He Ain’t Heavy – Friday Fictioneers, July 2018

Copyright J R Hardy

“Aww Dad!”

“Not unless your brother goes too.”

“But he’ll hold us back.”

“You don’t go without him son, and that’s final.”

All my life… the same old story.  David couldn’t run, was no good at sports.  He couldn’t even get a girl, so he was always hanging around with me and mine.

And now he sits by my bedside, high-fives me and winks.

“Way to go, Pete.  See you when you come round.”

I was forced to share so much with him as a kid.  But nobody had to ask twice for him to share his bone marrow with me.

Too little inspiration, too little time, so it’s a re-run for me I’m afraid.  I remember feeling slightly uncomfortable when I posted this five years back.  My discomfort with sentimentality has only continued to ferment over time, I see.   😦  Thanks to Rochelle for leading out the field of Friday Fictioneers once again this week.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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61 Responses to He Ain’t Heavy – Friday Fictioneers, July 2018

  1. neilmacdon says:

    That’s unusual for you. Where’s the darkness? It’s way too heart-warming 🙂

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    Poignant and impacting. Even better the second time around.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. Anita says:

    Moving story.
    That’s what siblings are for- sharing & caring.

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  4. Excellently compact, every word a gem. Great writing Sandra

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  5. Well done. Although having a martyr for a brother might get old, especially if he never held it over you.

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  6. Iain Kelly says:

    It’s nice to look on the light side sometimes 🙂

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  7. StuHN says:

    Well, needing bone marrow is dark enough. Glad you had the good brother. Nicely conveyed.

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  8. pennygadd51 says:

    Dear Sandra
    Nice things sometimes happen to people. Family members often make sacrifices for each other when needed. Why is it sentimental to celebrate that in fiction occasionally? I liked your story!

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  9. Rowena says:

    What a lovely story, Sandra. Blood is thicker than water, although it doesn’t always work out that way.
    Tonight, my husband and I went to watch a local dance festival for school students as our daughter was performing. A recurrent theme was how there was a lot of bad in the world, and the students were wanting to make the world a better place. Quite often, I have that sense of “I’ve heard it all before”. However, this time it was somehow more powerful. Some of the dances reflected the darkness, the alienation of the individual, perhaps a sense of being lost in the urban landscape and then there were the bright happy faces and colourful costumes. It reminded me to keep trying and to keep wearing my rosy-coloured lenses and not to let myself be drawn across to the dark side. It was a great reminder.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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    • Sandra says:

      I’m currently judging a regional writing competition, and the entries I’ve read from under 18’s are… well… surprising. Thanks for reading Rowena.

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  10. gahlearner says:

    Sentimentality is needed sometimes, as a balance to the darkness. Wonderful story, Sandra, and it is just right, not too sweet. The slightly guilty tone of the narrator prevents it from drowning in saccharine. 🙂

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  11. I like that you went on the light side. This isn’t too smaltzy at all.

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  12. Dale says:

    For me, this is an original read and would you stop with the “I’m not comfortable with sentimentality” hogwash… it’s what makes you, you. If you were all dark and death all the time, you’d be like someone else…

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  13. yarnspinnerr says:

    Great write. Very elegant.

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  14. trentpmcd says:

    A very sweet story. Oh well, we can’t be dark all of the time 😉 Very well done!

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  15. Love this… somehow you never know when you will need that brother… a great story with a moral

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  16. lisarey1990 says:

    Very moving piece.

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  17. jillyfunnell says:

    Lovely tender story, Sandra.

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  18. tedstrutz says:

    That’s kind of the way it goes, nice piece, Sandra.

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  19. prior.. says:

    yowza – dense ending – and that is how family comes back around to connect – nicely done

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  20. Susan says:

    But you do sentiment so well Sandra. Even for a recycle, its a good story.

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  21. That’s such an emotional ending Sandra. I can understand why you are /were uncomfortable with it 🙂

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  22. As different as chalk and cheese until the latent brotherly love kicked in. Delightful Sandra.

    Click to read my FriFic tale

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  23. A lighter reflection on what is a painful event. Very well written, as usual Sandra.

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  24. Liz Young says:

    This is lovely, and fresh to me who haven’t been around as long as some!

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  25. EagleAye says:

    Wonderful piece. So often we don’t know what we’ve got until something tragic happens. My heart is smiling.

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  26. I was scared how this was going to end.
    Thanks for the hopefulness 🙂

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  27. Such a sweet story 🙂

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  28. But you do “sentimentality” so well. What a beautiful story, Sandra. It came full circle for David and Pete, and that’s often how life goes. Well done! =)

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  29. plaridel says:

    brotherly love at its highest. well done.

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  30. This is a nice story, I like it! I was worried about how it would end. Well done

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  31. Dahlia says:

    Heartwarming and reaffirms faith in the goodness of humans 🙂

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  32. draliman says:

    Lovely story, his brother will be there no matter what.

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  33. Sarah Ann says:

    Sentimental can be good. This is such a positive tale of brotherly love, even if it does stem from early sibling annoyance. 🙂

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  34. This is perfect. I loved it.

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