Fall From Grace – Friday Fictioneers, June 2021

Copyright Brenda Cox

I’m backing quietly out the door.  Thankfully, I’d stifled an apology, and in the throes of their passion they’re unaware I was even there. 

In the outer office I press cold hands to my burning cheeks. 

My thoughts are for his wife and their beautiful children.  Can it be that the idyll was nothing more than a charade, a carefully crafted illusion for public consumption?

It’s unthinkable he would risk losing his family, reputation, the lifestyle everyone strives for.

But if he would, I ponder, attempting to smother a gnawing, burrowing embryo of resentment…

why had he not chosen me?

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About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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55 Responses to Fall From Grace – Friday Fictioneers, June 2021

  1. Sue says:

    Oooh…brilliant!

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    I liked the way censure turns to jealousy here

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  3. RedCat says:

    Oh, I like the way embarrassment gives way to censure to jealousy. Would guess that would be a more common reaction than most would admit.

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  4. Anita says:

    Human nature.
    Contemplation, jealousy, cheating…
    Some people can take advantage and blackmail.
    The ending is quite something! 🙂

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  5. Dale says:

    Hah! You judge, you criticize, and you then lament you were not the chosen one. So well done, Sandra!

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  6. Dear Sandra,

    Ouch, that last line goes for the jugular as jealousy rears its ugly head. Masterful writing and twist.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  7. oneta hayes says:

    Great story. I’m curious how this picture prompted you to make the connection to your story. I guess the title makes the tie-in. Enjoyed it very much and the last line was a great ending. How careful we must be not to point fingers at the sin of others. Our own impurity shows up.

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  8. Tannille says:

    The man sounds like a player. Maybe she will be next?

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  9. I wonder if her jealousy will lead her to have a quiet word with his wife. Nice one Sandra.

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  10. pennygadd51 says:

    What a shrewdly observed and vividly described scenario. “I press cold hands to my burning cheeks,” is such an accurate description.

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  11. Sandra says:

    Many thanks Penny. 🙂

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  12. I love the illustrative final line. It casts a shadow on the narrator’s judgment. Well done.

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  13. granonine says:

    Oh, excellent! You had me on pins and needles right up to the last liine!

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  14. msjadeli says:

    Why women fight over bad boys will always be a mystery to me. Expertly told tale with a biting twist.

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  15. elmowrites says:

    Such a common story, but the ending makes it a new and different one. The emotions are palpable in this, Sandra

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  16. Wow, the ending was superb!

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  17. I can see your writing skills haven’t diminished at all since my last visit (too long ago.) Amazing how you can see the dark side of every situation so clearly. 🙂

    janet

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  18. plaridel says:

    varying degrees of emotions emotions expressed in 100 words. well done.

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  19. jenne49 says:

    Ooh, human nature summed up in 100 words. So bitingly accurate, Sandra. Wonderful.

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  20. Dora says:

    Sandra,
    And the drama begins, not with simple moral outrage but growing resentment! I think this two-timer better watch out. Nicely set up.
    pax,
    dora

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  21. Lorraine says:

    I think the “player” will regret his choice of “playmate.”

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  22. James McEwan says:

    I am now convinced I will never be able to unravel a woman’s mind. Made me think of Bill Clinton.
    I like how you made our character question their own self-worth.

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  23. This is great the way her mood changes. Intially doing what she believes is right then realising, once she has time to asses, her own feelings and wants.

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  24. I worked for a married man that bedded any woman he could. Once, he took the staff out on his sailboat and, after ten drinks too many, one woman said, “Why has he never approached me? What am I? Chopped liver?” pretty creepy. Well done.

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  25. subroto says:

    “gnawing, burrowing embryo of resentment”
    That line just nails it. Another brilliant story from you Sandra.

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  26. draliman says:

    Ooh, I’ve felt that way a couple of times – why not me!
    The guy with the family she saw reminds me of a certain politician currently in the news 🙂 Somewhat prophetic.

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  27. Nobbinmaug says:

    You shuffled through a lot of complex emotions in a mere 100 words. Impressive.

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