Just Chillin’ – Sunday Photo Fiction

Copyright Susan Spaulding

A man needs space, he said.

Time to reflect…

Time away from his woman.

Other men, he said, might go off with the guys, drinkin’, chasin’ skirt, killin’ stuff in the woods and yankin’ creatures out of rivers and streams.  That wasn’t for him, no sirree.  He was different, he said.  The Almighty had fashioned from a different mould, he said.

Other men, I thought, wouldn’t spend their last dollar on a blimp. Not when their woman ain’t had a new dress since their wedding day, the kids need new shoes and the old pick-up truck don’t go no further than the end of the lane.

He needed solitude, silence, tranquillity he said;  so every weekend he’s up there, chillin’ out in the big blue sky.  Don’t go nowhere, just hangs around there.

And I’m down here… paintin’ the fence, rakin’ over the barren dirt we call our vegetable patch, seein’ to the kids.

What is it they say?  If you love somethin’, set it free.  If it comes back to you, it’s yours… if it don’t …

So I cut the tether rope.  A woman needs to know where she stands.

And now I do…

 

I don’t often have time at weekends to participate in Sunday Photo Fiction, but when I checked on the prompt I remembered I had a story from six years ago that, with a little editing, almost reached the 200 word limit.  Thanks to Susan for taking over the admin for this weekly get together – much appreciated.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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10 Responses to Just Chillin’ – Sunday Photo Fiction

  1. ceayr says:

    Oh I love this!
    Great voice, great character descriptions, and I laughed aloud at the cut.
    Like Usain Bolt, you are different class at both 100 and 200.

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  2. Awesome story, Neel! Absolutely loved it!

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  3. Sandra, This is YOUR story. I am sorry. I thought I clicked on Neel. This is an awesome story!

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  4. James Pyles says:

    Sounds like one of those guys who fakes his own death to start a new life elsewhere.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    Excellent, perhaps this could be rolled out as a test for all relationships 🙂 Great writing and voice Sandra.

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  6. Mike says:

    May you have more time to post stories, for I very much enjoyed this one

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  7. Susan says:

    I join the consensus. The dialect reminds me of rednecks in my home state. I hope this poor woman is set free. No one needs a man like that. Also, thank you for the kind words. I hope you can join in to SPF as often as you can. Your stories are always gems

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  8. Ha ha ha ha ha. Absolutely loved it. Wicked. And what great use of voice.

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  9. athling2001 says:

    He needs to re-think his priorities. Then again, I needs my solitude, too. Well done.

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  10. LOVED this…spectacular ending!

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