I caught on. Age isn’t always easy on the mind, is it?

    All my best,
    MG

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  36. plaridel says:

    such a beautiful story. i surmise both the lover and the husband are the same person. 🙂

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  37. trentpmcd says:

    Oops, It seems that moon-drunk she might have said a bit too much…

    And congratulations!

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  38. Congrats on your awards!!

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  39. rgayer55 says:

    Wow, I can’t wait to be senile. Oh, wait . . . never mind.
    I’m not sure Connie would find this story as provocative and exciting as I did.
    Five star from me!

    Congrats on your award winning stories. I’m not surprised. As far as I’m concerned, you post an award winner here every week.

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  40. Jan Brown says:

    Love this story. Wonderful ending!

    Congratulations on the awards! Hope you celebrate with an abundance of wine 😀😀😀

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  41. Sandra, what a deeply moving story. I often wait for the dark twist in your stories (I took that road this week), but this was all the sadder for it’s truth. And a giant Mazel tov for your double hitter! Brava!

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  42. gahlearner says:

    My first impulse was to laugh, then to cry. Some things better remain unsaid. How said to have the truth revealed like this. Once again you manage to turn a harmonic, sweet situation upside down.

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  43. Judee says:

    Always the twist, often twisting the heart of the reader. I wonder if this is the first time she has confused her husband with her lover? I like to think her husband knows, and loves her still.

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  44. Amy Reese says:

    Congratulations on your winning stories, Sandra. Great job! Thank goodness you had plenty of wine with the high water. You can tolerate anything with more wine. 🙂 What a twist at the end here with your story. You’re so amazing!

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  45. Margaret says:

    Congratulations on your double success in the Flash 500. I saw them there and gave a cheer for you. I love this story too. So full of emotion and richly layered.

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  46. mjlstories says:

    A lot going on there in the ruins of her mind…

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  47. IB Arora says:

    the end left me wondering what was all this about

    http://www.obliqview.blogspot.in

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  48. Oh my…that made me grimace out loud.

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  49. ansumani says:

    Congratulations Sandra! Great story by the way. Maybe the husband of today was the lover of the past else I’m guessing the next chapter will be violent. Good one.

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