Watching Out For You – Friday Fictioneers, November 2020

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

She’s caught glimpses of him all day, dodging behind hanging rugs, peeping from dark alleyways.

She’s unconcerned;  it’s happened many times before.  Her therapist describes this as working through the grieving process.

She’s never heard him before though; that’s something new, that low insistent voice.

This way…

Quickly, Mother

“Go with the flow,” her therapist says, “see where it takes you.”

It took her to a grassy knoll on the outskirts of the market, where she watched the silver arrow streak across the sky.

It afforded an excellent view of the carnage caused when the missile found its target.

Late to the squares this week – couldn’t finish the story before we left for our last gym session before the lock down, tried when I returned, power cut intervened, and then internet wouldn’t reconnect.  Maybe I should have just gone for a lie down instead…  Thanks to Rochelle, for her consistent and reliable leadership of Friday Fictioneers.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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26 Responses to Watching Out For You – Friday Fictioneers, November 2020

  1. neilmacdon says:

    “ecellent view” might suggest she enjoyed what she was seeing. I wonder, is she somehow the cause of the missile attack?

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    What a culmination to her tragedy. It sounds a little like our world today. You think that was bad? Wait for this. Well written as always.



    PS You can tell me if I’m off base. 😉 It’s been known to happen before.


  3. Anita says:

    So sad. Touching story.
    So many have lost their loved ones through these acts of mindless terrorism…
    No therapy can heal…


  4. Dale says:

    This is late? Sheesh…
    That said, what a fantastic take. I like to think he guided her out of there on time and not because she was the cause.


  5. liz young says:

    You definitely should have had a lie down instead – this is great.


  6. Wow. At first I was full of empathy for the trauma, but then when she was complimenting the view I thought otherwise!


  7. Iain Kelly says:

    I read it as his ‘ghost’ saving her from the missile attack. Nice to think she has someone watching over her.


  8. granonine says:

    If she saw the “arrow” streaking across the sky, then it didn’t hit her. But its after-effects could well have affected her. Maybe she went to see her son 🙂


  9. ceayr says:

    Oh I do love it when you go all dark on us!


  10. I really enjoyed this one. So well written. It’s good she listened to his voice, though sad for those left behind.


  11. Dora says:

    Her son’s looking out for her, isn’t he? What a tragic (for all the carnage), but tender ghost story!


  12. bearmkwa says:

    Ohhh, a perfect halloween ghost spook here. Very well done.


  13. msjadeli says:

    I love the mystery here and how the curtains between life and death and reality and illusion dance in the breeze. Great story!


  14. Tannille says:

    I enjoyed the psychology of this story. Hard to pull off, yet you did.


  15. draliman says:

    He’s still watching over her.

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  16. James McEwan says:

    Yes, we tend to carry our passed love ones with us, we want to see them. I like how you introduced the idea of being observed and guided out of danger.


  17. plaridel says:

    imagined or not, the son has become her guardian angel of sorts. .let’s leave it at that.


  18. pennygadd51 says:

    Multiple layers in this piece. I’m especially curious as to the son’s death; it feels likely hat it was in some way violent.


  19. magarisa says:

    I imagine she’ll never forget the traumatic scene. Fortunately, her son is with her in spirit.


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