When It’s Over – Friday Fictioneers, June 2018

Copyright Jean L Hayes

“You ate them???”

Mo stares at her eggy plate.

“Not all of them…”

“Where are the others then?”

She holds his gaze defiantly.

“In the cake.”

His father had been right.  When Joe said his girlfriend had a terrific rack, his Dad remarked that must be where she kept her brains, ‘cos they sure as hell weren’t in her head.

“Those eggs were the pride of my collection.  Rare as hens’ teeth.”

She glances nervously towards the freshly-chopped almonds on the worktop.

“Those weren’t….”

Joe sighs.

“It’s a metaphor, Mo.”

“I thought they were just nuts…”

She’ll have to go. 

 

Bereft of literary inspiration, I’m just making up the numbers this week.  Sorry about this.  😦  Thanks to Rochelle for all her hard work on keeping the Friday Fictioneers on track and trundling on.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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69 Responses to When It’s Over – Friday Fictioneers, June 2018

  1. neilmacdon says:

    That made me laugh

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Nice chuckle, poor girl…

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  3. It seems awful to laugh at Mo but this was very funny!

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  4. ceayr says:

    I laughed and shuddered to think what eggs from a collection might taste like.
    I wish I could occasionally be this bereft of literary inspiration!

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    • Sandra says:

      These days, CE, I feel as though I’ve used just about used up every idea under the sun. I wonder whether it’s possible to write myself out of this torpor or whether I should simply take a long rest.

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      • ceayr says:

        I understand that, Sandra. Not long ago I felt that my FF efforts were becoming too formulaic and took a break, writing much longer pieces, even novellas. I also spent more time reading instead of writing, and I feel that my mojo is pretty much back again. I guess our brains, like our bodies, need a variety of exercises to stay in shape. Please don’t abandon us completely, I look forward to your writing more than anyone’s on this, or any other, site. Good luck

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  5. Dear Sandra,

    Your version of bereft made me laugh. Nothing to be ashamed of here. Mo isn’t the brightest crayon in the box is she?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Sue says:

    Made me smile….

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  7. Bereft of literary inspiration? But that was such a great story – you really made me smile – especially with that last line!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  8. Anita says:

    Gosh! Yes, Mo must go!
    He’ll miss his prized eggs for life.
    Stranger Outside?- Anita

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  9. pennygadd51 says:

    Loved that story, Sandra. A real smile. The thought of her eating those eggs – and baking with them! – just cracks me up. I don’t reckon you’d lost your MoJoe at all!

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  10. Rowena says:

    Well, Sandra. I agree with the rest that this was great and I also had a great laugh. My kids used to take things very literally like that and had great trouble getting their heads around metaphors. My memory I think “keep your eyes peeled” might have been one of them.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  11. I have a friend just like her! Love it, Sandra

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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  12. jillyfunnell says:

    So well written, I like this very much. Really made me smile when she looks at the chopped almonds!

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  13. Lata Sunil says:

    Lol.. it was funny.

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  14. granonine says:

    I’m going to be laughing over this one for a while, I think 🙂

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  15. Susan says:

    Great job In spite of your lack of inspiration.

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  16. trentpmcd says:

    Yep, Dad was right, a good brain beats a good body any day. Nice chuckle.

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  17. Ooops!! THe lights are on but nobody’s home, eh?? Good one!! 😅

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  18. This made me laugh. (Although I have to say I hate the word ‘rack’ in this context – although it sounds like it would fit with these characters.)

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  19. James Pyles says:

    She needs to upgrade her brain to version 2.0.

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  20. I’m glad you didn’t mention whether she was blond. Or not. 🙂

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  21. Ha… love it..but I shiver at the taste of those aged eggs…
    Then egg-collecting is something I really loathe, Mo should be happy with her.

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  22. lisarey1990 says:

    I like it. Great humour and very natural dialogue.

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  23. Mike says:

    You made me smile, lovely.

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  24. Dale says:

    I love when you apologise for supposedly being “bereft of ideas” or some other hogwash…

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    • Sandra says:

      As I said to CE, I do feel as though I’ve written about most things now, and it’s really hard to come up with anything new. Maybe I need a break. Thanks for reading, hope your computer has recovered.

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  25. Ha ha ha. That was fun, though not for these two I’m sure.

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  26. James McEwan says:

    Not eggsactly the best grounding for a future relationship. Still laughing.

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  27. draliman says:

    Eek, how old were those eggs she just ate? Fun 🙂

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  28. I loved Father’s thoughts and the name you gave the girlfriend. “Mo” kind of begs to not be the sharpest pencil in the box. Like CE I look forward to your stories.

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  29. gahlearner says:

    Oh, poor Mo. That was funny. I’m sure you’ll get your Mojo back. The Mo is already here, after all. 🙂

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  30. plaridel says:

    something got lost in translation. 🙂

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  31. Russell says:

    Funny story! Nice work!

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  32. Liz Young says:

    She might not be the sharpest knife in the drawer, but she knows the only eggs that should be in the kitchen are those from the grocery.

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  33. Lynn Love says:

    I feel Mo is a little out of touch with reality – to say the very least! She’ll have to go before she eats something else she shouldn’t. Great story that made me smile Sandra

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  34. Sarah Ann says:

    So funny – you’re not making up the numbers at all. Maybe Joe felt sorry for Mo because she isn’t going to be able to survive in the world without being looked after, poor hen.

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  35. Hahahaha! XD
    Nice one!!

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  36. Love this. Sharp sense of humor. All of it works.

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