Valentine’s Day Massacre – Friday Fictioneers, February 2017

Copyright Liz Young

Copyright Liz Young


You sent it???”

Her fantasies had been shattered, and also the cachet of having an unknown admirer. How could he imagine that she, the homecoming queen, would be seen dead with him?  Not exactly trailer-park trash, but close enough in her eyes, and those of her sniggering friends.

Her response had been brief and cutting.

Years later, across the desk, she wonders if he remembers her.  Probably not.

“So I was hoping for a loan, say fifty thousand over ten years?” she says, hopefully.

Something stirs behind his horn-rimmed spectacles.

He remembers perfectly, it seems.

“So hell’s frozen over then?”

I should be able to do better with a cracking prompt like this, but once again I’m dashing off out, early doors, as we say over here.  Great choice for a Friday Fictioneers photo, Rochelle, and many thanks to Liz Young for providing it.



About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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72 Responses to Valentine’s Day Massacre – Friday Fictioneers, February 2017

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    He’s waited a long time for this, and I think he’s going to enjoy it… A harsh lesson learned. Nice one Sandra.


  2. neilmacdon says:

    Hell hath no fury like a nerd scorned.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. ceayr says:

    Do better?
    Sandra, even your title is brilliant!
    Great story of karma biting your bum.

    Liked by 3 people

  4. Of course he remembers! I want to hear part two of this piece!


  5. Revenge is a dish best served cold. Perfect.


  6. Liz Young says:

    He waited long enough to get his own back!


  7. Lynn Love says:

    Always best not to be cruel – you never know when those you’ve hurt might get their own back. Wonder what the odds are of her getting that loan? 🙂
    Even ‘dashed’ off, your stories are winners.


  8. Dear Sandra,

    I love this! Paybacks indeed. My guess is she’s not getting the loan and he’s loving every minute of it. If this is what you “dash off” I’m in total awe.




  9. The nerd’s revenge! I bet all those girls were sorry they made fun of Mark Zuckerberg, too!


  10. Ah! Karma always gets you in the end!


  11. granonine says:

    Chickens coming home to roost.


  12. Rowena says:

    I love this, Sandra. Karma! I could feel and experience all the emotional nuances throughout.
    Picked up what I suspect was a typo: “would be seen dead with him”. Should that read “wouldn’t?” Could also be my Aussie lingo.
    I regret how I treated a few people in my youth, usually because I couldn’t work out how to discuss the situation…either when I was interested or not.
    xx Rowena


    • Sandra says:

      Thanks Rowena. To be honest, I don’t think it works either way, now that I re-examine it. And yes, this story had its roots in a particularly regretful reaction I once had to a valentine card from someone. I still feel bad about it, even now.


  13. Dale says:

    Karma’s a bitch, if you have been…
    And as for your “should be able to do better days”? Please. This is fabulous!


  14. Ouch. This made me uncomfortable, the mark of a well-written story about events and emotions all too human. Pretty sure I’m bruised somewhere.


  15. jellico84 says:

    ooooouuuu, Ouch! Great Karma story

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Take that lady! Brilliant – as ever!

    Click to read my story!

    Liked by 1 person

  17. trentpmcd says:

    Good story. Karma does seem to find a way…

    Liked by 1 person

  18. Sarah Ann says:

    Oops. I think she might be disappointed. You’ve packed so much story in, well done.


  19. It’s sad that way too late in life we learn or hopefully learn, to monitor what we say.


  20. handmadejewelryhaven says:

    I think she will get the loan….but the interest and those ‘fees’!!
    The cost just might be too high.

    Excellent story!

    – Lisa


  21. wmqcolby says:

    Hahahaha! Great end-line, Sandra. But also great other stuff, too. Characters really shine on this one. I seriously ned to study your writings a bit more to see how you pack it all in there. Brilliant!


  22. rgayer55 says:

    How could he forget? Rejection is a bitter pill to swallow, especially when chased with harsh, cruel words. Now, she is forced to eat them. Ha! Loved it.


  23. draliman says:

    Ha ha. Karma! You don’t forget something like that.
    Nice one!

    Liked by 1 person

  24. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    I agree this is a great story of karma coming back to haunt you. Always safest to be nice.

    Liked by 1 person

  25. Laurie Bell says:

    Oooooo revenge is sweet. 😊

    Liked by 1 person

  26. Mike says:

    I hope he’s the bigger person, it will reinforce how wrong she was. Loved the horn rimmed glasses.


  27. plaridel says:

    this reminds of the saying, the best revenge is to be successful. 🙂


  28. Exquisite… though somehow I feel that an even better revenge is to treat her with grace… but she might be immune against such subtleties


  29. Michael Wynn says:

    Everything comes to those who wait and everything comes round in the end. Nicely written, Sandra


  30. Great story–it comes back around perfectly.


  31. He may have had to wait for his revenge, but got it in the end! It reminded me a bit of the Skater Boy song. Excellently written.


  32. yuhublogger says:

    She’s never going to see that fifty thousand, is she? Ha Ha.. A fun take on the prompt.


  33. gahlearner says:

    Ah, if only life really worked like this. The perfect revenge, and so satisfying. Great writing, Sandra.


  34. HonieBriggs says:

    Placing my bets on karma right now! This is fantastic, Sandra.


  35. Admittedly I was anticipating something much darker from you, Sandra (I apparently took those “nasty” reins this week), but this hits deeper. Karma’s a bitch, and she rarely forgets. I love this line: “Something stirs behind his horn-rimmed spectacles––” very evocative.


  36. Tamal says:

    After that last line I feel bad for the girl. Fantastic story.


  37. A life lesson learned a little late.
    Good tale, Sandra.


  38. He’s really going to enjoy himself here. In fact, he reminds me of a tiger that used to be in a zoo that my brother worked in years ago. One of the keepers was showing off to his friends by teasing a tiger. Two weeks later the tiger saw the keeper was on his own in the pen, so it ambushed him from a tree and basically that was curtains for the guy.
    A great story, as usual.


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