The Prodigal Daughter – Friday Fictioneers, September 2022

Copyright Jade Li

A woman turns to God, they say, when she’s too old for the devil.

My sister was the exception to the rule, rushing headlong into the church’s arms as a teenager, like a rat from a sack.

The entire congregation attended her funeral, led by the vicar, an impressive man in late middle age.  We chatted.  He was charming, held my hand a second too long, rubbed his thumb along my wrist. 

His wife was stunning.

And bored.

The devil, it seemed, might have a little more work for me still.

Maybe it was time for me to return home.

I seem to have been busy throughout August, intending each week to participate but never finding the time. And this morning a quick effort as the day’s work begins… Thanks to Rochelle, our cherished birthday girl leader of Friday Fictioneers.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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36 Responses to The Prodigal Daughter – Friday Fictioneers, September 2022

  1. neilmacdon says:

    Lovely deft touches that paint the picture of these people


  2. Dear Sandra,

    You put me in mind a little of my aunt who became deeply religious in her latter years, nevery having been so before.
    Subtle words between the lines tell the story here. You’re so good at this. Glad your schedule allowed you time to participate this week.



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  3. Bear says:

    Positively evil little tale… so full of innuendos. Loved it! 🙂


  4. Iain Kelly says:

    An awful lot of scandal under the veneer of church respectability it seems.

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  5. granonine says:

    So much going on here, so much tragedy, evil, ungodliness in what is supposed to be a godly place. Well done, Sandra.

    Liked by 2 people

  6. msjadeli says:

    Sandra, I love that first line and the rest that follows. You’ve got my curiosity going on how her new assignment will play out. Great story!

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  7. elmowrites says:

    I love the hints and winks you’ve threaded into this story, Sandra. Deftly done, as ever.


  8. I think we all have a bit of both inside us. Brilliantly told as always.


  9. James McEwan says:

    Temptation for a devil woman.


  10. Dale says:

    Your subtlety is so deft. I am “forced” (not unwillingly) to read these stories more than once because so much is to be found.

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  11. trishsplace says:

    You aren’t talking to yourself and you cleverly intrigue us all!
    Who will be the next victim? Vicar or his stunningly bored wife?


  12. Bill says:

    Well done, Sandra. The phrase, ‘like a rat from a sack’ is striking. 🙂


  13. I hope the devil comes out strong in the narrator. Sounds like the vicar needs to be taken down a notch or two ~ maybe three. Nicely done!


  14. plaridel says:

    i shudder at the thought. more said between the lines.


  15. A handful of words that says, and suggests so much! Nice one, Sandra.


  16. authorfleurl says:

    There’s a lot more going on in this story than just 100 words. The vicar sounds dodgy for a start! Great story.


  17. You are a master of putting a lot of story into 100 words, Sandra as the other commenters have said. Love all the subtext. I hope you have a good week.


  18. michael1148humphris says:

    Impressive, a lot said which painted a fascinating picture


  19. Vartika says:

    Good story Sandra! Agreed with the first line.


  20. Loved the subtlety.
    A good call on the narrator’s part to head home.


  21. Oh dear.
    Wonder whose side she will end up on.


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