The January Lament (Trifextra Week 52 Challenge, January 2013)


The challenge for this weekend was to write a 33 word example of ‘personification’:  

“You forget what that is?  It’s ‘personification’, the practice of attaching human traits and characteristics with inanimate objects, phenomena and animals (http://literary-devices.com).  It’s when the wind howls, the car door grunts, and the front porch shrugs its shoulders under the weight of its own history.  Remember?  For some writers, it’s the backbone of their art.”

The problem with 33 word fiction is that its very brevity almost demands the creation of ‘heavy’ or ‘dramatic’ work, and I quite often have a problem with that.  So again I went for something ‘lighter’ but for me very ‘topical’.

DSCF1341The January Lament

The bathroom scales groan.

The spandex pants persevere manfully, but the zipper on my skirt protests, and flab spills gleefully over the waistband.

Christmas retreats, chuckling.

Spring, the gym and Mr Atkins beckon.

About Sandra

I cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and write fiction and poetry. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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41 Responses to The January Lament (Trifextra Week 52 Challenge, January 2013)

  1. sue Cottrill says:

    More Atkins and less gym me thinks, why does it have to be every Christmas!!

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  2. joetwo says:

    Scales can lie! Remember that!

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  3. Draug419 says:

    The line about chuckling Christmas is just too good (:

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  4. My goodness but, haven’t you just captured one of Life’s dilemmas so perfectly. Wouldn’t it be a much better world if we could all indulge our passion for food ( and all the social pleasure that accompanies it) and not worry about the toll it is taking on our waistlines and arteries, etc.?!

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  5. Dawn Lamond says:

    Gleeful flab is the worst 😉 Great personification!

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  6. Kristin says:

    Christmas can be so spiteful, oddly. Great take on the challenge!

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  7. atrm61 says:

    Ha!ha!Loved this,Sandra:-)At least your bathroom scales only groan,mine have run away & hidden themselves under the bed-now I can’t get to it or onto it ;-)Loved the personification-I have to learn brevity-am terrible at it,lol!

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  8. barbara says:

    my flab accompanies me to the gym every weekday morning at 5 a.m. I’m the one who laughs – my fat cries as sweat rolls . . . well said, Sandra!

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  9. deanabo says:

    What a perfect idea for this prompt!

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  10. Gina says:

    I despise my scale. It says mean things! Thank goodness for yoga pants!

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  11. Suzanne says:

    Ha! This is great Sandra! I love the line “Christmas retreats, chuckling” – wonderful use of personification.

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  12. jannatwrites says:

    Ah, the weight – the gift of holiday cheer that keeps on giving. I’m pretty sure my jeans’ zippers have defied all laws of physics by remaining zipped 🙂

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  13. tedstrutz says:

    Damn, you hit it on all cylinders… ‘gleeful flab’ indeed! You have my vote, Sandra.

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  14. kymminbarcelona says:

    Oh, have I heard that chuckling before!

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  15. muZer says:

    Brrr.. The centuries old (if I may say so) relation between holidays and weight.. Always gets you.. Loved your play of words especially “Christmas retreats, chuckling.” 🙂

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  16. BrownGal says:

    I hear a collective groan from the audience or is it a Amen?! Nice.

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  17. zennjennc says:

    At least the scales only groan instead of mockingly lauugh

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  18. cshowers says:

    My scales beg me not to step on them, and I am happy to comply. 😀 Very good personification!

    Blessings,
    Cheryl

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  19. Amelia says:

    Excellently put.

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  20. Sandra says:

    i love this! Despite the fact that my scales and spandex are sharing the emotions yours display 😐

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