A Work In Progress – Friday Fictioneers, March 2018

Copyright J Hardy Carroll

 

Her father taught her to fight like a hell-cat; her mother was teaching her whoring, before Social Services intervened.

I taught her to read and write, telling her she could be the brightest and the best.

Down the line, probably at a price, someone polished, reinvented her, and covered her tracks so few knew her origins, and she remained tight-lipped.

I see her on television often.  She’s cool and capable, as I knew she could be.  And very, very powerful.

I’m not sure that anyone’s taught her to be happy.

Still, we did a good job, for the most part.

 I can’t help thinking that given the time we had to think about this prompt photo, I should have come up with a better story.  Still, it is what it is.  Thanks to Rochelle, esteemed leader of Friday Fictioneers, especially for the extra time this week.  🙂

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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73 Responses to A Work In Progress – Friday Fictioneers, March 2018

  1. Lata Sunil says:

    That’s a powerful story in so few words.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Oh that is lovely, Sandra. I loved the mother who taught her whoring and the nobody teaching her to be happy

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  3. Dear Sandra,

    You underestimate yourself. You told a lot of story in a few words and left the reader withe something to ponder. To the world the young woman has arrived, but is she happy? Well done–as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS I must make sure that next week’s is scheduled for the correct day and time. 😉

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  4. Sometimes the outer shell of the mustard seed conceals a tender heart, though it can be heard to tell. Well crafted character, Sandra.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Happiness or success, often it seems to be a choice between the two.

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  6. ceayr says:

    Sublimely brutal.
    Brought the unloved Mrs Thatcher to mind.

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  7. It is, well, wonderful!

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    Terrific story, Sandra. Really hard hitting. For some reason it made me think of Hillary Clinton, although I’m sure there’s nothing like your story in her background…
    Everything in your story is there for maximum effect. It’s wonderful how you pick the key thoughts and hammer them home. In a way, your story is as polished and brutal as your character – and that’s meant as praise!

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  9. An intriguing title. So much has been done and so much progress has been made and yet it seems there is still a great deal of work to do to make her ‘whole’. A superb story, Sandra.

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  10. granonine says:

    Your character is so real. Extremely well crafted, Sandra. I always enjoy your stories.

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  11. James says:

    A very rich story in a few words. Wonder why she’s on television?

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  12. There is something so special with a dandelion child who does well coming from the worst of situation… but the question of her happiness is something entirely different.

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  13. Moon says:

    Makes me so sad about her family background. She deserved to be happy too. I wonder if the ‘I’ is her teacher. I wonder how and at what price she became powerful.
    This is brilliant Sandra( as always)

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  14. Dale says:

    You kill me, Sandra. Every time you “diss” your own story, it turns out to be more than fabulous. This was so very well done.
    So many famous people were brought up with hardships we cannot imagine. I do wonder how many have found happiness…

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    • Sandra says:

      I think I’m disappointed that I didn’t/couldn’t find another ‘voice’ given the time we had. Sometimes I feel the work is pretty same-y. I’m glad you enjoyed it though, and yes, we never know the hardships that have fashioned people into who they are today. Thanks for visiting.

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  15. Alice Audrey says:

    It’s plenty good, short notice or not.

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  16. EagleAye says:

    Sounds like a lot of people stepped in and helped her when she needed it. Good for her. A lot of pro athletes have a story like this one. A story well told!

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  17. jillyfunnell says:

    So brilliantly told I thought it was going to turn out to be someone real! I suppose each reader forms an idea of who it might be. Very well done.

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  18. Every one taught her the art of survival, but not that of being happy. However that is so much harder to achieve. Well done, Sandra!

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  19. mumpoet says:

    I love that the different elements each guide gave her led to her being what she became. It’s such a fundamental aspect of being human that is so often taken for granted. Lovely x

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  20. That is such a powerful story, especially the teaching her to be happy part.

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  21. Mike says:

    I can only echo the other comments, for me you drew a strong character in so few words

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  22. Jelli says:

    I like that one, Sandra. It has hope in it.

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  23. subroto says:

    Nice one Sandra. Somehow this song came to mind https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UYx1qhnaaQ0

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  24. plaridel says:

    i don’t think success can make one happy, but it’s a good start.

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  25. Your title says it all!
    Think we cannot have everything in the seasons we want. As long as it is all there before your life ends!

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  26. liz young says:

    I don’t see how you could have come up with a better story – this one’s great!

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  27. jwdwrites says:

    If you feel unsatisfied with the quality of your story it is because you set the bar so high, Sandra. Without a doubt there are only a handful of Fictioneers with the talent to match your contributions and yours is one I will always seek out when I have the time to looking at Friday Fictioneers. The lesser of your stories are still amongst the best out there. Judging by some of the comments, I am not alone in my opinion. 🙂

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    • Sandra says:

      That’s such a lovely comment, thank you. I’ve been doing Friday Fic for so long now that I’m frequently disappointed when I can’t come up with something that feels to be in a different style, for me anyway. But I’m glad you enjoy reading them, and thanks for visiting, as always.

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  28. Lynn Love says:

    Ah, that’s terrific, Sandra. A life in so few words. You pick out just a few highs and lows but each spot on with their relevance. I’m sure there are a lot of people on TV and in film who share similiar tales.

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  29. It seems sad to think she is successful yet could be hiding unhappiness.There are those who hide their pain well. She may be one of those. I liked the tone of the story. Very enjoyable, Sandra.
    Have a wonderful Sunday …
    Isadora 😎

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  30. She learnt her lessons well but it is a sad tale when her school teacher realised no-one had thought to teach her happiness.

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  31. Dan Bohn says:

    Happiness can be fleeting. I hope she discovers, “Joy.” Beautiful story Sandra.

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  32. draliman says:

    I hope one day she can teach herself happiness. I’m sure it has to come within or something 🙂

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  33. Susan says:

    We are all the product of those who touched our lives. A good lesson to remember.

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  34. I like that. She’s had some good people in her corner.

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  35. I enjoyed your story but to be honest the last line seemed to water it down for me. I suppose I was expecting something more sinister.

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  36. rgayer55 says:

    Well, if politics and/or acting don’t work out she can always go back to whoring.

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  37. I’m touched by your story – so calmly told, about what shapes a person, about not making judgements about someone else based on their current appearance. Thought provoking and well told.

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  38. Sarah Ann says:

    I love this title and the resulting character. It’s a pity she hasn’t yet learnt to be happy, but as a work on progress, there’s still time.

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  39. athling2001 says:

    Well written, but I feel for her.

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