The Walk-In – Friday Fictioneers, August 2020

Copyright Ted Strutz

 

I know it’s the right house.  I inherited her memories, but not the associated emotions and for that I am truly grateful.

What I am about to do is not the person I am.  But there was an agreement, a debt that must be honoured.

Although he recognises me, I think at the end he realises the person behind the face is not her.  She would never do this, and he’s always banked on that.

As I leave, I think I hear the murmur of a sorrowful soul, finally at peace beyond the Great Divide.

But now, on with my new life.

 

This may not be understood without the title, and possibly not even then.  🙂  Glad to see our leader, Rochelle, is safely back at the helm of Friday Fictioneers this week.

 

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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75 Responses to The Walk-In – Friday Fictioneers, August 2020

  1. trishsplace says:

    Wow Sandra, have you heard about Walk In’s? Good story.

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    In between the lines we understand why one soul might have wanted to leave that body. Great stuff Sandra.

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  3. Reena Saxena says:

    i’m curious about the debt, the agreement that must be honoured 🙂

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  4. neilmacdon says:

    I love the way the intriguing character in this is the victim, who we never see

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  5. Dear Sandra,

    A bit of a chiller there. Interesting perspective from a soul inhabiting a body not her own. Makes me think of Quantum Leap. (An American program where a man leaps from person to person each week and assumes their identities in case you’ve never heard of it. 😉 ) In any event, I’ve probably said too much. A good one as always.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Dale says:

    Oooh, I love this and I had not heard of walk-ins so I did click the link. Still, I felt there was a meeting of souls. So good.

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  7. Tannille says:

    So much story. Over too quick. I crave to read on.

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  8. Anita says:

    I understand the depth of emotion, though the protagonist claims to have not inherited the emotions.
    We all are repaying or have to repay debts. May we do so with grace.

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  9. This would be entirely believed in the Indian culture where so much mythology revolves around rebirths.

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  10. Liz Young says:

    Thank you for introducing me to the concept of reincarnation of a different kind.

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  11. pennygadd51 says:

    Wow! Even though I don’t know about Walk-ins, the sense of your story comes across very clearly and powerfully.

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  12. granonine says:

    Clicking the link helped, but I think I’d already gotten the main idea. Beautifully crafted mystery, thriller, para-normal—all the right stuff.

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  13. I had read a horror story of the person who committed crimes by taking the face and memories of others (didn’t know that they’re called walk-ins). The good part in this one though is that he deserved what was coming?

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  14. Wow, very intriguing and mysterious. I love it!

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  15. tedstrutz says:

    So much said without being said.

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  16. I didn’t know about walk-in’s but I got the creepy idea anyway. Well done as ever.

    janet

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  17. Dora says:

    Questions, questions! So intriguing. A great read. ~Dora

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  18. msjadeli says:

    I just wonder what weapon she used. He earned it that one. A+ on all accounts, Sandra. Something that has crossed many minds from both sides of the (living) chasm.

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  19. I have never heard off walk ins and will research, like Rochelle I thought about Quantum Leap! How funny, great interesting take

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  20. doodletllc says:

    Very powerful and intriguing – I would like to follow along for more of the story.

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  21. I loved this. Great story.

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  22. plaridel says:

    i’ve read about walk-ins. ronald reagan was said to be one of them. but we can always believe what we want to believe. regardless, good writing as usual.

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  23. draliman says:

    I’d not heard of walk-ins but got the gist of what was happening on a second read. Looks like the new soul is a bit more confrontational than the original.

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  24. Like several before me, I’d not heard of walk-ins – thanks for the link. An intriguing tale indeed.

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  25. siobhan1967 says:

    This was both chilling and comforting, in that the soul was finally able to be at peace. She must have had a pretty miserable life before that though. Beautifully well-written, thank you for this.

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  26. I really liked the way that the story is built up, prompted me to reflect on loss, duty, and finding peace. Good story.

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  27. I must admit I read it twice as I was a bit confused. The second time it fell into place.
    The link was also helpful. What can I say? A lot of creepy tales this week and this one gets high marks. Have a wonderful day … Be Safe
    Isadora 😎

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  28. James McEwan says:

    This phenomenon is quite common to one degree or another, when you can’t get the thought of someone out of your mind. Taken too far mental illness develops and souls are destroyed.
    Certainly an attention grabbing story – I liked it.

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  29. subroto says:

    Nice one Sandra, surfing for the soul. Wonder what’s the policy on returns?

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  30. wmqcolby says:

    I’m with Rochelle on this one and Joy as well. However, I certainly agree you didn’t write enough — left me wanting to read more! Nice job, Sandra!

    Five out of five Quantum Leaps.

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  31. Wow, I’d say this one will take the prize for the most imaginative story concept.

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  32. Bill says:

    I agree with these other comments. This is excellent.
    The intrigue pulled me in right off.
    The wiki about walk-ins was useful, but your story stands on its own, in my opinion. I also wanted more.

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  33. Nobbinmaug says:

    I have a feeling the price this “lost soul” paid for the new body was high. There’s a lot of implied backstory, but I feel like I have a clear picture.

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  34. I hadn’t heard of walk-ins before but i could catch the sense of change leading to her leaving.

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  35. A story that really piques my curiosity. Good one.

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