Smack Head (Trifecta Challenge, Week 62)

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The man dropped from the sky, hitting the ground only yards away.  Who knew that a body could make so much noise impacting with the pavement?  I tried to scream but no sound emerged, and I was literally frozen to the spot.  People bumped into me from behind, then carried on walking unperturbed, some of them adjusting their stride to step over the obstruction ahead.

The man struggled to his feet, brushing down his suit.  Catching my eye, he collected his bowler hat which had landed nearby and raised it gallantly to me, before disappearing into the crowd.

Was I going mad?

I hurried after him, catching him up on Oxford St.  As I reached out, he stepped off the pavement into the path of a lorry.  No one around me noticed and the lorry trundled on down the road.   I glimpsed his face flickering in and out of view beneath the chassis, caught in the back axle. Still smiling.

Sweat broke out on my forehead; my legs felt weak.  I decided to skip the office and go home.  I was obviously ill, hallucinating.

Shivering on the platform at Regent St underground station I saw him again, up near the tunnel entrance.  As the train emerged from the gaping mouth of the tunnel he smiled at me, before jumping into its path.  The crowd seemed oblivious; this was crazy.  Was I dreaming?

I got on the train.  Minutes later I looked up, and there he was sitting opposite me. He raised his hat again.  I ignored him.

He followed me off the train, dogging my footsteps.  I turned and he stopped dead, inches away from me, still smiling.

So I smacked him across the face, and his head fell off.

I smiled; it was very satisfying.  After all, he wasn’t real.

But now there are all these people screaming and running around.  The police have put me in handcuffs, and there’s a white sheet, soaked with blood on the platform.

This is madness.


This was an entry for the weekly Trifecta Challenge, rules below.


1a : the natural opening through which food passes into the body of an animal and which in vertebrates is typically bounded externally by the lips and internally by the pharynx and encloses the tongue, gums, and teeth
b : grimace <made a mouth>
c : an individual requiring food <had too many mouths to feed>
2a : voice, speech
b : mouthpiece
3: something that resembles a mouth especially in affording entrance or exit: as
Please remember:
  • Your response must be between 33 and 333 words.
  • You must use the 3rd definition of the given word in your post.
  • The word itself needs to be included in your response.
  • You may not use a variation of the word; it needs to be exactly as stated above.
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About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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51 Responses to Smack Head (Trifecta Challenge, Week 62)

  1. deanabo says:

    Suspenseful! I really liked this.


  2. sue Cottrill says:

    Some dream , or nightmare I love your mind


  3. Another warped mind….I love it!


  4. Jennifer says:

    Confusing, but enjoyable. I’m perplexed.


  5. doverock says:

    Were you mad? Is this why the van is taking you away? I read leaping forward to find out what next, what will be revealed to unravel this mystery… gripping.


  6. Oh, most excellent, Sandra!


  7. lol. Like. the head falling off is a stunner.


  8. Very interesting premise. It sounds like a nightmare world or this person is so out of touch with reality that they did something that they didn’t realize they had done. Either way, I want to know more now. 😉


  9. Kim Song says:

    I love it! Very intense! Kind of reminds me a little of Alice chasing the White Rabbit… and that ending, fantastic! Makes you wonder if we’re all just a little mad! ;P


  10. Suzanne says:

    Fantastic, as usual! I love this piece so much.


  11. Oh interesting! I thought it was death/the grim reaper he kept seeing and loved it when it turned out that he was the one bringing death.


  12. I like it… something sadistically humorous about it.


  13. ah, you turned the tides, smack-dab on us!


  14. Very cool story. Sometimes people lose their grasp on reality when a traumatic event happens


  15. tedstrutz says:

    I saw someone go crazy before my eyes. Now the people are screaming and running around. Loved the ending, Sandra… in fact I loved the whole thing. Very surreal.


  16. muZer says:

    Whoa.. quite a thriller this one. Enjoyed reading.


  17. habibadanyal says:

    LOL. Now that was something! 😀 Hilarious.


  18. writelindy says:

    Effective story telling of a dark tale. I really loved the way that you wrote this one Sandra.


  19. sugarhighdd says:

    What a chilling story! I’ve never read anything like it before. So thanks!:D


  20. madness indeed!! i really enjoyed the pace of this. i love the use of the word prompt. just really enjoyed it as a whole!


  21. Annabelle says:

    Unnerving and trippy; the images are all both vivid and so unlikely that it really does convey a sense of madness. Well done.


  22. Draug419 says:

    This is f***ing brilliant lmao I love it so much!


  23. Wow. This is so spooky. And a very interesting tale. Nicely done!


  24. Sandra says:

    This reminded me of a story I read once by Graham Green, completely different plot of course but the dark madness is there. Brilliant!


  25. jannatwrites says:

    Wow, this was crazy (in a good way :)) The whole time I was wondering if it was real or nightmare. I’m still not sure – but I liked it!


  26. atrm61 says:

    I tripped on this Sandra;-)Loved the headless torso photo you added & an interesting tale indeed!What if such a frightening thing were to happen?Made me wonder if it was really drug induced hallucination or a parallel reality-quantum theory kinds?:-)Great job!


  27. Esther says:

    I love your surreal work!


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