After All This Time – Friday Fictioneers, February 2020

Copyright Dawn Miller

An unguarded moment… a lapse in resolve and her past hurtles into view, cartwheeling her into the familiar labrynth of guilt, apprehension… partial regret.  It can take days to work through the nightmare, to rationalise, to paper over the images.

Today is different though.

Fluttering chequered tape, police vehicles and the white-suited technicians, that’s what’s different.

The sudden prospect of discovery sparks a frisson of excitement, the possibility of resolution dispelling her torpor.

She pauses by the farm entrance, before driving on, relaxing as the miles accumulate behind her.

He deserved it – she must never forget that.

That’s all that matters.

 

I love the dynamic application to this photo, which lends drama to even the most ordinary of scenes.  Thanks to Rochelle for leading out the Friday Fictioneers come hell or high water… in the UK it’s a mixture of both right now.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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57 Responses to After All This Time – Friday Fictioneers, February 2020

  1. Reena Saxena says:

    A lot is left unsaid. Will there be a Part 2?

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  2. Tannille says:

    I wonder if the can pull off the innocent victim? Pt2 perhaps 😀?

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    I loved the way you built her mind

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  4. Anita says:

    Not many get what they deserve 🙂
    She is a strong woman and knows what she wants.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    We saw something very similar in the prompt – obviously silo’s are a good place to store a dead body. A day of reckoning for husbands that deserved it. Well written as always.

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  6. ceayr says:

    Wonderful flow from doubt to certainty to decisiveness.
    La classe.

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  7. Very cool. The tone reminds me a bit of Patricia Highsmith. Sort of a psych-rationalization of a heinous act.

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  8. Dear Sandra,

    It’s always good to focus on the reasons. Hope the justifiable homicide plea works for her in court. As always, your subtlety draws us in and goes for the jugular.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  9. Even if she’s caught I imagine she’ll consider it to have been worth doing. Excellent.

    Here’s mine!

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  10. granonine says:

    I’m glad he got what he deserved. I hope she escapes. She’s not a danger to anyone else. Yet.

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  11. Well, they always do….no? Flawless execution, we are rewarded every time.

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  12. Good one! Love the build-up. 🙂

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  13. Ah, you ‘ve managed to tell a huge story in just a few well written words. Loved this, Sandra.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  14. Dale says:

    Love all the emotions you had play in her mind. Hopefully she keeps on driving and remains free from the law – only you can have us rooting for a killer! I’m sure he had it coming! Ugh. Now I’ve got the Jail Cell Tango from Chicago playing in my head!

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  15. You leave just enough unsaid that I wonder what he did to deserve it, if he only deserved it in her mind. Her resulting emotions don’t lend themselves to being abused–relief would have been upper most, I think. I also think that retribution was a long time in coming, perhaps they were no longer even in contact with each other. Just the way you have my thoughts rambling shows how good this flash is that you’ve created. Well done!

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  16. msjadeli says:

    She lived to tell the tale. Skilled wordsmithing, Sandra.

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  17. Nobbinmaug says:

    I’m kind of getting the feeling he didn’t deserve it.

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  18. The past has a way of resurfacing, especially when guilt and regret are involved. You built the complexity of the character so well!

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  19. Great writing, Sandra. 👏🏻

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  20. Violet Lentz says:

    Brilliantly rendered suspense, Sandra. Love it.

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  21. draliman says:

    At least if she’s caught it will provide her some sort of closure, it doesn’t sound like she’s handling it too well.

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  22. Liz Young says:

    ‘The miles accumulate behind her’ – perhaps she does get away with it.

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  23. Jade M. Wong says:

    Ooh, an ending that leaves some questions!! I wonder what he did to deserve this ending? And will she get away with it? Very exciting story, Sandra 🙂

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  24. Russell says:

    That’s a really great scene you’ve set up there!

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  25. bearmkwa says:

    WOW! A good story to start of the morning for sure. It sounded so very real. Love the reveal, too. He deserved it… I’m sure of it. 🙂 ❤

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  26. Great story Sandra. Sounds like a win win for her as she’s going to enjoy the adventure come what may and she’s unburdened by regret or guilt.

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  27. susanmehr says:

    For me, this sounds like a great ending to a good story. “He deserved it.” That’s all that matters, and she’ll get away with it.

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  28. James McEwan says:

    Murder in the air. There is mood of triumph and perhaps she will relish the chase – if she doesn’t get away with it.

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  29. plaridel says:

    i don’t think she could escape the long arm of the law. it will catch up with her

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  30. pennygadd51 says:

    Terrific story (as always!). The first paragraph made me think that she’s a domestic abuser. The rest of the story made me think that this time she’s gone too far. She doesn’t come across as a victim at all.

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  31. Love the way you build up to the little reveal at the end.

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  33. This could totally be the prologue to my story! Good one Sandra, but then I’ve never read one of yours that wasn’t.

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  35. Dee | Grammy's Grid says:

    Interesting, she escaped!

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