The Missing Piece – Friday Fictioneers, April 2017

Copyright Jellico’s Stationhouse

 

He was the missing piece in the jigsaw of my life, and I had to have him, even though he belonged to someone else.

So when we met socially, the three of us, I was carefully attentive towards her, always making sure I didn’t hold his gaze for too long, and avoiding any physical contact, for fear I’d give myself away.

It was clear he liked me; I knew he would love me.

And I was right – he shows me that every day now.

We’ve moved far away, and our lives together are perfect.

She can have other children anyway.

What a magnificently moody, brooding photo this week from Jellico’s Stationhouse.  Good choice, Rochelle!   Click on the blue froggy to add your 100 word story to the weekly gathering that is Friday Fictioneers.

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About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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91 Responses to The Missing Piece – Friday Fictioneers, April 2017

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I thought I knew what was going on until the last sentence? Is “he” a child? Did she steal him?

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    That last line sizzles. I read it twice to ‘get’ it, but when I did it was the big OH! Brilliant.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Oh, what a twist! You left me speechless.

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  4. writelindy says:

    Moody and a great twist in the tale.

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  5. Stunning twist – I didn’t need to read it twice!

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  6. I’m sensing there’s an Amber alert happening soon. Well done.

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  7. jellico84 says:

    Interesting… loved it!

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  8. I didn’t see that one coming. I wish this were simply fiction.

    janet

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  9. Iain Kelly says:

    Wonderful as always, I’m sure a lot of us feel like we have a missing jigsaw piece in life somewhere.

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  10. She creates a hole in another’s life to fill the hole in her life. Sigh!

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  11. Sandra, your writing kills me. In a good way. Bravo.

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  12. beautyswot says:

    Every parent’s worst nightmare!

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  13. Sandra, this is absolutely brilliant. Few people write characters that truly scare me. But this narrator is the thing nightmares and broken lives are made of. Wow.

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    • Sandra says:

      Thank you Magaly, I’m honoured to have scared you. 🙂 I loved your offering this week, – the language was delightful. I’m sure I’ve commented on your site before, so I don’t know why a form-filling was required in order to do so again. But just to let you know I’ve been there. 😉

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      • If you’ve cleaned up your computer since you commented the last time (or are using a new device), the site will ask for the information again. Sorry for the extra step, but my posts would be drowning in spam otherwise. 😦

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        • Sandra says:

          Sadly, my computer IS drowning in spam, spoof, phishing and porn messages right now, which is why I’m unwilling to give out my email address any more than I have to. I haven’t cleaned up my computer, incidentally, and only use the one device for commenting, but this has happened before with other sites. I look forward to reading more of your work, however. 🙂

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  14. Rommy Driks says:

    Shades of Nabokov. He justifies his monstrosity thought pretty lies he tells himself. Really well done and horrifying.

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    • Sandra says:

      I love it when a reader sees something in my story that I didn’t intend. Particularly when that ‘something’ offers a better interpretation of what I wrote. How infinitely more horrifying the story becomes. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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  15. michael1148humphris says:

    Well done, this a story to conjure up fear in any mothers life.

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  16. Lynn Love says:

    Oh, my word! There was I thinking infidelity and you give me child abduction! Very well structured with a lovely set up and a killer twist in the last line. Expertly done as always

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  17. paulmclem says:

    Sounds like a spot of cradle snatching. At first this felt sinister, but then it mellowed into a love story, of sorts.

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  18. Ouch! The twist was delightfully harsh.

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  19. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    What a heartbreaking twist. I was annoyed she was stealing someone’s husband, now I’m furious.

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  20. So, I wasn’t the only one who went dark for this prompt. Nice angle.

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  21. Oh you heartless thing!
    Good story. Was it her spouse or child the narrator ran off with?

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  22. Holy crap…that took me a minute…then..yikes!

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  23. Brilliant twist Sandra.

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  24. rgayer55 says:

    It took a minute before the lightbulb came on. Making children is a rather nasty business–not the initial act, mind you–but the birthing, diapers, teething, etc. They are much more pleasant after they’ve been weaned and are big enough to fetch stuff for you.

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  25. I greatly enjoyed this cat and mouse game that you played with us. Sinister is the word for this but then you are such a masterly writer. Superb is an understatement.

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  26. draliman says:

    Great piece, dark and twisty.

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  27. yarnspinnerr says:

    Intriguing! Alas human relations are rarely straight forward. Great write as always.

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  28. Enjoyed the twist at the end. Beautifully written!

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  29. goroyboy says:

    Naughty naughty, I could feel the tension:)

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  30. Rowena says:

    What a creepy woman. Well done!

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  31. I had to read it twice! Brilliant twist!

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  32. Oh hell, that hit me in the guts. This is every mother’s worse dread. That poor woman. And the way the abductor makes light of the pain she has caused with that last sentence, as if she has stolen an item of furniture or a doll that can be replaced without too much inconvenience.

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  33. Wow. I didn’t expect that twist at all. If this were a contest, you’d like the challenge this week. Very well done.

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  34. Incredibly powerful, Sandra. A mouth-open ending for me. Ssooo … good.
    Isadora 😎

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  35. Whoa! That last line was unexpected. Very well done!

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  36. plaridel says:

    it didn’t seem fair stealing somebody’s child. but who am i to judge?

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  37. gahlearner says:

    You do know how to lead your readers around by the nose. Nice misdirection. You left me with a heart-felt ‘ouch’ in the end. The poor parents. Brilliant writing (as always 🙂 ).

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  38. Sarah Ann says:

    Oh wow. Didn’t see that coming. His new parent comes across as so caring, and calculating. So tightly crafted.

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  39. LucciaGray says:

    Great twist at the end of your flash! Some mothers in law should be kept at arm’s length 😂 Not all ‘though. I’m a nice mother in law, even if I say so myself 🙂

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  40. Michael Wynn says:

    Great twist, I thought it just a tale of one woman stealing another’s man until that moment. Very hard hitting and effective

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  41. magarisa says:

    The first line pulled me in, and the last line confused me until I read it again! Nice one.

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  42. Amy Reese says:

    I had to read it twice, but then whoa…that’s pretty evil all right. Superb, Sandra.

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