Abducted! Friday Fictioneers, January 2017

Copyright CE Ayr

Copyright CE Ayr

Rain hammers on the roof, as the carriage sways and jolts through the forest, and the horses whinny in panic when lightning flashes reveal decaying bodies dangling from barren branches.

Glancing sideways, I flinch at his stern countenance, my stomach roiling apprehensively at the torment awaiting me at Surbiton Hall.

The carriage lurches to a halt, and my senses reel in despair.

He leaps onto the gravel drive, and hammers on the great doors, which swing open immediately.

She is there.  My wicked stepmother. She speaks.

“I hope we’re not going to have any more of her drama-queen antics this half-term, Harold.”

A lighter note this week, I think – after all we’re halfway through the winter now.  Thanks to our own Snow Queen, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for her ministrations on behalf of Friday Fictioneers. 

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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98 Responses to Abducted! Friday Fictioneers, January 2017

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Decaying bodies hanging from trees is a lighter note? A lovingly evoked Gothic atmosphere, Sandra

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  2. ceayr says:

    The magician misdirects.
    Wonderfully well done.

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  3. Dear Sandra,

    Methinks the young lady on her way home for midterm has a vivid imagination. What say ye? Well written no matter what.

    Shalom,

    The Snow Queen 😉

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  4. wmqcolby says:

    Hee-hee-heeeeeeee! Fun stuff, Sandra. But, why could I see Rochelle playing the part of the narrator? I’d say that would be a bit “extreme” in casting … don’t you agree, Cuzzin’ Shelley? 😀

    Five out of five Games of Thrones.

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  5. Dangling bodies from trees put me in mind of a ghoul’s Christmas. Well done.

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  6. The extreme Gothic had me thrown too. Nice twist 🙂

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  7. jellico84 says:

    oooo, that was a scary one! Good write!

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  8. The dark intertwines with a flash of comedy in this one. Such a lovely piece, overall!

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  9. Nice…but I get the feeling I’m missing something…

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  10. Sandra says:

    It’s just a child with an over-active imagination going to spend half-term holiday with her father and stepmother. Nothing to miss, I’m afraid, Claire.

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  11. Dale says:

    Over-active you say? Just a tad… guess she and the step-mother are not the best of friends… a classic

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  12. Lynn Love says:

    Love that opening paragraph – who could resist galloping through the rest after that? I’m sure the holidays will be better than that – at least minus the swinging bodies! Ever tried your hand at Gothic fiction, Sandra? You’d be very good at it. Great tale 🙂

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  13. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice twist, I wonder what else she will imagine over the holidays.

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  14. Graham Lawrence says:

    What a wonderful sense of humour (a lighter note). Great enjoyable read.

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  15. Moody!

    Nice work. 🙂

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  16. My stomach toiled too. Evil stepmom indeed. Loved it!

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  17. With an imagination like that she has the makings of a good writer!

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  18. Mike says:

    She sounds like a handful this one.

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  19. I thought vivid imagination too! Her musings were so realistic they gave me shivers. Great story Sandra!

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  20. Ha! This one caught me off guard.

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  21. elmowrites says:

    Either the writer or the narrator is laying it on a bit thick here. Knowing that’s not your usual style, I am going to lay the blame at the feet of the young drama queen. Makes me wonder whether the reality is actually a hatchback pulling into the drive of a semi in Croydon! 😉

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  22. Liz Young says:

    A girl with a vivid imagination – was that you?

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  23. draliman says:

    Ha ha! Judging by her imaginings on the way to the house, I fear more “drama-queen antics” are in store 🙂

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  24. gahlearner says:

    I love it. This kid will be a writer one day. 😀

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  25. Ha.. what a great imagination… The bodies swinging and the wicked stepmother sounded too good (bad) to be true.

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  26. Laurie Bell says:

    Ha! Soooo well told. I want more of this!

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  27. plaridel says:

    i wonder what happens next. incarcerated in the tower perhaps?

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  28. I second the comment that she’ll be a writer!

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  29. Michael Wynn says:

    Great misdirect, having travelled by train through forests in Central Europe recently I was right there until e arrived at Surbiton where my Mother grew up.

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  30. Hopefully, she’ll put that imagination of hers to good use in the future!
    …when I grow up! My tale.

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  31. rgayer55 says:

    Since when did you start writing humor? I could see this as a scene from a Mel Brooks movie.

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  32. I pity the child and scorn his acceptance of her treatment!

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  33. Was it her childhood that was abducted?

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  34. She’ll always have Heathcliff.
    I prescribe some sunshine for you.
    Tracey

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  35. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    You’re vivid images drew me in to what I thought was going to be a dark story. Absolutely loved the twist.

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  36. Maddie's Mama says:

    I hope she grows up to be a writer… sounds like she has the imagination for it.

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  37. Ashley Danielle says:

    Okay did not see that coming! Love the Cinderella or Snow White illusions. At first I saw step mom and thought Cinderella, but the Harold made me think of Snow White. Love it!

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  38. Dahlia says:

    She must hate her boarding school! Enjoyed the read thank you

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  39. Sandra says:

    Thanks for visiting Dahlia. 🙂

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  40. HonieBriggs says:

    Teenagers! I could see the imaginary scene playing out in the mind of a “go-between” child.

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  41. mjlstories says:

    Left me reeling and roiling. I hate Surbiton too but perhaps not this much!

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  42. I take it Harold exaggerates a bit?
    Amusing story this week Sandra.

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  43. Love it, love it, love it. Kapow, the surprise.

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  44. Hehehehe!
    She either thinks she’s Fiona Shrek’s wife or Cinderella.
    Loved it.

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  45. rogershipp says:

    Wow! What an opening scene! Enjoyed.

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  46. Ha ha! You captured her character expertly.

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  47. You totally had me gritting my teeth, and then smiling wryly. FANTASTIC bit of fiction this week, Sandra! Different than your usual, except for the wonderful quality. Loved it!

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