Take a Little Time – Friday Fictioneers, September 2016

 

Copyright Shaktiti Sharma

Copyright Shaktiti Sharma

 

“So…” said the therapist, weakly, “did you feel better… afterwards?”

I considered briefly.  “Not better.  Different, perhaps.”

He shifted uneasily.

“You didn’t feel any remorse…  shame for your actions?”

“I suppose there was an element of regret.”

He brightened.

“Regret?”

“That I hadn’t taken more time over it.”

He stood, pushing back his chair.

“I’m not sure I’m the person to help you,” he said.  “I’ll refer you elsewhere.”

I stood too.

“As you like.  I’m done here anyway.”

I left, reciting the address I’d memorized from the identity tag on his briefcase.

He hadn’t helped.

But I had learned something.

I’ve decided to go sinister for a change this week, though I’ll never hold a candle to the Master of Menace, C E Ayr.  Thanks to our illustrious leader for shepherding the Friday Fictioneers forward into the fold of autumn.  Good luck with As One Must, One Can, Rochelle.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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60 Responses to Take a Little Time – Friday Fictioneers, September 2016

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Yup, that’s sinister. This can only end one way. With fava beans

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    I hope the therapist called someone when his patient left. This doesn’t bode well. Wonderful writing as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. ceayr says:

    This is just fabulous.
    I laughed as I shuddered.
    And I am deeply flattered to get a mention from a writer so clearly on a higher level.

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  4. Very sinister indeed. Lovely writing as always.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    I dread to think what happens next…shudder. wonderful writing.

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  6. What WILL he do now? A great mystery in the making.

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  7. “See you later.” Ominous and well told.

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  8. Morgan says:

    Oh dear oh dear oh dear!

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  9. Graham Lawrence says:

    Excellent with a lovely dose of suspense and anticipation.

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  10. Sue says:

    Yikes, you do have a dark side, Sandra!

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  11. Sinister indeed! I am left wondering what he had done and what he would do! A great take on the prompt.

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  12. Lynn Love says:

    Ooh, I like your sinister, Sandra. I wonder what the address is and where it will lead? And what your character did that was so awful in the first place? Such a lot of tantalising clues. Great story. Did I see you were runner up in a Writers’ Forum story comp on a lift theme? Congrats if so – the story sounded very intriguing 🙂

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  13. paulmclem says:

    Reminds me of Dr Lecter lining up his next meal.

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  14. I couldn’t help but smile about the regret part. Very well done.

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  15. Sinister but actually quite funny… I guess if you are dealing with the criminally insane you should really be more careful about giving our information… Great write.

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  16. michael1148humphris says:

    I never liked the briefcase: but I liked your story.

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  17. S.M.Peterson says:

    Ooooo what happens next? The humor in this contrasts nicely with the sinister aspect! Great work.

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  18. gahlearner says:

    This plays like a thriller in my head. Sinister and humorous. You make us like the horrible. Great story.

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  19. wmqcolby says:

    Shaking head in disbelief. Sandra, you do sinister a service by keeping it away from C.E. Ayr and making it your own! 😀 All in all a terrific story. I need to study your methods closer.
    Five out of five briefcases.

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  20. writelindy says:

    A great story about doing research. All jobs need it.

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  21. Liz Young says:

    Sinister is right! You had me shuddering from the very first.

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  22. Yep, you went sinister all right. Well done.

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  23. Oh this is very disturbing.
    Very disturbing.

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  24. A sociopath? Or was it something less sinister — maybe the narrator grew up in a strict home did something that had been forbidden but society as a whole wouldn’t see as shocking.

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  25. Indira says:

    Sinister indeed. Great story.

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  26. Dale says:

    Oh my… who was analysing whom? Definitely must break the patient confidentiality rules here!

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  27. Picture of a psychopath! Woooooh!

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  28. Sonny Price says:

    That’s… disturbing. 🙂 Great story!

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  29. I sense danger lurking in the doctors future. YIKES …!!!
    I enjoyed this, Sandra. I could enjoy more.
    Isadora 😎

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  30. draliman says:

    Wow, very chilling. Next victim chosen…

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  31. Margaret says:

    A chilling story. I can feel the tension building up throughout the conversation and I was wondering where it would take me. Perfect ending.

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  32. So delightfully sinister I read it again, for the sheer pleasure of it.

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  33. rgayer55 says:

    When the creator was handing out emotions such as regret and remorse, this individual must have called in sick.

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  34. Dahlia says:

    Gave me the shivers

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  35. I hope someone has that poor man’s back. What Rochelle said reminded me of a movie I saw on TV called “The Rosary Murders”. A mentally disturbed man is killing priests and nuns and makes a confession. The priest knows but can say nothing because of the “seal of the confessional” which priests take very seriously. It’s an absolute. Priests have gone to jail rather than reveal information from the confessional; When the man confesses, the priest thinks the man will kill him. It keeps the viewer on the edge of their seat. Good writing as always, Sandra. — Suzanne

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