The Illusion – Friday Fictioneers, January 2022

Copyright Brenda Cox

She is watching him paint.

And he is watching her watching him.

Her lack of desire to understand his paintings is only matched by his desire not to have to explain them.  She simply wishes to observe; he only wishes to create.

The tenuous bond continues to hold them together, as it has done for months as she pauses on her way to the city each day.

At times either one may conjecture a relationship, a nebulous image with clouded edges.  But it is simply conjecture.

Today, however, he looks up.

Smiles.

“Hi, I’m Vincent.“

And there…

The bond is broken.

Happy New Year to all Friday Fictioneers around the world. Let’s hope for a better one, both the year and the world. Many thanks to Rochelle for all that she does for our happy band of writers.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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42 Responses to The Illusion – Friday Fictioneers, January 2022

  1. Dear Sandra,

    I felt rather sad that the illusion was broken. No doubt they will miss each other. Could this be the famous Vincent? At any rate, intriguing and well written. You left me wanting more.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    A perfect and balanced indifference broken by an intrusive confidence, Beautifully crafted, Sandra

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  3. elmowrites says:

    I once had just such an innocent, illusory relationship. Neither of us ever looked up and spoke; perhaps for the best. Lovely depiction of the characters’ inner world

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  4. GHLearner says:

    I love that the bond is broken in the end. It was a balance and could have gone on forever, but people want to communicate in more than silent coexistence.

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  5. Iain Kelly says:

    How tragic that the spell is broken, but then, that’s life I suppose – never as magical as it should be! Expertly done.

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  6. Vartika says:

    Oh! The bond is broken.. sad.

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  7. pennygadd51 says:

    You’ve crafted that story beautifully, Sandra. It’s a devastating critique of romantic love.

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  8. Dale says:

    Wonderful write, Sandra. An attraction that remains on the outside of the line that, it was only a matter of time, either one would feel the need to break, regretting it as soon as it is done. Poof! No more mystery. So good.

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  9. Anita says:

    Some relations are meant to be just like this- soundless & nameless.
    When the soundless bond is broken with a Hi and introduction, there may be more than meets the eye.
    Am sure she will come back to watch him again. Maybe watch from a distance with a binocular 🙂

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  10. msjadeli says:

    The unspoken beautiful fragility of the situation, an illusion doomed to temporality. It was worth his attempt to step into reality but an unfortunate miscalculation 😦

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  11. Bill says:

    A well-told story, Sandra. My favorite line is “…relationship, a nebulous image with clouded edges.”

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  12. James McEwan says:

    Lovely story as it captures the internal mesmerising thoughts of watching an artist create.

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  13. Bear says:

    Awww. perhaps not broken… perhaps now it will strengthen. Lovely story.

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  14. So sad – I wonder if she was expecting a less Westernised name?

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  15. granonine says:

    Those last four words hit like a sock in the gut. Really good, Sandra.

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  16. Who knows in which direction this new relationship will travel? One can only hope. Delightful, Sandra.

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  17. In this case, the illusion of the relationship was far better than the reality. Superb ending and so well written, Sandra!

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  18. michael1148humphris says:

    Sometimes it is better to dream, yet I was sadden by the ending. So be it

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  19. Danny James says:

    Where will this take him?

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  20. i b arora says:

    name is the first and very sturdy wall that divides

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  21. jillyfunnell says:

    Sadly, dreaming of the moment is almost always the best way.

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  22. draliman says:

    This is the bit where she’s supposed to say, “shh, no names” 🙂

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  23. Seems like it’s the start of something new 🙂

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  24. Nobbinmaug says:

    Ouch! Those tenuous bonds can swing either way. It can be worse to never try and never know. Expertly depicted.

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  25. So well drawn, Sandra. It is too often true, that the stories one tells themselves do no stand the weight of spoken words.

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  26. plaridel says:

    good or bad, once the bond is broken, it can never be undone. but it opens up to great possibilities.

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  27. ahtdoucette says:

    Isn’t it true that illusory relationships are often the best? Here is hoping they can build a new one out of the ashes, but … probably not.

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  28. Margaret says:

    It’s probably better that the dream was broken with a smile and a friendly greeting rather than withering away slowly. Can you imagine them going on like that until they’re old and doddery? Perhaps now they’ll both be able to sustain the magic in their memories. It ended on a good note. I like the pace and rhythm of this story, as well as the way you’ve shown the fragility of their bond. Lovely.

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