The German Girls – Friday Fictioneers, November 2016

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Copyright Jan Wayne Fields

 

Never understood the meaning of clean-limbed until that summer, watching from the woods.

Every morning those girls emerged from their tents, stretching slender arms to the sky, their breasts outlined perfectly against flimsy nightwear.

They’d return from the showers, skin glowing, wet hair glistening in the sunlight and we’d yearn to be a fly on the inside of those canvas tents.

One morning they caught us.  Damn near wet ourselves, expecting big trouble.

But that’s girls for you – unpredictable.

Difficult to tell which of us was horniest, but for sure it was a summer none of us will ever forget.

November almost over, thank goodness.  It’s bitterly cold here, but a crisp, clear day with blindingly blue skies and we’re off out to enjoy the sunshine.  Thanks once again to Rochelle, the multi-talented leader of our happy band of Friday Fictioneers

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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80 Responses to The German Girls – Friday Fictioneers, November 2016

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I’d expected the narrator would be a predator (too much reading of your past work, I guess). I laughed out loud when I read on and discovered this was an altogether more innocent coming of age story

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    Love this coming of age story. It put me in mind of the movie, the Summer of 42 during my own coming of age years. Atmospheric piece…almost a novel in a hundred words.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Sandra says:

      Hi Rochelle, yes I titled it Summer of 85 at first, but then I thought it reminded me of times spent hitch-hiking through Belgium and Luxembourg many years ago. The youth hostels were full of raunchy, self-possessed and generally naked German girls, whilst we Brits were simpering away behind our towels. 🙂

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  3. ceayr says:

    Well Sandra, not sure what to say.
    A rather raunchy piece, not very Reader’s Digest!
    And interesting how you get into the mind of a teenage boy.
    Entertaining tale

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  4. Indira says:

    Interesting story Sandra. Everyone can imagine what goes inside a teenager boy.

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  5. Al says:

    Love this. It reminded me of Porky’s.

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  6. Excellent voice in this. The language is elegant and precise. Well done.

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  7. Sightsnbytes says:

    I am blushing while I read this, Very Naughty!…but enjoyable

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  8. Iain Kelly says:

    Not the ending I was expecting – like the boy. I don’t remember girls being that forward when I was a teenager! A good chuckle, well done 🙂

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  9. Not what I expected and thank you for that!!! Loved it.

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  10. Dale says:

    Now that was a perfect telling of young lust! And they say the Brits are prudes… 😉

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  11. wmqcolby says:

    Oh, what a summer that must have been. Boys will be boys.
    Economical writing at its finest, Sandra. Wunderbar!

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  12. You brilliantly captured and depicted the emotions for a wonderful story,

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  13. Lynn Love says:

    Great voice for a teenage lad, Sandra – or a man remembering being a teenage lad! Such a ring of reality to it 🙂 Nicely told

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  14. michael1148humphris says:

    1985 indeed this sounds more like 1965 and flower power. Then again it reminded me of Barbara Windsor and Carry on Camping – Fabulous

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    • Sandra says:

      Thanks Michael. Yes it was longer ago than the eighties – my first title attempt was simply to put distance between the summer of 42 and this piece. Glad you liked.

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  15. I love this. Nice to read about some women who know what they want on FF (too often we just bump them off!).

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  16. Lizy says:

    Brilliant surprise at the end – a very sexy 100 words!

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  17. This reminds me of those stories I red as a teenager… a bit like a dream for a teenage boy actually. Love it

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  18. Ooh, I didn’t see the end coming (pun half-intended) and I liked it all the more for that!

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  19. This reminds me of so many archeology camps I’ve lived in! Ah, youth…. Thanks for the memories.

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  20. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    I love this story. From the way you incorporated your travels in the eighties into the title, to the use of the word clean-limbed, to the happy ending, it was all of a piece, if you will and fantastic. I was there with the boys, yearning…

    Very well done.

    Yours on the lock,

    Doug

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    • Sandra says:

      Aww, Doug! Welcome. If I’d known you were coming I’d have baked a better cake. 🙂 So good to see you back on here, and glad you enjoyed it. It was a tad earlier than the eighties but who’s counting…?

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  21. Excellent raunchy writing with a solid opening, middle, and a lusty end. Great piece of work.

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  22. Ha, well I did not expect that ending! Great little saucy story 🙂

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  23. plaridel says:

    thanks for the memories. 🙂

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  24. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    Just have to love this story about confident young women that know what they want and are not afraid to take charge.

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  25. rgayer55 says:

    That made my pulse rise and brought back fond memories. Time for a cold shower now.

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  26. Michael Wynn says:

    Yeah, that takes me back Sandra but I don’t think it ever turned out that good for us. 🙂

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  27. i b arora says:

    that’s beautifully said, great

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  28. jellico84 says:

    Oh, man, I’ve missed this. Love the story. Have seen this played out many a time….

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  29. HonieBriggs says:

    Oh, Sandra. Naughty. Nice.

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  30. This made me smile…and for good reason 😉

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  31. Ha! I really wasn’t expecting that ending. A lovely story.

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  32. Dahlia says:

    Very smoothly done 🙂

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  33. draliman says:

    A summer to remember for those lads. Lovely “coming of age” story 🙂

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  34. Ah those teenage boys!

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  35. Absolute Sirens! Great story Sandra.

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  36. Laurie Bell says:

    Ha ha I’m glad the narrator wasn’t a creep… still young campers huh?

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  37. What a twist. I was expecting a different ending. I grew up in the 50’s and was extremely naive,. I remember one guy my age who taught in the same school as me saying if it hadn’t been for his wife, they’d still be holding hands. 🙂 — Suzanne

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  38. gahlearner says:

    Atmosphere, tone, words, wonderful tale. It’s funny, the boys at my time were dreaming about the English girls.

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