The mall, once dilapidated, is now all chrome, glass and glitter.
A cold marble bench marks the spot where she lost Mikey, cold as the fear that gripped her when he was wrenched from her arms.
Twenty years today. But miracles do happen, children remember things. Bonds, however short-lived, cannot be severed so lightly.
A young man sits down; she catches his eye.
“Are you looking for someone?”
“My mother.”
Jennifer’s heart lurches.
“Ah,” he says, rising.
The approaching woman stops abruptly, before delivering a resounding blow, snapping Jennifer’s head back.
“You evil bitch, you should never have been freed.”
After five months of frustrating building work, today I’m sitting at my new work-station, overlooking the vegetable garden, bordered by an artisanal Purbeck stone wall, topped with a plethora of late spring bulbs. Hopefully, my new surroundings will attract the muse that seems to have gone to ground for months now. Thanks to Rochelle, still finding time in her busy schedule to lead the Friday Fictioneers.
I see the muse at work there, Sandra. That’s one hell of a sting in the tail
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Thanks, Neil.
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That’s unsettling!
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thanks for reading.
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Gosh, I wasn’t expecting that! Very well done, Sandra, in so few words.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you, Susan.
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Ouch! That was one unexpected ending! Great story, Sandra.
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Thanks for reading, Edith.
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A very surprising twist! Well done! And congratulations on finishing your workspace. May your muse thrive in it!
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I sincerely hope so, Jan. 🙂 Thanks for reading.
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Your new work space must have some magic built in to it. This is one of your best, I think.
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Thank you! I’m hoping I can be more productive here.
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Well, that took a nasty turn.
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Didn’t it just?
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Congratulations on the workspace. Sounds delightful.
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Hopefully it will work for me.
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Wow, a great turn at the end Sandra. Enjoy the new workspace.
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Thanks, Iain.
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Dear Sandra,
I can imagine you sitting in your new work space basking in the company of your muse. Love this story. In fact it’s very similar to my first ever FF story “The Lie.” Of course mine didn’t have the amazing edge and slap in the fact that yours does. Wonderfully told.
Shalom from warm and sunny Arizona,
Rochelle
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Thanks for reading, Rochelle. Hope you’re enjoying your travels. Come home safely.
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That went in a totally different direction than I was expecting. I think you gave me torticollis!
Obviously, such a lovely view has inspired you…
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Oooh I like that word. Now where to use it….
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Consider that your next prompt 😉😁😘
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That was a chilling twist.
Wonderfully written, as always.
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Thank you, Moon.
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A fresh workspace is a great invitation to the muse. I see no evidence the muse has been passing you by, though. Always love your stories Sandra.
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It’s been harder and harder to find the inspiration, Karen. Hopefully this will work for me.
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Wow. I didn’t expect that.
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thanks for reading, Penny.
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A mother never forgets or forgives when it comes to her child.
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Thanks for reading Tracey.
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Great twist! I was completely fooled into thinking there would be a happy reunion.
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Moi? Happy reunions? 🙂 Thanks for reading
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Not often. But sometimes happy endings are just too saccharine.
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What a great twist, my head almost snapped back with surprise.
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Ah! Whiplash injury… 🙂
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Wow!! That one got me by surprise!!! Love it
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Thanks for reading.
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Woah! WHAT A TWIST!
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Thanks for dropping by.
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Great twist.
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Thanks Lisa
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I think the blow to her head struck me as well. I’m reeling. Great story Sandra.
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Thanks, Irene.
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Great story with a snappy ending. I envy you your work-space!
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I’m settling in nicely, Liz. 🙂 Just need to find a place for everything.
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Ooh. Nasty. Not a nice way to start my day
Randy.
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Sorry about that, Randy.
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What a sting is the tail, Sandra. It was a beautifully moving piece and you had me drawn in and feeling sorry for the Mum and thinking of the child being kidnapped and then the twist. Very well done.
Best wishes,
Rowena
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Very cool ending!
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Ooh, nice switch-around at the end.
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Oh, that ending was truly a slap in the face – in a good way. Nicely turned, Sandra, nicely turned.
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That is a powerful story. Well told!
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Wow, that caught me out!
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Ha! Ha! Creepy child snatcher gets caught out again. Nice one.
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Brilliant twist. I enjoyed this one 🙂
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I didn’t see that coming!
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Oi, ouch, and what everyone else said. Masterful as awlays, and with an extra snap thanks to the new workspace.
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Unexpected brutal ending, whatever next. Indeed, effective writing in the way of a short slap on the face.
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Brilliant, a moment i the present packed with all the history you could want to know
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Such a strong piece, slapping the reader as well as Jennifer at the end. She is a brave/ foolhardy woman to return to the scene of her crime.
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AS others have said, a powerful story with such a sting in the tale. What’s he planning to do now? Kidnap? Or was a crack to the skull enough payback? Well told tale Sandra. And happy scribbling in your new workspace
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Whoa! So unexpected, but well done. I love the way you constructed it.
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Well done and what an ending.
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