Major Attraction – Friday Fictioneers, July 2018

Copyright Liz Young

Memory is what I have instead of a view.

He hasn’t spoken, yet I’ve heard him.

And he knows.

I stumble past, trying not to catch his eye.  I might as well endeavor to fly.

My sister pauses, reading the plaque on the outer cage perimeter.

“Poor thing,” she mutters.

Those who know no evil suspect none.

His head is cocked towards me.

But you, my dear

Those dark eye-holes glitter.

… are quite another thing.

I look away.  He can’t possibly know…

Come, sit awhile.  We have much to share…

“You go ahead, sis, I’ll catch up with you.

It’s that time of the week again, time for Friday Fictioneers.  Thanks to Rochelle, for all her efforts in keeping this particular attraction on the road.   Apologies to Hannibal Lecter for the opening line… 😉

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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63 Responses to Major Attraction – Friday Fictioneers, July 2018

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Up to your usual chilling best, Sandra

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Dear Sandra,

    That certainly sent chills running rampantly up and down my spine. Subtle and creepy. And I mean that as a compliment. 😉




  3. ceayr says:

    A creation of mystery and horror with so much hidden depth.


  4. Delightfully dark and twisted tale, simply stunning.


  5. Iain Kelly says:

    How nice that they have found each other, the perfect soul mates!


  6. The cry of a guilty conscience – brilliant as always Sandra


  7. pennygadd51 says:

    Now that really is a chilling tale. Beautifully done, Sandra! (Mind you, I’m not sure if beautiful is quite the right word)


  8. Excellent. I like your quote. It’s sort of a flip of “The wicked fleeth where none pursueth.” The pacing is dead-on here.


  9. Excellent, chilling, Sandra. The recognition of like souls.


  10. jillyfunnell says:

    Your story unfolds really well. Chilling indeed.


  11. Sue says:



  12. Yep! What everyone else said. Chilling, beautiful, well-paced. Yummy. Thanks.


  13. This is so creepy and intriguing. Expertly done!


  14. Liz Young says:

    Definitely chilling, this one. Well done!

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Dale says:

    Sinister and yet, I love the unspoken understanding… must be my creepy side coming out…


  16. plaridel says:

    he knows… what’s she gonna do now? your guess is as good as mine.

    Liked by 1 person

  17. prior.. says:

    and I agree with Dale…
    I also love how this sounded:

    Come, sit awhile. We have much to share…


  18. It amazes me that you have not written a best seller…yet.


  19. Oooo, that sent shivers down my spine. That would make a wonderful prologue to a novel.


  20. Anita says:

    What happens next? That can be another love-story!
    Six Minutes Of Fame – Anita


  21. I had to read it a couple of times, I enjoyed it so much. A deeply mysterious and chilling tale, written so well in so few words! =)


  22. 4963andypop says:

    Reminds me of the thestrals in the Harry Potter series. You cant see them until youve seen death. In this iteration, you cant read the caged beings thoughts until you’ve…?

    Love “Those dark hollow eyeholes glitter.” Shiver!


  23. granonine says:

    Makes me want to scream “Don’t stop! Don’t sit! Don’t Talk! Run!!”


  24. And you are back with your creepy, chilling tales. Great stuff 🙂


  25. draliman says:

    Creepily chilling. Keep going, don’t stop!


  26. Dahlia says:

    I can’t help but wonder what happened next!


  27. Love it. There are secrets to hear about.


  28. It’s creepy that they have so much in common. Made me shudder.


  29. James McEwan says:

    Reminds me of;The silence of the Lambs . A real horror, but then the picture says it all.


  30. lisarey1990 says:

    Chilling. Well-written.


  31. Sarah Ann says:

    Oh wow. What does he know, or is it her paranoia? A spine-tingling read.


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