The late afternoon thunderheads erupt suddenly, sweeping the storm quickly across the Highveld, its progress heralded by the pungent aroma of newly-dampened dust.
A bakkie pulls alongside her stationary car, the driver shouting over the crackling skies and torrential rain.
“Jump in – your husband sent me….”
“It’s ok, I’ve called for Roadside.”
“Traffic’s chokka, the road’s flooded back there.”
Every instinct screams no…
But she’s wet, cold, desperate.
Get a grip, girl, she thinks, reaching for the door handle.
He leans across to unlock it, his features briefly and unforgettably illuminated by the recovery truck’s headlights as it pulls up behind.
The photo this week reminded me of our time in Johannesburg, when summer storms arrived at almost the same time late afternoon/early evening for days on end. The wonderful smell of wet earth was always a signal that it was close at hand. The highway dangers are pretty much the same everywhere these days. Thanks to Rochelle for all she does for Friday Fictioneers.
And here’s a picture of our new rescue cat, who, someone says, is a Russian Blue. So this is Bellarovsky.
I know that terror well. I broke down at night on the R21
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Never a good thing to break down at night on a motorway. But a whole other matter in Gauteng.
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Dear Sandra,
This one chilled me to the bone. Something tells me her husband didn’t send the man. Love the cat’s name. 🙂
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks for reading, Rochelle. It’s Bella really, but when she’s naughty she’ll get the longer one. Especially if she invades the Ukraine.😆
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Chilling to the core…
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Never can be too careful. Scary situation. Always trust the gut.
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Thanks for reading.
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I felt a chill run up my spine. I love how you leave us hanging… in fear!
Sweet new member of your family 🙂
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Thanks for reading Dale. And our new family member is settling in very quickly now. There’s just the little matter of two fish tanks…🤔
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Uh oh… Those are attractive places… 🙂
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Saved by the recovery truck… hopefully!
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I think so. Unless the first guy puts up a fight.
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Yeah, usually that type will just run…
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Breaking down and a storm, what a scary day! Well written story!
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I’m going to read this as an innocent helper and oh now the rescue truck is here so there are two people to help her. Isn’t that lovely?
OK? Because I don’t like the alternative. 😉
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I want some of whatever you’re on, Jen. 🙂
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Phew – just in time! And what a powerful image you create with your last sentence. “He leans across to unlock it, his features briefly and unforgettably illuminated by the recovery truck’s headlights as it pulls up behind.”
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Thanks for reading, Penny. Glad you liked it.
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I liked where the story took me, and I love the cat.
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Thanks Michael.
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I have forgotten all the good weather breakdowns, but none of the bad weather ones. Well told, a always, Sandra.
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Exactly so, Bill. 🙂
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The same features she sees days later on the evening news, wanted for a string of murders… God is merciful. Such good writing, Sandra.
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Thanks for reading, Lisa.
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You’re welcome.
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Wow, you really captured the sinister feel of the situation
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Thanks for reading.
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I feel her fear and dilemma, or maybe it’s my dilemma not knowing who is the good guy and who the bad which is disturbing. Can you add a happy ending? Lol.
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something bad is about to happen
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Or maybe has just been avoided.
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Love the smell of rain coming. Sweet cat.
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Thanks, Trish.
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A very chilling story. I was stressed until the last line (whew). Welcome to your newest family member. She’s so cute!
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Isn’t she just? We lost our lovely Sophie a few weeks before Christmas, and the time seemed right now to fill the gap. Thanks for reading.
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Could the “good” Samaritan be named C.E. Ayr? I originally read the “new-dampened LUST” instead of dust. It put a whole new twist on the story. 🙂
We once had a cat name Pestilence. He was deserving of his moniker.
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Would I get in a car with CE Ayr? With his propensity for seeing off women? Nah! Thanks for reading. Loved your cat’s name.
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You really racked up the tension. I literally sighed with relief at the end!
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Thanks, Keith.
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Thank god the recovery truck arrived when it did. I hope the driver also remembered that face.
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Thanks for reading Liz.
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Ooh! I love the thriller aspect of this!
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Wow. That was a close call. I could feel her indecision and the temptation to just be out of there. Love the imagery, especially the ‘newly-dampened dust’ and the ‘crackling skies’. Had me right there.
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Thanks for reading Margaret. 🙂
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Love this snapshot picture of South Africa. I felt like I could have been there with the picture you conjure, including the terrifying feeling of being stuck out alone on the Highveld in flood weather. What a tableau. Nice to meet the new family member as well. Hi Bella! Be a good girl. Please don’t invade Ukraine. =D
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Thanks for reading. Bella says ‘hi’. And then ‘did you bring treato’s?’
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saved by the bell i guess? not quite sure of a happy ending.
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No one can be sure these days.
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A good samaritan or was this a lucky escape. The suspense was compelling.
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Thanks James.
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Thank goodness the recovery truck showed up. I hope she sees it.
Bellarovsky is a handsome cat!
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Hopefully the bakkie driver and the recovery driver are not working in tandem. Bella is a character. Well, many characters really.
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This is very scary and I’m glad it ends with the truck arriving. Bella is gorgeous.
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I was terrified for her! So glad the rescue truck came in the nick of time!
That’s an impressive cat 🙂
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What a great take, Sandra. I was right there with her – and the tension! Phew. Bellarovsky’s a fine cat – has an aristocratic look and what a lovely name. I too have a rescue cat (whose name I borrowed for this week’s FF story). Saffy came home about twelve weeks ago – aged 13 – but very bright and playful and an absolute joy.
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That doesn’t sound like he was sent by her husband.
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Great atmosphere and tension building up to the ominous ending.
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