Straight Talking (Friday Fictioneers, 16 March 2012)

Friday Fictioneers:  This week’s prompt, and the start of the ‘chain’ can be found at http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/2012/03/14/photo-prompt-for-100-word-flash-fridayfictioneers-22/

 Straight Talking

You don’t like me, right?   I sense these things.  But you will.  I’ll wait.

What matters is that he likes me.  A lot.  So you better get used to having me around.

If it comes to that, I don’t particularly like you.  Well, not much anyway.

You need too much attention.  You know that?  High maintenance, his buddies say.  No way to a man’s heart.

I’m special to him, we go way back.  And I’m gonna be here for quite a while yet, honey.

So quit licking that ass will you, and fetch your ball.  We’ll try again, huh?

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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64 Responses to Straight Talking (Friday Fictioneers, 16 March 2012)

  1. Atiya says:

    Oh that was very cute. And I agree it was not sad. It’s like a competition and the dog threw down the gauntlet. I know that you’ve already seen mine but here’s the link again: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/03/friday-flash-fiction-alpha.html

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  2. janmorrill says:

    Great story, and the last line was a twist. I love dogs, and you got the attitude down perfectly!

    Here’s my link:
    http://jansthoughtsovercoffee.blogspot.com/2012/03/waiting-for-my-boy-fridayfictioneers.html

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  3. I was trying to figure out whose perspective that was from the whole story… whether it was the dog, or somebody who knows the dog. It’s only now I realise it’s a woman who’s involved with a man who owns the dog; and the dog doesn’t like her.

    It’s pretty funny, I can appreciate the story now. Perhaps it’s just too late at night to read it right… Then again, I read the others easily enough…

    http://littlewonder2.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/friday-fictioneers-good-dog/

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  4. unspywriter says:

    Great story! Love how you led us one way, then it turned out to be another.

    Here’s mine: http://mymusings-maggie.blogspot.com/2012/03/friday-fictioneers-go-to-dogs.html

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  5. TheOthers1 says:

    It cracks me up that you took this from the girlfriend’s perspective. Totally had be believing otherwise. Great job! lol.

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  6. Quill Shiv says:

    I read this drabble wondering if the speaker was a woman or a dog…woman/dog. And then I realized at the end, it was the woman struggling to make friends with the dog! Brilliant!

    My link is here: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/dichromatic/

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  7. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    One of the best so far this morning. I really enjoyed the way you made us think, think, think. Girlfriend to man’s best friend. A heart to heart for the ages.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/answer-to-love/

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  8. Russell says:

    Great job, Sandra. I agree with Doug, it is one of the best I’ve read so far.
    I like the rivalry between the two.

    thanks for the nice comment on mine. http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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  9. Sandra says:

    Thanks for commenting so kindly Russell. 🙂

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  10. Hi Sandra,
    You got me. I thought I was hearing the voice of the dog until the last line put things in a whole different perspective. Although I’m sure some people would lick their ass if they could! Great voice in this story!
    Here’s mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  11. erinleary says:

    Well done – and I love the stories from the dog’s point of view. Thanks for reading mine!

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  12. elmowrites says:

    Lol, a curious little piece. I was convinced it was the girl talking at the start and then I began to doubt myself round about the high maintenance line. Bu the ending made it all clear. The confusion meant I had to read it a second time, but I enjoyed it. You clearly showed the jealousy between his two girls!
    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/friday-fictioneers-lucy

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  13. Yeah…you had me fooled too, right up until the end. I enjoyed this piece and thank you for sharing it!

    ~Susan (Here’s mine! http://www.susanwenzel.com/)

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  14. niiko47 says:

    Definitely got me with this one. I love it when a twist works…and it certainly did here!

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  15. Janet says:

    Great work Sandra. Love the fact that it’s about an age old rivalry – who really is Man’s best friend?

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  16. Jeannie says:

    Oh that was wonderful! Let’s get the pecking order straight right from the get go!! I loved this.
    Very good!!

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  17. teschoenborn says:

    I agree with the other comments! Great twist at the end.

    Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/03/15/friday-fictioneers-2/

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  18. Superb stuff with a good element of head scratching. When I realised it was the girlfriend’s voice, I had a good chuckle. A very effective twist that doesn’t lean on the dun-dun-duuun! factor.
    Also, I think you communicate a great sense of character here, both for the girlfriend and the dog. No easy thing to do in such a short time. Brilliant work and well deserving of all the positive comments 🙂

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  19. Siobhan Muir says:

    Can’t tell if it’s the woman talking or the dog, but either way I loved the challenge in the voice, and either choice would have me giggling! Well done, Sandra! 😀

    Here’s mine:
    http://siobhanmuir.blogspot.com/2012/03/outside-of-dog-100words-for.html

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  20. Ah-Ha! That was a nice little turn at the end. I always enjoy a surprise ending. Very well done indeed.

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  21. Sandra says:

    Thanks for the compliment – I’m glad it worked for you.

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  22. Beth Carter says:

    Ha! Got me. Love the plot twist about the woman vs. dog. Great!

    Mine is at http://www.banterwithbeth.blogspot.com

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  23. Beth Carter says:

    P.S. You know how to live–cruising the French waterways almost half the year. Nice.

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  24. OMG! I laughed out loud because I thought you were talking about people at first. Thanks for a laugh and a surprise on me. Loved it.

    kestrel

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  25. I love the switched perspective. All of these stories show just how the universal the experience of pet ownership and relationships can be used to powerful effect with so few words.

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  26. Madison Woods says:

    haha, at first I thought it was a new woman in his master’s life, but even funnier that it turned out to be another dog. Good twist 🙂

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    • Sandra says:

      Well, actually it was the new woman talking, though the reader was supposed to assume it was the dog, until the last line. But your take on it is even funnier! It’s amazing the different ways that people have read this. 🙂

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  27. Parul says:

    this is awesome! could also be renames as “From on bitch to another?” 😉
    I enjoyed reading this a lot! Great take on the prompt! 🙂

    Parul
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/premonition/

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  28. Parul says:

    This is awesome! Could also be renamed as “From one bitch to another”! 😉
    I enjoyed reading this a lot! Great take on the prompt!

    Parul
    http://faitaccompli.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/premonition/

    sorry about the typos in the earlier one!

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  29. The age old rivalry between woman and dog! We don’t write about it often, but it certainly exists – I know from my own experience. Guilt rises when I think about how often I would have preferred being with my dog to being with my family.

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    • Sandra says:

      Thanks for commenting. In our household, I think the rivalry was between me and my husband for the attention of the dogs. Though I think the boy-dog was a bit possessive about me … 🙂

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  30. I love the TOTAL confidence you gave to the dog–arrogance, in fact. Great job!

    BTW, thanks for visiting and commenting on my site–it was appreciated.

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  31. LOL. Very funny. Love the last line zinger.

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  32. Sandra says:

    Thanks for commenting. No problem – yours is a great site!

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  33. Judee says:

    I loved this, such fun! And of course, at first I thought the dog was thinking to the master’s new girlfriend, so what a lovely and fun turnabout it was! I really enjoyed this.

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  34. LOL, this was great. The established dog in the house, telling the newbie it how it’s gonna be. Hilarious last line, too. This was a very strong piece, enjoyed it a lot.

    My entry is over here: http://joannakneilson.wordpress.com/2012/03/16/flash-fiction-friday-send-mitsy/

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  35. Heheh. Nicely done!

    Here’s mine: http://wp.me/p24aJS-3m

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  36. Lindaura says:

    Gresat use of a misleading nearrator and good quality sassy point of view!
    sorry it took me so long to get my comments in – been herding cats…

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