Ciao – Friday Fictioneers, 1st February 2023

Copyright Alicia Jamtaas


Now is the moment when two worlds diverge.

He doesn’t know it at this time, but the very act of straddling the windowledge suggests she already has one foot in his world and the other elsewhere.

Gazing into space while he talks…

restlessness in his embrace…

he will reflect on these memories later, though they’d passed unnoticed at the time.

Tonight the apartment will be empty.

He will wait.  And worry.

Phoning around, he will eventually connect the awkward silences, will almost hear the shuffling feet…

and then he will be angry,

and hurt,        

remembering this moment.

Only 28 days now until the first day of Spring. Be still my beating heart. Thanks to Rochelle for the time she devotes to Friday Fictioneers. Click on the link to join the weekly party.

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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60 Responses to Ciao – Friday Fictioneers, 1st February 2023

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    In retrospect it is sometimes easy to pinpoint these moments, and then wonder how we missed them at the time. Nicely done.

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Beautifully observed and beautifully wrought, Sandra


  3. Tannille says:

    The store reads like art. So real. I particularly like “He doesn’t know it at this time, but the very act of straddling the windowledge suggests she already has one foot in his world and the other elsewhere.”


  4. Dear Sandra,

    It seems both of our heroines this week are less than heroic. As always well penned.



    Liked by 1 person

  5. A sad but true reality many a times in life.


  6. Rowena says:

    Very well written with great insight.
    It’s a shame that your much anticipated Spring means the end of my Summer. Lately, it’s been a bit too hot and I prefer Autumn and Spring but I’ve had so much fun lately on the ferries on the harbour. I want this Summer to last forever.
    Best wishes,


  7. elmowrites says:

    Aw, your story is the mirror image of the romance in my head. All good things must come to an end though. Interesting shape to the writing – I liked the stuttering flow.


  8. Dale says:

    You do know how to weave so much story in so few words.
    And what? Your spring starts March 1st? How come it starts March 20th for me? 😉


  9. msjadeli says:

    So many things can only be seen in retrospect. Good tidbits pieced together here to make a whole, Sandra.


  10. michael1148humphris says:

    A great take on the prompt Sandra,


  11. Sue says:

    Well done…hindsight is a wonderful thing….


  12. A delightful take on the prompt. Having watched these two for about 10 minutes it was hard for me to see anything but kindness between them. Well done.


  13. Loved the straddling the window ledge thing; clever


  14. Bill says:

    The twisty turns of relationships. You make excellent points, Sandra. Nicely told.


  15. plaridel says:

    i feel sorry for him for ignoring the warning signs. may he learn to let go and move on.


  16. Like the old saying goes “Hindsight is 20/20”.


  17. dorahak says:

    The “now” that will haunt him in the future, so beautifully conceived and executed, Sandra, because so true to life.


  18. granonine says:

    Lots going on here, both out in the open and under the surface. Well-crafted.


  19. CGraith says:

    Very nice! The phrasing you used truly communicates this young man’s sad day and how he only put the pieces together in retrospect. I feel like this could easily be a poem, award winning that is!


  20. Lovely analogy and metaphor. Loved the phrasing!


  21. authorfleurl says:

    A complex story in just 100 words. Well done, beautifully written.


  22. poetisatinta says:

    Great insight in this piece 🙂


  23. If only he’d noticed. There’s no comfort in being wise after the event.


  24. Nobbinmaug says:

    Those little signs are much easier to read in hindsight.


  25. athling2001 says:

    Well done. So sad.


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