Calling Home – Friday Fictioneers, December 2017

Copyright Ted Strutz

“Hi Jeanie, how’s it going?”

“Fine. You?”

“Terrific. Think I might have a contract lined up.”

“Really?”

“Right – guy saw me perform, left a number for me to ring.”

“Great. When you coming home, honey?”

“Soon Jeanie, my luck’s changing now, gonna hit the big time this year.”

“Fingers crossed, then.”

“Can I talk to Susie?”

“Sure, I’ll put her on. Love you.”

“Love you too, Jeanie, talk to you again.”

“Hi Daddy!”

“Hi baby, missing you lots.”

“Me too. Did you catch any, Daddy?”

“Catch any what, sweetheart?”

“Rainbows, Daddy… Mummy said that’s what you were chasing.”

 

Hope you all had a very happy Christmas.  Apologies for submitting a re-tread this week – so much to do, so little time and so it goes.  Or maybe I’m just giving the muse a festive break too.  Best wishes to all Friday Fictioneers for an inspirational 2018, and grateful thanks to our leader, Rochelle, as she takes us into the New Year.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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77 Responses to Calling Home – Friday Fictioneers, December 2017

  1. neilmacdon says:

    I don’t remember this one, Sandra. I searched for the mayhem and couldn’t find it. I had to conclude, you’d written a sweet story. Shame on you!

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    First I’ll apologize for wrongly scheduling the inLinkz. Must be all the holiday cheer.
    I didn’t realize this was a retread. No matter. It’s a good story that goes straight for the heart and yanks the strings. That last line so innocently spoken says it all.

    Shalom

    Rochelle

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  3. Miles Rost says:

    I think my song, “Wheel In The Sky” by Journey, would be more appropriate for this story, rather than for my story. Well done! Definitely Well done!

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  4. The last line has left me with a smile on my face! Delightful Sandra.

    Click to read my FriFic!

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  5. The dark side lightens with this story, Sandra. The dialogue speaks of many things unsaid. Love’s true power.

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  6. granonine says:

    Always chasing rainbows. Perfect for the prompt. Since I’m relatively new at this, I had no idea we were ealing with a rerun, so I just enjoyed your story as something a little different from your norm 🙂

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  7. Moon says:

    Beautiful story, Sandra.
    Wonderful dialogue.

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  8. bbryanthomas says:

    Loved this one Sandra, having been a bit of a rainbow-chaser myself

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  9. Love this. I remember reading an old Peanuts cartoon where Sally misheard this expression and told Snoopy he was always “changing rainbows.” I like that one too.

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  10. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve captured a distinctive, and attractive, voice for the conversation. What a bitter-sweet last line you’ve given Susie, capturing the wistful longing for the un-named father’s return. Nice story.

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  11. What a wonderful story weaved in that conversation… really very good end to it… maybe there’s a rainbow for every one.

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  12. EagleAye says:

    Haha! I love this. A lot of inventors really are chasing them. Some of them actually catch one now and then. Love the way this played out.

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  13. Iain Kelly says:

    I hope he keeps chasing the rainbows and ignores the critics.

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  14. I hope Susie’s innocent comment makes him think twice about the needs of his family. But it’s as they say.: “Little pitchers have big ears.”

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  15. Such a lovely last line. it says so much about the whole situation.

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  16. draliman says:

    Ha, out of the mouths of babes. From the guy’s attitude on the phone I got the impression he was always chasing the “next big thing”…

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  17. This could be a scene from a film!

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  18. If rainbows were not meant to be chased, they would not be so damn spectacular. Lovely story Sandra, an ode to all of ‘rainbow – chasers’

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  19. Lynn Love says:

    Ah, Mummy needs to bitch about Daddy just a bit more quietly … Let’s hope he can prove her wrong and catch one. Nicely written Sandra

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  20. rgayer55 says:

    I don’t remember this one either. Perhaps I was too busy chasing my own rainbows.

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  21. That was excellently done – especially that last line! Loved it.

    I’m going to resume writing stories with FF in the New Year.
    Happy Christmas!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  22. Liz Young says:

    He has a very understading wife – wonder how much longer that will last?

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  23. Jelli says:

    Oh, out of the mouths of babes indeed. Gut wrenching story.

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  24. Dale says:

    Not a repeat for me and absolutely fabulous. Love, love, love, it!

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  25. Susan says:

    The faith of your child will keep you going. Wonderful story Sandra

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  26. Lovely story with a heart wrenching end. I haven’t read it before so glad you reposted.

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  27. The innocent straightforwardness of the young. No camouflaging!

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  28. Great twist at the end, Sandra. Poor misguided daddy, I hope he proves her wrong.

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  29. I love it! The honesty of a child. Great ending! =)

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  30. plaridel says:

    great story. i missed the first time you posted it. glad you did it again. happy new year!

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  31. Aww…poor daddy. That had to hurt!
    Well done Sandra.

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  32. Oh that rainbow chase…It is tempting, but unfortunately we never seem to find what we desire. Great take on the image!

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  33. magarisa says:

    This tugs at the heartstrings. What a brilliant ending to the story.

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  34. It’s sad with a touch of humor. I don’t know how parents can stay away from their small children so long. One day he’ll be really sorry. Good writing as always, Sandra. —- Suzanne

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  35. Dahlia says:

    I really enjoyed the dialogue in this story – thanks!

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