Snap!

She twangs the elastic mercilessly against her inner wrist, and the compulsion subsides.

She can do this… everything will be fine.

Within a minute, the feelings resurge.  That gnawing sensation in her gut, a rising flutter of panic in the chest, the short, shallow gasping for air.

She twangs it again, harder.  This has worked before and it will work again.

It does.  She masters the rising tide, breathes more easily.  All will be well.

Or will it…?

The sensations overwhelm her.  Disappointment, regret, shame… yearning.

Ripping the band from her wrist she plunges through the shrubbery after the man.

First Friday Fictioneer post of December 2020. This weirdest of years will soon be behind us, Many thanks to Rochelle for her continued efforts on behalf of this happy band of writers.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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51 Responses to Snap!

  1. ceayr says:

    Jings, raw emotions laid bare.
    Is she going to do what I think she’s going to do?
    Women, eh…

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  2. Reena Saxena says:

    It felt like bipolar disorder. But the end is startling 🙂

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  3. neilmacdon says:

    What a clever use of the string!

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  4. Wow, this was such a fast moving read! The end came as a surprise though, didn’t see it coming…

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  5. Dear Sandra,

    I thought perhaps the string was to help her quit drinking…or smoking. You leave me with the feeling it’s more sinister than that.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Dale says:

    I have heard of those using an elastic band to “snap themselves” out of whatever compulsion they have. I love how you used the prompt. Dunno what he did (if anything) but I’d keep walking were I him!

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  7. Tannille says:

    I had a friend who flicked rubber bands to avoid eating. Sounds like the protagonist might have deep psychological issues.

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  8. Very innovative use of the prompt. The man sure is in for interesting times 🙂

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  9. Anita says:

    You have packed in a lot of emotions.
    Hope she succeeds in her mission and is safe.

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  10. What a take on the photo prompt. There I was thinking her compulsion was to do with alcohol or tobacco and then you shocked me with that last line.

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  11. granonine says:

    OCD? I wonder if the man has any clue, and if she adores him or hates him!

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  12. You built up the tension then took off at speed! Excellent.

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  13. The story gathered momentum, and then snapped! Good one, Sandra

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  14. Iain Kelly says:

    I’m pretty sure she shouldn’t be going after the man, but well, some compulsions need to be fulfilled!

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  15. jwdwrites says:

    I had no idea where she was going until the last line. I liked the way the emotions seem to take on a new meaning when you got to the end. 🙂

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  16. Oh my god! whats happening here, sounds sinister but could be the nerves getting to her, wonderfully evocative

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  17. michael says:

    I have mixed feelings, the situation sounds dangerous

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  18. AshleyDannie says:

    Oh wow! I feel her anxiety! Great job!

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  19. A very surprising ending Sandra. It was easy to get wrapped up in her emotional waves.

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  20. msjadeli says:

    Your story makes me want to know more. I like the snap of the band paralleling her resolve snapping.

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  21. bearmkwa says:

    believe it or not, i tried that technique once… all it got me was a bruised wrist. love the story. :>

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  22. draliman says:

    Quite a surprise ending. I guess one elastic band wasn’t enough.

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  23. plaridel says:

    …and then she woke up. it was just a bad dream after all. 🙂

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  24. writelindy says:

    Lots of suspense in those few words.

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  25. James McEwan says:

    Great stuff. Self-control over addiction or compulsive fads can be difficult.She needs a man or that particular man?

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  26. Nobbinmaug says:

    There’s nothing like someone jumping out of the shrubbery at you. Well crafted, as always.

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  27. Sometimes the compulsion can be interrupted and overcome, sometimes not. She’ll have to start over after. I felt for her. Great writing as always!

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  28. You did a great job of painting a picture of her internal turmoil. Great story, Sandra.
    -David

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  29. Great story! Really felt the line “That gnawing sensation in her gut, a rising flutter of panic in the chest, the short, shallow gasping for air.”

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