Nature Walk – Friday Fictioneers, August 2017

Copyright Jan Fields

You see things in the forest… in the dark.

Sometimes rabbits, startled by torchlight, or dead voles and dormice, abandoned by fleeing owls or foxes.

I hurry back to camp; no-one saw me leave and now they’ve kicked over the embers, everyone’s gone to bed.

The lamp is extinguished in my parents’ tent; Mummy was tipsy, and is already snoring.

But a light still burns in Aunt Josephine’s tent, and silhouettes move in strange ways.

I’m getting a pony; maybe a puppy too.  I know this.

Because otherwise I’ll tell Mummy what I saw in the forest… in the dark.

Something of a revamp this week, I’m afraid.  I’m still trying to restore cognitive functions after entertaining three grandchildren for five days.  We loved having them, and are amazed that one pink sock was the only thing left behind.  This must be a record.  Thanks to Rochelle for her leadership of Friday Fictioneers, in what I know was an equally busy week for her.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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52 Responses to Nature Walk – Friday Fictioneers, August 2017

  1. Lovely sinister feel to this. Got to love a family secret!


  2. Lynn Love says:

    Oh, Aunt Josephine, this is going to cost you dear! Love your descriptions of the night (those dropped, dead creatures hinting at the dark twist to com), Sandra, the little girls voice and her calculatiing certainty. Nothing all that sweet and naive about that one. Hope you recover quickly from your lovely – exhausting – week.


  3. neilmacdon says:

    I love this, Pastoral and sinister


  4. Dear Sandra,

    What a sweet, innocent little girl. Too bad she wasn’t in your story. 😉 Loved the voice in this, it was almost audible. Mommy and Aunt Josephine better mind their P’s and Q’s. Revamps are nice. No laws against updates. Glad to see you survived the grands. Your character isn’t based on one of them, is it? 😯




  5. Love this. Reminds me a bit of Cold Comfort Farm. “I saw something nasty in the woodshed!”


  6. Wonderful little story with more than a hint of the dark. Loved this Sandra.


  7. granonine says:

    Oh dear. This child could grow up to be rather dangerous 🙂


  8. Jelli says:

    Oh, the joys of tent camping and lights. HEHEH!


  9. Now I won’t get sleep wondering what she saw in the dark 😦


  10. trentpmcd says:

    Hmmm, I hate to guess at what she saw, but I’m wondering if it is Daddy who will buy the pony and puppy, not so-called “Aunt” Josephine as others have said….


  11. James says:

    Aunt Josephine is making hanky panky with Daddy? Wow.


  12. Moon says:

    I wonder what and all the little girl saw “in the dark”. The little girl’s curiosity intrigues me .
    Wonderful story, Sandra! 🙂


  13. gahlearner says:

    I’m worried about what this child will be like as an adult. She already knows the manipulation game… I think you’ve recovered your cognitive funktions very well, Sandra. 🙂


  14. Dale says:

    Well now… if Daddy and Aunt Josephine are not going to wait to be in a more secluded area, then they have to suffer the consequences. Sharp kid!


  15. Sarah says:

    Looks like Daddy’s in trouble! Loved the images of kicked over embers and silhouettes moving in strange ways.


  16. Fluid Phrase says:

    The clever kid who wants a puppy :). A Clever take on the prompt too!


  17. michael1148humphris says:

    Never knew that camping could be such fun or so rewarding.😉😉


  18. Loved this! Wonderful atmosphere. :o)


  19. pennygadd51 says:

    Great story! The character’s voice was beautifully judged, to the extent that it sounded like an internal voice and not spoken out loud.


  20. It will cost a bit… and the little girl has learned the easiest way to make money… great story.


  21. Oh, Daddy is a very bad man. I love your descriptions of what one sees in the forest in the night. One heck of a story.


  22. subroto says:

    Great voice. Daddy should be proud, it will cost him now but the little girl is going to grow up to be a fine politician one day.


  23. Mike says:

    Oh me, Oh my … What little girls see when they spy !!


  24. draliman says:

    You’re never too young to start your blackmailing career! I liked the atmosphere of your story.


  25. Rowena says:

    Your little girl sounds very well versed the the birds and the bees. This little girl sounds a bit too calculating and scary. Well done.
    xx Rowena


  26. This little but big manipulator will always have her way in life as the dark holds many secrets and she knows where to look. loved reading you naughty story, Sandra C.


  27. Laurie Bell says:

    Ooooooo this is creepy. Well told. I think that daddy is going to regret this holiday


  28. plaridel says:

    what a courageous and inquisitive girl. she’d go far in this world. 🙂


  29. This is so brilliantly written that even I could see what was going on! Happy blackmailing young lady.

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  30. HonieBriggs says:

    Blackmail in the forest! Nice. Kids do say the darndest things, don’t they?


  31. rgayer55 says:

    Smart girl. I sense she has a future in business–or politics.

    I can relate to your remark about regaining cognitive functions after entertaining three grandchildren for five days. Connie and I can barely make it through fourteen hours in the same situation. The recovery time takes longer after each visit. She feeds them a lot of ice cream, which seems to keep them sated and happy.


  32. Indira says:

    Clever girl she is. Loved the story.


  33. Liz Young says:

    Infant blackmailer – love it!


  34. An adolescent blackmailer! She will have an interesting future. Love the dark feel of this.


  35. You’ve evoked a feeling of worry as to the adult this one will be.


  36. amiewrites74 says:

    Hmmm, I think this little girl has a future in politics…


  37. k rawson says:

    Love the contrast of the lyrical language, paired with the girl’s opportunistic nature.


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