She no longer felt cold. Indeed, if she could have, she would have slipped out of her nightdress, baring her burning skin to the gentle caress of the snow.
But only her hands moved, her arms long since numbed.
She slurred his name.
Then spelt it out carefully in the snow.
Allan…
Headlights flashed along the drive – a car door slammed. Help at last.
“Here…” she whimpered.
Footsteps approached, halted.
Slowly, thoroughly, thoughtfully, snow was scuffed, then smoothed over the name.
“Dogged little cow, aren’t you?” muttered Allan, as thick flakes obliterated his retreating footprints.
Such a cold, cold heart…
Rochelle leads the Friday Fictioneers into December, with all that that entails. Still, it’s got to be better than November… If you have a 100 word story in response to the prompt… join us! Thanks again, Rochelle.
You are the queen of the chillers, Sandra
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Thanks for reading, Neil. 🙂
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Allan has clearly had enough of her…
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He could have just jilted her, I guess, but some guys like to go for the dramatic finale.
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Dear Sandra,
Allan’s heart is beyond ice…it’s stone. Chilling piece that left me shivering. As always well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. Haven’t done one of these in a while. Or it seems so to me. ;
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Oh wow, that’s genuinely disturbing!
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Yes, I’m not altogether comfortable with the scenario, I must admit.
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Beyond disturbing….
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I think so. 😦
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But you wrote it…..
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No, the muse wrote it… I just stand by in horror… 😉
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Good response!
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In my line of work, he’d be identified as a psychopath. No heart, no sympathy,no compassion, no remorse. Beyond cold.
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I think ‘psychopath’ says it. 😦
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Chilling (in more ways than one!)
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Thanks for reading. 🙂
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Nasty Allan. Hope she haunts him forever.
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I like a woman who gets her own back. 🙂
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Me too.
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Yikes. The killer comes back to make sure the job is done.
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and has the gall to become impatient…
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Like a scene from a horror movie! Brilliantly written Sandra.
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Thanks Keith. 🙂
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That was most chillingly done, Sandra! Oh what a cad – even if she has been relentless…
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Thanks Dale. Great photo, Dale.
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Thanks! I had to stop and take It, it stood out! Dumb-dumb forgot to turn off his sprinkler system for the winter!
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Wow! Heart of ice, indeed! Well told.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thanks Susan.
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I had to read this a couple of times… how awful. Beautifully written.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Wow, that is flash fiction at its most dramatic! Superbly written, Sandra.
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Thanks Penny. 🙂
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Oh, ouch, that was vicious beyond vicious. Great story.
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Thank you! 🙂
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He returned just to insult her again? What a wonderfully evil villain you’ve cooked up. I second the hope that she’ll come back to haunt him!
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Evil indeed, Joy. 🙂
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wow! Nasty man. You have a way of bring on the bleak. In a good way.
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Thanks, Sascha. 🙂
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Just when there was a spark of hope!!! Very creepy. And oh so well done.
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He is creepy – sometimes I scare myself. 😦
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Brilliantly wicked! Absolutely, unreservedly, loved it! And wish I had written it 🙂
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Thank you!
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Whatever’s going on here, I’ve decided I don’t like Allan.
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A very good “chilling” story
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I think Allen is having an affair with the Ice Woman. Her tendencies appear to be rubbing off on him.
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That was chilling and excellent.
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A great story Sandra. So much drama in just 100 words.
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That is black as pitch! Wonderfully written and suitably chilling
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Such evil! If Allen were female, Betty Davis would be perfect for the role.
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Heart of ice indeed! Well written icy tale.
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Oh the chills you packed into those 100 words–it’s the imaginings of what’s to come. Nicely done!
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Some people are just twisted and selfish. They don’t seem to have a conscience. Good writing as always, Sandra. —- Suzanne
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This is cold as ice… cannot really understand… “cow” says a lot I think. If he’d said “b*tch” she could have been to blame to something else than growing old.
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Dang! Cold hearted, indeed!
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what a jerk. that’s no way to treat a lady.
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Another great story Sandra. Wonderful understated menace, I don’t think that I want to meet Allen in a dark alley.
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Very good, pulled me right in…
Scott
Mine: https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2017/12/11/fall-of-our-discontent/
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