Not Made in Hollywood – Friday Fictioneers, November 2014

Copyright Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Mrs Robinson slid off the kitchen table, smoothing her skirt over her knees.

It would be nice, just occasionally, if he’d stay awhile afterwards, perhaps share a glass of wine, a cupcake even.

As ever though, his mind was now elsewhere. She studied his muscular back, remembering a time when …

He turned, his dispassionate gaze raking her body from head to toe.

Then his face softened, as though taking in her needs, her frailties.

“If you’ll show me where the dustpan and brush are, I’ll sweep these up for you, shall I?” he asked, indicating the yellowed toenail clippings on the kitchen floor.

Why? What were you thinking?  Tut!  Friday Fictioneers kicks off on Wednesday again, under the stewardship of our gracious hostess and the provider of this week’s photographic prompt – Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.   If it hadn’t been for Rochelle’s story, I wouldn’t have known it was Hollywood  – it looked a bit like Hong Kong to me.  I might have disgraced myself here … I may still have, in fact.  😉

 

About Sandra

I used to cruise the French waterways with my husband four or five months a year, and wrote fiction and poetry. Now I live on the beautiful Dorset coast, enjoying the luxury of being able to have a cat, cultivating an extensive garden and getting involved in the community. I still write fiction, but only when the spirit moves me - which isn't as often as before. I love animals, F1 motor racing, French bread and my husband, though not necessarily in that order.
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90 Responses to Not Made in Hollywood – Friday Fictioneers, November 2014

  1. MrBinks says:

    😀 Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant!

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  2. Dear Sandra,

    You had me laughing out loud at the second paragraph and cringing at the last line. Gaaah! Brilliant piece of writing my dear. Is it any wonder I look forward to your entries every week?

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  3. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    A pedicurist who makes house calls? Oh, my. You had me going there…wherever there was. I love what you do in so few words. Well done.

    I’ll get that wine for you now.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  4. wmqcolby says:

    You flummoxed us all, I’d think. This is one of the many reasons you’re one of my “go-to” authors, Sandra. You just know how to tell ’em.

    Seeing Hong Kong in the picture wasn’t actually a bad thing, really. It has everything to do with perspective, which is what stories here are made of, right? Yup!

    Five pairs of clippers for this one.

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  5. Dang, you’re good, Sandra. I was getting all flushed reading this and then…..poof!…..back to reality.

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  6. Well here’s to you, Mrs. Robinson!

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  7. Hah! You got me, like, I imagine, you’ll get everyone. Wonderful!
    Claire

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  8. Super switcharoo, Sandra. Bravo!

    janet

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  9. Well done! Sandra. Lovely little twist at the end.

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  10. Archon's Den says:

    I also thought it might be in Asia – India perhaps. A well-done story like this is never a disgrace. In his later years, my father had a home-care nurse who occasionally trimmed his toe-nails and swept up the detritus. 🙂

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  11. paulmclem says:

    Nice idea- did the POV switch around after the ‘…’?. Like you I had no idea where the picture was. TBH unless it’s really obvious I don’t think it matters…it’s just a street scene, neon lights etc i.e. Bangkok for me 🙂

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  12. I must say that sometimes understanding the real need is a challenge.. But toenail clippings can be a turn-off.

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  13. elmowrites says:

    Now that’s a different use for a kitchen table! Although heaven knows how she got up there! Thanks for the bait and switch, and for giving me a good chuckle.

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  14. liz young says:

    Very clever twist, though toenails are not my favourite subject!

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  15. Sandra, Great twist at the end of a good story. I didn’t think that quite looked like Hollywood. I thought perhaps it was a Chinese section if it was. I then read Kent’s comment. I would have never guessed Hong Kong. Well written as always. 🙂 — Susan

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  16. My my, you’re quite the minx, aren’t you? I felt sorry for her and then, I still felt sorry for her, although it was a different sympathy. 😊

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  17. wildbilbo says:

    Laughed out loud. I was not expecting that ending – well done.

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  18. draliman says:

    At least he cleared up after himself (even though it wasn’t what I was expecting!). I’d stay for a cupcake. She sounds lonely, poor thing.

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  19. kalpana solsi says:

    The ending was a bit unexpected. Great read.

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  20. Hello darkness, my old friend …. until my toenails are cut! Great switch-up, skillfully done as always.

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  21. i b arora says:

    wonderfully written

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  22. Well, my dear, I shall join you in that glass of Merlot to help wash away the sexual angst you just put me through… lol

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  23. storydivamg says:

    Hollywood or not, your twist at the end makes the story, IMO. Nicely handled this week, Sandra.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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  24. John Yeo says:

    Excellent ~ Lovely response 🙂

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  25. Regardless of the clever twist, now I’ll be singing this all nigh. Brilliant, Sandra, brilliant!

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  26. plaridel says:

    darn, he must be a true professional. doesn’t engate in hanky-panky. 🙂

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  27. mira65 says:

    That was amazing. Thanks for letting me start my day with a smile.

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  28. That was funny but also sad. And I was really taken in.
    So he didn’t go into plastics, or was it oil?

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  29. Bastet says:

    LOL … lovely ending … put my naughty mind in its place! Ciao, Georgia.

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  30. rgayer55 says:

    Hmm, I always wanted a few toenail clippings with my wine. It sounds like he’s the cupcake. And all along you had me thinking he was just a Wham-Bam Thank-You-Ma’am kind of guy. I’m in awe of your talent, Sandra.

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  31. You thoroughly tricked me, Sandra! Nice twist! Well done.

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  32. Caerlynn Nash says:

    (Previous comments have said it all.) Well twisted! 🙂

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  33. Amy Reese says:

    Ha! This is great, Sandra. I love the bit about the cupcake and raking her body from head to toe. You had me going. I didn’t know it was Hollywood either. Most of the time, I have no idea what any of these prompts are. Truth?! And, I stayed for the song!

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  34. jazzytower says:

    Heat
    Twists
    Turns
    Toenails???!!!

    There goes my imagery….have to start over.:)-

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  35. Hahaha! Great twist, well done 😀

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  36. Honie Briggs says:

    “Tut,” indeed. My mind was totally elsewhere. Excellent.

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  37. Margaret says:

    Fun story with a great ending – yellowed toenails – ugh! Poor Mrs Robinson.

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  38. Sarah Ann says:

    So well done. I don’t think you can blame the reader for going in the direction you sent them, and I think I’d rather have stayed there than been dragged back to toe-nail clippings. Interesting podiatry technique, having the client sit on the kitchen table. Lovely story wonderfully written.

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  39. helenmidgley says:

    loving the humour of your stories, you never fail to raise a chuckle 🙂

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  40. Great descriptions, Sandra. You brought the story in a large arc, ending with reality. Not made in Hollywood, indeed.

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  41. Geez, and I thought it was just kinky sex with the chambermaid.
    Randy

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  42. A tenderly sad an unexpected twist to the story.

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  43. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Sandra, my favorite world traveler/author, Love your story and point of view. The toenails are funny – I have a hard time with mine now that my knees don’t bend like they used to. Your story is superb! Nan 🙂

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