Moonlight Flit – Friday Fictioneers, September 2018

Copyright Gah Learner

Davey whinged, wanting his bed.

But Mother was in the bedroom, bundling clothes into a suitcase whilst I, ever practical, swept groceries into a box.

A quick last look, then down to the waiting taxi.  As we passed the first-floor landing window, Mother gasped and hauled us back to the floor above, moving swiftly to the fire escape.

Ella was waiting at the back.

“You saw him, thank God.  Quickly, this way.”

The rent had been high enough; but the price of staying beyond contemplation.

Could there ever be safe refuge for us?

Not in my father’s lifetime, I concluded.

After a long hot summer, September is my favourite month, (apart from May, after a long hard winter). One of my favourite author/illustrators is Rochelle Wisoff Fields, the leader of our happy band of Friday Fictioneers.  Thank you for all that you do, Rochelle.


About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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74 Responses to Moonlight Flit – Friday Fictioneers, September 2018

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A husband and father as stalker. Great tale, Sandra. I suspect, if you ever wrote a follow-up. the narrator would develop her own plans. She’s already diagnosed the problem

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  2. ceayr says:

    Another full length story, with five characters, in 100 words!
    Just how do you do that?
    Fabulous, as always.

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  3. jillyfunnell says:

    Terrifying concept, children having to repeatedly escape their own father. Very well told.


  4. michael1148humphris says:

    I expect that many a moonlight flit, has happened for this reason. A fine sharply written piece of flash Sandra


  5. Lata Sunil says:

    Quite a take on that picture. Love the story and the urgency of the running away.


  6. This is so atmospheric. The sense of urgency and desperation is palpable. A brilliant take Sandra.

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  7. Dear Sandra,

    You captured the urgency of getting the hell out and why in so few words. Wonderful.




  8. Sue says:

    Marvellously told as ever, Sandra….desperation, urgency in a few words we have the back story…..


  9. Gosh, you’ve managed to convey a huge story in these few words. Brilliantly done, Sandra.

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  10. Superb tension in this piece. I like how you move the camera around. Expertly done.

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  11. pennygadd51 says:

    Wow! Super story-telling, Sandra. You’ve given us a master-class in how to use the significant detail to illuminate both plot and character.


  12. gahlearner says:

    This is full of tension, fast-paced and frightening. A great story, Sandra.


  13. Mike says:

    Another great story Sandra.


  14. Rowena says:

    Sandra, so tragic and unfortunately a situation which is far too commonplace. Well done.
    Best wishes,


  15. granonine says:

    This is very real, Sandra. Gave me the chills. Good job.


  16. Yes, a master class indeed. Superb story telling, Sandra.


  17. James McEwan says:

    A story with lots of tension, will they ever be truly safe – maybe if they could pay the rent.
    But running from him is clearly the best option.


  18. 4963andypop says:

    Escaping into the night. A desperate scary mobve told through the lens of a level-headed kid. I could not take my eyes from the page ( or screen, as the case may be!)


  19. plaridel says:

    even with lots of characters in tow, the story flowed naturally from start to finish. brilliant.


  20. Susan says:

    Your story left me hanging on every word. I wonder what the next 100-words would tell us. Excellent as always Sandra


  21. Dale says:

    I was breathless along with them. Fabulously done.


  22. notestowomen says:

    Superb story-telling, Sandra.


  23. So well done, Sandra. I could feel the sudden tension and fear.


  24. A terrifying 100-word thriller!


  25. Excellent. A full-length movie in 100 words.


  26. subroto says:

    So much story packed in 100 words. Neat touch in showing the narrator’s practical side in sweeping groceries into a box while escaping a violent father.


  27. draliman says:

    A very dark backstory, cleverly not spelled out but quite obvious. A good sense of urgency here.


  28. So sad that the daughter has learned at too young an age how to be practical in these type of situations. You drew the suspenseful scene very well, I want to know if they got away from him!


  29. lisarey1990 says:

    So much packed into this story. Well done.


  30. How awful, he must be a really bad man. I wish them luck.


  31. Kalpana Solsi says:

    the pace and urgency of escape from a stalker/maniac is deeply felt while reading the story. Hope no family suffers this way.


  32. I felt the need to shout ‘Hurry’ as I read through the story.
    A lot of suspense for the reader, Sandra. Super great write …
    Isadora 😎


  33. Such sense of urgency with so few words.
    You are so good at this!


  34. This is a lesson a child shouldn’t learn… but I’m glad that they got away…


  35. Sarah Ann says:

    So much emotion, present, and backstory in your 100-words. I hope the daughter is wrong, that they can find somewhere safe eventually, out of her father’s reach. A taunt and tense tale leaving the reader wishing them well for their future.


  36. Meha Sharma says:

    So many characters in just a hundred words. Brilliant.


  37. Superb writing about a terrifying situation.


  38. Laurie Bell says:

    Oh no. So well written Sandra. I sensed the fear here


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