La Jeunesse – Friday Fictioneers, September 2020

La Jeunesse

Long shadows stain the shimmering cobbles; it’s still hot for late September.

Weatherworn cottages bordering the square ogle with unblinking eyes as she lifts the damp curls from her neck.  The boy from le tabac wipes down tables, shifting glasses, never taking his eyes off her.

He appears to be weighing up his chances; she’s contemplating her options.

Condensation drips down her glass; sweat beads his upper lip.

She rises, stretches languidly before swaying along the track back to the canal and the brightly-painted barge.

He may follow; he may not.

Ҫa ne fait rien…

There will always be others.

 

So as we begin the long haul into the darker end of the year, and on the brink of a second Covid wave, thanks once again to Rochelle for her leadership of Friday Fictioneers, which is probably about the widest social interaction I get these days.  😦

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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76 Responses to La Jeunesse – Friday Fictioneers, September 2020

  1. ceayr says:

    Ouah!
    Les femmes anglaises, toujours intéressantes…
    Your usual p’tit chef-d’œuvre, Sandra

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Wonderfully atmospheric, Sandra, full of langorous passion

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  3. Dale says:

    This was delicious, Sandra. I was there, the proverbial fly on the wall…

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  4. Reena Saxena says:

    I like the last line 🙂

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  5. Tannille says:

    He may follow, he may not. A universal mating dance. Great atmosphere.

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  6. Anita says:

    She knows she will have followers for sure, whether this boy or someone on the street…

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  7. Dee | Grammy's Grid says:

    I’d say he will follow 🙂

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  8. Dear Sandra,

    I enjoyed every sensuous detail of this piece. Merveilleuse!

    Paix,

    Rochelle

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  9. Iain Kelly says:

    Wonderful Sandra, I could feel the heat and taste the sweat, not to mention the hint of danger. I’ve been reading a lot of Georges Simenon lately, and this very much put me in mind of that. His novels based around the canals of Paris have a similar tone. Excellent.

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  10. Love the hopeful last line. Well done

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  11. Ah, the philosophy of youth. Beautifully written.

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  12. Worry not, there are plenty more fish in the canal. Delightful as ever Sandra.

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  13. Loved the atmosphere you created. I was there! Great writing as ever, Sandra.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  14. Ah, c’est la vie! Love the atmosphere you’ve painted.

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  15. Dora says:

    Easy pickings for an eternally young vampiress! Once again, your story catches and sweeps me away, Sandra.

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  16. msjadeli says:

    Nice scene-setting. Methinks he will follow.

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  17. granonine says:

    I love the tension, the not-knowing you have left us to deal with. Excellent 🙂

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  18. Sue says:

    Oh I think he will follow😊 Wonderfully descriptive.

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  19. Beautifully atmospheric, I love the contrast between the glass and the lip, really smart.

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  20. Danny James says:

    What descriptive language.

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  21. Oh, you brought us in as the eavesdropper on the minds … nicely done. I wish it was still that warm here … 😉

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  22. Yes! Youth? at its best. Or not. I’ve never been good at flirting this way but boy-o-boy, your brought it to life!

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  23. plaridel says:

    if he decides to follow, he should bring enough garlic for protection. 🙂

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  24. pennygadd51 says:

    Absolutely terrific! So many good things. I particularly liked “Condensation drips down her glass; sweat beads his upper lip.” Wonderfully well done, Sandra!

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  25. I think he will follow, but love that she’s not fussed. Enticingly descriptive piece!

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  26. James McEwan says:

    Wonderful, I feel the body language come through and I am drawn into moment of an expectant lull.

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  27. robprice59 says:

    Love the anticipation.

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  28. Defined late September langour beautifully.

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  29. trishsplace says:

    Excellent writing. You really brought us along and it was enticing!
    I’m very late again with my contribution. I’m number 53!

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  30. ahtdoucette says:

    A fascinating maybe-romance tale – and those are always the best kind. Well told.

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  31. I like the lyricism and the ambiance very much. Also matching of : the beads of sweat oh his upper lip and the condensation of her glass, a clever way to chart their encounter.

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  32. draliman says:

    Very atmospheric. The eternal dance.

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  33. I love the attention to small details, the condensation, the sweat, the sexual tension. Well done.

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  34. The detail and the overbearing sense of heat give a wonderful passion to this, Sandra, truly great description and capturing of moment and emotion.

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  35. notestowomen says:

    Excellent writing, Sandra. Atmospheric and captivating.

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  36. Nobbinmaug says:

    Excellent job setting the scene.

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  37. Indira says:

    When you are young ‘ He appears to be weighing up his chances; she’s contemplating her options.’
    Excellent writing, as usual, dear Sandra.’

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