Inertia – Friday Fictioneers, November 2019

Copyright Ronda-del-Boccio

She doesn’t know why she’s on this train.

But she’s wondering whether the same inertia that’s smothered her over the years now keeps her rooted in her seat.

Stations loom, pause momentarily, and recede in the distance.  The compulsion to remain seated, to do nothing is almost erotic in its intensity.

She has chores, relationships, and responsibilities to fulfil.  And no idea where to go or what she will do when she arrives at the terminus.

Worse still, she does not even know what she wants to do.

Better to alight, return, resume… submerge.

Yet still she does not move.

 

Close call today.  The first story wasn’t working and another no-show loomed.  Off to the gym, where the second one saw light of day on the treadmill.  Thanks to Rochelle for leading Friday Fictioneers out to exercise their creative abilities again this week.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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43 Responses to Inertia – Friday Fictioneers, November 2019

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Terrific character portrait, Sandra

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  2. Tannille says:

    Something about train travel, feels like a in-between place.

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  3. Dear Sandra,

    This pretty much describes my Saturday last. I just wasn’t on a train. 😉 Well described, her inertia is tangible.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  4. Anita says:

    Train is moving and stops, but she doesn’t. She’s lost in her train of thoughts.

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  5. The power of inertia. Well-captured moment.

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  6. You took us right into her muddled mind. Simply brilliant Sandra.

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  7. Dale says:

    Oh this is so well done, Sandra. I can totally feel her lack of willingness to do anything.

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  8. Sigh. Poor thing. I hope she finds some motivating factor … Hopefully within herself …

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  9. Iain Kelly says:

    I like the idea of her staying put. Perhaps when she reaches the right station she will know that is where she should alight.

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  10. tedstrutz says:

    This is an interesting story from that prompt.

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  11. msjadeli says:

    Inertia is one of the greatest forces in the world to overcome. You’ve swirled around the concept in a compelling way, Sandra.

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  12. Nobbinmaug says:

    I know that feeling when anything other than the status quo seems appealing. Meanwhile, the fear of change collides with need for change creating that inertia. Well done, as always.

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  13. granonine says:

    Beautiful portrait of this poor woman who senses there’s more. . . . .something. . . . somewhere.

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  14. draliman says:

    A great look into her state of mind.

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  15. Liz Young says:

    And yet you are right at the beginning of the link page again! I always end up halfway doen among the also-rans! Good story – I could feel her despair and inertia vividly.

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  16. plaridel says:

    i think there’s still hope for her if she learns to stop indulging in self-pity.

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  17. bearmkwa says:

    Strong voice. great story.

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  18. Intense, I feel the intensity of erotic deliberation. brilliant stuff

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  19. Abhijit Ray says:

    I love this kind of journey without any purpose, sitting by the window and watch stations go by. Every other person has a purpose. May be one person does not. Heavens will not fall.

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  20. James McEwan says:

    My goodness, I can feel her indecision in her paralysis. I sensed her latent fear, but of what?

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  21. Russell says:

    A really good portrayal of internal conflict here!

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  22. Really good … I love the way you portray the two alternatives… for some reason the lyrics to “Should I stay or should I go” popped up in my head.

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  23. So well written. It sounds like she’s running away from her normal life by not moving.

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  24. I could feel her inner turmoil.

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