The Silent Scream – Friday Fictioneers, November 2018

Copyright Dale Rogerson

Throughout that relentless summer, Edward queued daily at the town’s only well, ostentatiously drawing less water than others.

“Let the children have my share,” he’d say, piously.  Yet alone on his land, he drank greedily from a sparkling crystal stream, newly-emerged from the upper pasture.

As time passed, he learned to avert his gaze from the hosts of amorphous, silvery creatures who congregated there each night, repulsed by the sagging mouths that moved continually in silent screams.

With the first snows, the stream vanished.

And Edward realised, raising his silver-scaled hands to his scream-less mouth, that nothing ever comes free.

Lovely photo this week from our own Dale Rogerson.  Thanks to Rochelle for enabling the Friday Fictioneers to grow and prosper.  🙂   If anyone fancies joining us in this 100 word endeavour in response to a photo each week, click on the link.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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73 Responses to The Silent Scream – Friday Fictioneers, November 2018

  1. neilmacdon says:

    A deliciously moral tale, Sandra, like the German stories I had as a child

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    A mystical moral, and serves him right! Nicely done Sandra.

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  3. You painted a vivid picture, Sandra. Fascinating story – nicely done.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  4. ceayr says:

    Egads, Sandra, nasty and scary, I love it!

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  5. jillyfunnell says:

    I do love a morality tale, Sandra, and this is excellent. Selfish git, he was.

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  6. Sue says:

    Another brilliant tale in few words, Sandra

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  7. Dear Sandra,

    Wow! I wondered at amorphous creatures if he wouldn’t suffer some fate. Well done. The two lines took my breath away.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. k rawson says:

    Ooooh, a lovely and timeless little fable you’ve crafted.

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  9. This is great. Worthy of the Brothers Grimm.

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  10. Indira says:

    Horrifying ending. Beautifully done, dear.

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  11. granonine says:

    Eternity is a long time for a human mind to be trapped in a fish!

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  12. When I saw the title, I feared the worst and you didn’t disappoint!

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  13. Dale says:

    It’s like an Aesop’s Fable and Grimm Story all rolled into one!
    Excellent lesson on greed.

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  14. A lesson learned too late. A fantastic take Sandra.

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  15. Love how your story made such wonderful use of the setting. The story moves so smoothly, too. We see him enjoying delights, denied to others, while making himself look good to the have-nots. But consequences are wonderful teachers, aren’t they? And sometimes they let some of us know that a body must pay for its keep and a mouth for what it sips.

    This was yummy to read.

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  16. StuHN says:

    Really nicely told.

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  17. jwdwrites says:

    Wow, simply brilliant! Beautiful language and a great plot worked in very skilfully. Well done.

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  18. Your title brought to mind Edvard Munch’s “The Scream”. Your story delivered on that image.

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  19. There’s no such thing as a free stream, basically. I shall keep that in mind 🙂

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  20. draliman says:

    Ha, that’ll learn him! Nice little fable 🙂

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  21. Oh I do love this… the double standards and the pretense of Edward… alas it’s only in the fables that they get their punishment… in best case the water would have been filled with arsenic

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  22. Liz Young says:

    Creepy story. The town was fortunate he was greedy – if he’d shared his water they would all be changed.

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  23. michael1148humphris says:

    Dark deeds which made me think of nights spent in a smoke filled croft, sitting round a peat fire.

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  24. Wow, He turned into a fish? That’s brilliant. A magical tale. 🙂

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  25. 4963andypop says:

    Clever and fluid backstory to the iconic painting “The Scream.” I never noticed that there is a stream in the background of these painting.

    Those silver beings you created (he is not the only one!) were repulsive and fascinating at once! And I love that you used the name Edward (after Edvard Munch, the artist.)

    This reminds me of sitting as a child in front of a painting in an art museum, creating, in my head, stories, about what was really happening, behind the scenes, in those Italian Renaissance portraits!

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  26. What is the saying, “Pride comes before a fall,” or something like that. There is indeed always a cost. And I loved the terrifying ending. It was Outer Limits (esq).

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  27. He’s only getting his just deserts.

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  28. notestowomen says:

    Great moral story, Sandra. Greed is never a good thing. Brenda’s right. Your story has an Outer Limits feel about it.

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  29. plaridel says:

    scary stuff with a moral lesson. well done.

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  30. Fantastic Sandra, very otherworldly revenge for greed and callousness

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  31. Rowena says:

    An important lesson for us humans exploiting planet Earth, Sandra…myself included. Beautifully written.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  32. Wonderfully surreal, like the way he gradually transforms into a fish. A well told parable. Well done.

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  33. i b arora says:

    but perhaps he invited it. great story telling

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  34. A diabolical tale, brilliantly done

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  35. magarisa says:

    What a powerful, haunting story!

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  36. subroto says:

    I don’t know why but thought of ‘The Scream’ by Edvard Munch when I read this. Fabulously done as always.

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